'Paradise' Book by JennieTaylor3

Cover: It's eye catching and it looks original. 5 points.

Title: I'm not gonna lie; when I saw it I thought it was a place now that I've read it. I don't think 'Paradise' is the right name for it. Paradise is the name of a place not a person. It has the look to capture readers but people will get disappointed if that's what they are expecting. 8 points.

Summary/blurb: It would have been better, if you wrote a part of a dialogue in the book as the summary. I'm seeing different families and many grammatical errors which makes it hard to read and understand it. Tackle it after you've thought it all out. 5 points.

Plot: I couldn't finish it because I didn't understand it all. The first chapter was good but everything wasn't; from the dialogue to descriptions. You could do a lot better and I know these things take time but you've got to know where you are going with the book before you start writting. 5 points.

Character development: Since I couldn't follow the plot, there's no way I'd be able to follow the character's development. 5 points.

Style of writting: Third person is a bold way of writting but not many people are good at it. 5 points.

Grammar: Most of the errors are punctuations but the spellings are okay. 5 points.

Total: 33 points.

Here's the advice.

Sweetie if you want to write a book, you are meant to run your ideas thoroughly. I mean many book ideas come to mind since you can write a book about anything.

Take a deep breath and think on what you want to write about.

When that's out of the way, focus on how you want to go about it. From the style of writting, the themes to be used, the characters and the roles they play , the dialogues and don't forget the title.

Now you work on the cover. To me a cover can only be made after you know what you want to write about.

Then you can go into finding out what's your main genre and how to make your book stand out from others.

What most people do is go for a simple clichè and use a common trope. Then they make it complicated, that way you will get readers and keep them.

The cover looks awesome by the way, nice work.

Hope this was helpful, you've got to think deep and hard to get what you want.

'Some people have it easy at unlocking their inner child while other don't.' -THEO

Have a nice day ♤