Name: Musicpaw (Her mother was a kittypet)  Okay, but if she was born into a Clan they usually get Clan names. Take Millie's kits in the main book series for example. Music is a cute prefix though!

 Past name: Musickit. Cool.

 Clan: StreamClan ( a Clan that lives besides the River, known for hunting birds, fish, and land animals. Brave and kind) Love a good water Clan. 

 Past clan: StreamClan. Okay.

 Gender: she-cat. Cool.

 Sexuality: Undecided. That's okay. 

 Appearance: dark gray and white she-cat with green eyes & blue-gray ears. Also has a white tip at the end of the tail. Has a wound across her throat and a ripped ear. Sounds nice from what I know, but maybe a bit more detail? What's her fur length, body shape, etc etc. 

 Personality: playful, helpful, calm, and happy. curious, courageous, loyal, but also she can ramble on stuff, and is dumb but smart. She also judge rogues before meeting them, and a people-pleaser. The wording here is a bit strange. "Smart but dumb" doesn't really make much sense, as those are two very different things. Other than that, pretty good. 

 Mate: n/a. Seeing as she was an apprentice, it makes sense. 

 Kits: n/a. Same thing as above. 

 Other family and kin: Mother - Holidaypelt - former kittypet. Blue-gray she-cat with gray paws and tail. Father - Unknown but gray tom with yellow eyes and a blue collar with a minecraft creeper keychain, nothing much is known about him. Love the addition of the keychain lol.  

Sibling- Waterstorm - Gray she-cat with blue-gray paws and yellow eyes and a white tip at the end of the tail. Just a bit strange her sister has a Clan name but she does not. Cool name though!. 

 Cause of death: Died by a rogue in a battle. Poor thing :(

 Rank: Apprentice. I assume she died young?

 Past ranks: kit. Normal. 

 Good traits: kind, nice, and helpful 

 Bad traits: people-pleaser and judgeful. Maybe add a bit more to both? 

Hunting: 6/10 (Sorry about the weird font here) Fighting: 8/10 Swimming: 7/10 Climbing: 3/10 Leadership skills: 5/10 Reputation: 6.9/10They seem pretty good, but if she has an 8/10 as an apprentice and still died in battle, that doesn't make a whole lot of sense. Likes: Lilypaw and Riverpaw (hadn't decided their warrior names yet), the rain, puddles, the moon, and MoonClan. Also she loves flowers and those dandelions. Are Lilypaw and Riverpaw related to her, just friends or a love interest? I would love to know. Dislikes: The Dark Caverns, nightmares, thunderstorms, what's in the dark, and battles. Makes sense, but who (or what) are The Dark Caverns? Scars/injuries: Has a wound across her throat and a ripped ear. Okay. Backstory: she was born to Holidaypelt and loved playing mossball and chasing tails around the nursery when she was a kit. When she became an apprentice, she had a dream where she was apprenticed to Sharpfang, and it wasn't sharpfang. She thought it was the Dark Caverns playing tricks on her, but she closed her eyes and she was in the nursery but no one was there. (it was a false awakening) and she got scared and she woke up again. This time she was actually in reality. (idk the mentor yet) fast forward to about two moons later a kittypet joined the Clan (not rusty) named Parrotpaw and she encountered some rogues and they were asking for herbs and Musicpaw refused since she thought they were evil and they started to chase her and one of the rogues bit her leg but she ran away and she recovered in the medicine cats den. She then realizes there is a prophecy and went to talk about it with Hollystar but Hollystar didn't believe her and Parrotpaw and his friends overheard their conversation. Sharpfang was exiled after he was exposed (kinda like the prophecies begin lol) and the rogues are back again. Then she died. The end. Or is it? MoonClan granted her the power to be a ghost or not. Which is cool in my opinion. Quite a bit to unpack here... The wording in this is a bit weird and it is confusing to read. Why was Sharpfang exiled? What did he do? And what was the prophecy? What does she have against rogues? If I am correct, this is an early stage of making her? Still, it is just quite lacking and confusing. I like the addition of the false awakening though! Other: MoonClan is there StarClan and the dark Caverns is the Dark forest. Good to know!

Overall, I can see that this OC might still be in the making. I liked several things about her, but overall she seems hastily made and a bit unplanned. The backstory is messy too. I'll give her a 6.8/10. Sorry! There are just too many things that confuse me, plus she is not super incredibly interesting. TYSM for submitting and you can submit more OCs if you want to! 

Bonus: Kind of what I think she would look like: