'Unusual' Book by queenzusi

Cover: It's great. I love how it matches with the title. The last time we saw a plant on fire and not burning was in the bible. 5 points.

Title: Short and simple. It will attract more readers. 10 points.

Summary/Blurb: It's also short and simple but it could use a little more description. It would give the readers more insight to the book. 9 points.

Plot: So far, I've gathered that it is a thriller and a fantasy. It could use more work because I have no idea where you are take the story to. 20 points.

Chatacter development: I don't see this at all. Tori is a bitch which most Authors go for, the female protagonist always has her reason for being the way she is. Most times it is not called for and as for the other side charaters, give them some personality. They are not only there to make the main ones look good. They should have their own story to tell or what makes them the way they are. 10 points.

Style of writting: First person may be the easiet style but it has got its dos and don'ts. The Dialogue, thoughts, actions and description in general could use some work. You could bold or italic some words to show the difference in the four. 8 points.

Grammar: There were mainly errors, mostly from punctuations and paragraph spacing. 5 points.

Total: 67 points.

When you start off a book, map it out. Know where you are going with the story. I advice you write the ending before you start the beginning, that way you can keep track and not loose focus on where you are going with it.

The main character should always have a goal; it could be to get to a place, find themselves but in this case, it's to find the sister.

If you want the goal to be really seen by the readers, you should not always state it. Show not tell, that way we could get a better a visual on things.

When describing hair and eye colour, try and make it consistent. Vince had hazel eyes while Vienna had green, Tori implied that Vince and Vienna had the same eye colour.

You see the confusion💁‍♀️, stick to one colour or don't say it at all. That way the readers could picture any one to play the character.

Finally you could get an editor to help you edit your work or you could turn on the auto correct settings to prevent errors.

I hope this was helpful and congratulations on your 1k reads that's truly a big accomplishment.

Have a nice day ♤