'33 lost but not the end of Nib and Win's love' Book by nhela0721

Cover: The cover gave me anime vibes, which was accurate to were the Author was going with this story. 5 points

Title: '33 lost but not the end of Nib and Win's love', I prefer titles which are catchy. The title is long and doesn't really give me an insight to what the Author was talking about. I get that love is the main deal here but what does the '33' stand for? 5 points

Summary/blurb: Since it's a love story,  then its on the right track. Not too long and boring nor too short and confusing. 10 points.

Plot: This is where I was very confused, since the main characters are both male are were the ones meant to fall in love; why is their story kind of clichè? Don't get me wrong, I love a good clichè only when some pizzaz (not sure if that's a real word but let's go with it). It was poorly handled and I couldn't finish it because I got confused. 10 points

Character development: I could only graps four other characters apart from the mains, which were the friends and the land lady. The lady looked kind of sketchy and I couldn't see more of the others. 10 points.

Style of writting: You kept switching from first person to third person. Then it was also from dramatic prose to just prose. 2 points.

Grammar: A lot of spelling and punctuations weren't done well. 4 points.

Total: 46 points.

Now here's my advice.

Try to think of a good title that could get readers to notice your book. You should endeavour to map out your book; its very important so that your readers will have an insight on where you are going with this story and stay to see how you execute it.

Don't do info dumping, if something should be known; try to break it down and put it into the dialogue. Show more and tell less.

If you have gotten the plot out of the way, your characters are next. Don't make it be that the side characters are there to make the main character look good. Yes that's what they are there for but give them their personality and not base them off on the main character. And as the book grows, let the characters grow with it.

I suggest listening to music or reading genres similar to yours to get insipiration and insight on how to do this.

In writting you have only three styles but for novels there are two; first person and third person.

For first person, you as the Author or Writer make yourself a character. You could put yourself as a main character or side but the story will be interpreted or read from your point of view. For this to work well, some people switch the P.O.V's of their characters, to give the readers more insight to the book.

For third person, you as the Author or Writer is telling the story from a universal view. You can choose to base the story on only one person and go on from there or you could base it on a group of people.

♤NOTE: When writting in third person, you will go into more details than when writting in first person.

Then if you choose to write a book that is Drama, acts and scence are used instead of chapters. Chapters are
used in prose.

Grammar is very important while writting, if you edit your work and it still doesn't look right; trying getting yourself an editor.

Have a nice day♤