Name: Icescar. How/why did he get his name? Any particular reason?Past names: Icekit, Icepaw, Icefur. So his name is Icescar but he is also Icefur? Bit of context would be nice! Plus, Icefur is super plain, fur in particular. Clan: Riverclan. Cool. Love RiverClan.Gender: Tom. NiceSexuality: Straight. CoolAppearance: A tall lithe tom with long pure white fur and green eyes. Very, very plain. What are his ears like? His tail, does he have any markings at all? Personality: Icescar is very loyal and brave, he is not scared to stand up for others, he is normally very calm but when in battle he goes into a rage. Most cats get angry in battle. Is there anything else to him?Mate: Riverlily(deceased) OkayKits: none. CoolOther family and kin: Snowflower(mother/deceased) Sleekstripe(father/deceased) No siblings? If not that's fine.Cause of death, future death: Dies protecting his clan from foxes that were drinking at the river. Just drinking, not actively hurting/hunting? A bit much. Rank(at death): Leader. Oh, are you trying to say Scar or Star? If it is Star, it's a bit generic to have a cat become leader. But if you want to keep it, that's fine.Past ranks: kit, apprentice, warrior, deputy. Okay.Good traits: Brave loyal, calm. Cat's usually are not calm but rage easily and don't trust well at the same time. Maybe cold, placid, fair, ect.Bad traits: Too brave sometimes, battle rage, and doesn't trust easily. I don't know if there is such thing as 'too brave'. Headstrong or impulsive might be a better word.Hunting:9/10Fighting:9/10Swimming:10/10Climbing:5/10Leadership skills:7/10Reputation:8/10A pretty big rule/thing is that cats are never 10/10 on everything. I love to write and am semi/pretty okay at it, but I still make mistakes in spelling or grammar. No one is perfect.Likes: His clan, swimming. CoolDislikes: fighting, Shadowclan. FairScars/injuries: His right ear is torn, he has claw marks over his left eye in which he is blind, and he has a very pronounced limp from when he broke his leg while climbing a tree. Very beaten up. Blind is very extreme, and blind leaders are rare. Blurry vision might be better.Background: Icescar, formerly known as Icefur has always been a quiet cat and after he was attacked by Shadowclan he got what he called battle rage, when ever he goes into battle his vision gets clouded with anger and he starts killing any enemy that comes near him. Alright, killing any cat near him is very extreme. I understand cats and people get angry, but a simple attack from ShadowClan wouldn't usually do that. Maybe they killed his mate or kit or parents? Maybe he is very vengeful and seeks to harm them, but killing is pretty, well, as I said and for a lack of better term, extreme. Also, maybe flesh it out a bit more!
Okay. Overall, this OC is not particularly interesting. I'm sorry, he just needs more substance! Why was he made leader, why did he get his name, why is he so angry in battle ect. I don't think he is awful but I don't like him a ton either. 5.5/10. Once/if he gets more substance I would love to re-review! Thanks for submitting! Bonus: What I think he would look like: