'Tears of Glass Book by aleshawrites_

Cover: It is very intriguing and I bet that it will draw in readers. 5 points.

Title: Short and sweet, I like it but I'm not sure how it relates with the story. 8 points.

Summary/Blurb: It is a good summary. Left for me, I think its better if you wrote the warnings inside the book than there. That way new readers will have to at least open the book add to your readers, you won't turn away potential readers and it makes the summary look really neat. 7 points.

Plot: This has to be one of the most original books I have seen on here. I love how the plot went but I think the problem is the description. Now don't get me wrong; I am a sucker for descriptions but in your case the description is too much. I loved the goal that was to be achieved, but at a point it wasn't really being shown. 20 points.

Character development: All through the book I saw how Ash and Bella grew up but at times, I felt that they should have handled some situations differently. Regardless their flaws make them realistic. As for the side characters, I liked how you showed their personality. 25 points.

Style of writing: First person and semi-formal. I like how you wrote the book but some parts look stiff; like you know what you want to write but aren't sure how to put it. While other parts go with the flow and you execute what you want to write accurately. 8 points.

Grammar: The usual punctuations mishap but I suggest that you get yourself an editor or sit your sweet behind down and do it yourself. 5 points.

Total: 78 points.

Now here's my advice♤

First off, your book is very original. I love how you construct your chapters by giving them dept and allowing them to sync with each other.

I also loved how the main characters Ash and Bella met. You really have a nice way of words but I don't think that you protrayed Ash's character properly when they met again while he was taking Bella to school.

Your style of writing is unique but try and make it consistent, it's either formal or informal. You could get yourself in the mood by either listening to music or just just clearing your head.

Kudos to getting the show and tell situation in equal balance.

I think that's all, I really enjoyed your book and I hope you enjoy writing it too.

Have a nice day♤