Name: Archshade

This name is...strange. Arch- is kind of awkward to me, but it's creative so I guess you get extra points. 

Age: 16 moons

Well he's quite young isn't he.

Gender: Male

I presume you mean tom, right? Well, that's three toms in a row. 

Role: Medicine cat

Oooh nice. I mean most meddies have names such as Mintleaf, Flowerpool, Maplefern, Fernleaf, Yarrowpelt, and so on. So that's nice.

Personality: sweet and sour. He dislikes kits but still sympathizes queens whose kits have died. Sour tounged, always talking with an icy edge. Mean.

Maybe add a few more good traits? Other than that, he seems very well put together.

Appearance: Dark ginger with cold, dark blue eyes. He has tufts on his ears and a gash on his side.

For some odd reason I saw him as gray. Dunno *shrugs*. He seems cool.

But please forgive me. I have to call out on the blue eyes. THEY ARE SOOO OVERUSED. 

I have to take points off.

Backstory: Archkit wanted nothing more than to be a medicine cat, even after his sister (Gingerfrost) Gingerkit, and his brother (Thrushbelly) Thrushkit, and mother (deceased) Willowberry, tried hard to convince him to be a warrior. Once reaching six moons, he was made a medicine cat apprentice. He was overjoyed but wasn't happy when after given the role his father Stumpytail told him he hated him and that he couldn't let his kin thrive and grow a big family tree. After that, his father turned tail and fled, never speaking to him again. After the mishap, Archpaw's mentor, Twistpool, tried and failed to cheer him up. Archpaw went into a depressed state, refusing to eat, sleep, or drink anything. He began to grow very ill, and finally, his father came back, feeling horrible for his son. Archpaw was crouched over a pool going in the den, digging his claws in his own tail, and Stumpytail stopped him. Archpaw remembered the last thing his father said to him. "You can't harm yourself, my kin wouldn't appear strong, like the strong cat you are and always will be." Soon after, while collecting herbs, Archpaw heard a yowl. He ran to the noise, to see Stumpytail's limp body in the road, blood everywhere. Shocked, he ran to the camp, alerting everyone. After the burial, his sister, (now a warrior), gave birth to a litter, giving Archpaw a new hope. Her kits, (Berryface) Berrykit, a she cat with a dark, amber-ginger coat. She was joined by another bundle of life, (Greystorm), Greykit. A ton with a dark grey coat and white dappled along his back. He felt happy for his sister, and continued to work hard. Soon after Twistpool retired to the elders, Archpaw took the name Archshade. After that, his brother had a kit, Furzepaw. She trained as his apprentice but died shortly after. He grieved with his brother, and soon after long moons, died of greencough.

Wow...well. That's interesting. It's sad, but that's okay. Origanal, I'll give you that, but it seems very very sad.

Other: Berryface had a litter of one, named Leafclaw. He had a litter with Berryblaze, who had a litter to this day, Rainpaw and Featherpaw, two white tabby she cats with black stripes, their tail attached, and Honeypaw, a cinnamon colored she cat. All have dark blue eyes. Where did that come from, ehh?

IT'S ALL GOOD.

Overall, little Archshade gets a well rounded 9/10. He seems super devoloped, but not all the way. RiftTheFish, your Ocs are always so cool!