Name: Maplestar(Maplespot)

Maple- is a pretty ignored prefix. And I love the suffix -spot! It's so adorable and cute! 

Gender: She-cat

I love she-cats. We're so pretty and feminine.

Appearence: Fluffy long-haired torteshell with black paws and vibrant green eyes.

Long-haired OCs are becoming more common, and fluffy is pretty overused. Tortishells aren't overused, but aren't ignored. Like 10 % of OCs are calico or tortishell. 

Clan: SwiftClan

I bet they're fast!

Rank: Leader
I love leaders!

Personality: Easily angered, fast, kind, wisdom, loyal, easily depressed, quick to judge, rude at points, quick thinker, leader-like, quiet
You need more flaws. Other than that, she seems pretty amazing. There are flaws, but not very major flaws. 

Back Story: As a kit Maplekit was hated by everyone except, Hawkkit, Bluekit ans Meadowkit. She got her father exiled and "supposedly" killed her brother Rabbitkit at birth when they were coming out.Some said she should become an elder or medicine cat but the leader knew she wasn't going to be.As an apprentice the pain slowly stopped and her brothers, Newtpaw and Spiderpaw gave apolagies, her mentor... Cloudedheart, a legend throughout the clans. Sadly she went to train in the Dark Forest for a few moons.

I'm always pretty aginst hated by everyone OCs, but you gave reasons. Newt- and Spider- are underused prefixes. I'm writing a reverse mary-sue OC story, so other than that. 

As a warrior she grew hightly close to a tiny kit known as Tinykit, and soon she mentored him. Sadly her mother died... from her own claws from an attack.Soon another fight comes and she fought Silverheart, both Spidernose and Bluewhisker(her two siblings) died that day. Tinypaw soon after died from a badger along the border. She earns another apprentice called Redpaw and also becomes pregnant with Hawkeyes kits.Only two were born sadly, Blossemkit and Heronkit.She also becomes deputy after the kits became apprentices.

This still seems pretty origanal! Also, I am loving the name Hawkeyes! He sounds like Hawkeye, who is also my favorite superhero! 

As a leader life is hard, she has to be careful with her enemy, Silverstar and soon figures out that Hawkeyes had kits with her. She takes in the kits of Silverstar and cares for them like her own. Sadly she was pregnant when she found out so she gave birth to, Tinykit(Tinyspot), Frostedkit(dawn) Whiskerkit(face) and Sunkit(claw).During the battle of a life time for SwiftClan and ForestClan, her only son gets cornered by Silverstar and a few of her rougues. She helps her son but gets killed by Silverstar... first. A day later Silverstar died from injuries... but the two clans remembered her final words.

This war isn't over Silversta...

This is super amazing origanal! OCs hardly ever die in their stories and I like this! 

Mother: Ashmoon(desceased) 

Ash- is an adorable prefix!

Father: Snakeflame(desceased) 

Brothers: Spidernose(desceased) Newtwhisker(alive)Rabbitkit(desceased) 
Newtwhisker is cannon

Sisters: Bluewhisker(desceased) Meadowfire(alive) 
Bluewhisker is pretty close to Blue Whiskers, Moth Flights daughter.

Mate: Hawkeyes(formally) 

Kits: Litter One: Blossempatch(alive) Heronfeather(desceased) 

Litter Two: TinySPOT(in honour of mother) 

Adopted: Frosteddawn(alive) Sunclaw(desceased) Whiskerface(alive) 

The double dd annoys me in Frosteddawn. Bluewhisker is cannon, so sorry, I have to take off a half point for that. (Blue Whiskers in Moth Flight's Vision) All of these names are very creative! 

 (Check out Maplestar's Destiny by the way since this is the oc I'm doing a book on!)(Sorry for that advertisement!)

No I like advertising! I'm reading Maplestar's Destiny right now. 

I like this OC! She is pretty cool and amazing! Overall, she gets a 8.5/10. -1 point for the not very many flaws, and the cannon names. She is pretty amazing!