Name: Hawkpaw (becomes Hawkfeather later in the fanfiction)

I love Hawkfrost. Oh, nothing to say about this name. It's good. But -feather is a little overused but it matches well with Hawk-.

Age: 11 moons

Nice age.

Appearance: Slightly plump creamy brown tom, average sized, with amber eyes and thick darker brown stripes

Aww. He sounds cute!

Personality: A bit arrogant and boastful, but when cats tell him that he gets embarrassed. He cares a lot about those close to him, and may rush into things (especially fights) to keep them safe. He does not like other clans or relate to them. 

He seems kind of good! Add some more good personality traits though!

Clan: EmberClan (A FanClan that lives in an easily burnable area, takes to long to describe and this is about Hawkpaw anyway) 

I really love the prefix Ember-.  And the easily burnable area is really original! 

Backstory: Hawkpaw's mother and father were Amberfur and Creekwater, respectively. He was raised around tense times between LeafClan and EmberClan, and as such has an especially strong dislike for them. His brother, Shimmerpaw, was a delayed apprentice, and Hawkpaw became protective over him while he was still a kit. 

Nice backstory. But with this backstory, he seems more of like a background character. Add some kind of eye-catching plot-twist, or some kind of prochcey.

Crush: Maybe (Smokepaw)

Aww. She should be Smokewing or Smokewisp. 

Mate: No

Other: His father is the deputy.

I give him an 8/10