Name: FawnFlight. Cute! A repeating prefix+suffix letter is always super satisfying to say.

Past Names: FawnKit, FawnPaw. Alright.

Clan: HollowClan. Any information about this Clan? 

Past Clan: None, but was a loner! Okay! What was her loner name, though? 

Gender: She-Cat. Okay.

Sexuality: Bi w/ pref for she-cats. Alright, good for her!

Appearance: Casual exotic short hair with orange eyes!! (LOOK AT THEM THEY'RE UGLY AF BUT CUTE) I would prefer to have her appearance listed. Cat's pelts have very different markings, even in the span of a single breed. And to be a PURE Casual Exotic Shorthair, she would likely have to be a kittypet with purebred parents. And what about tail length, small markings, ears, scars, etc? And, what colour is she?? All I know is the breed and eye colour.  

Personality: A mix of CinderPelt and Gray Wing. Okay... That's not very descriptive. The same as personality, it's better to list her individual traits. 

Mate+Kit: None 😔😔. Okay.

Kin: I haven't thought her out this far :( probably a loner mother tho. Even temporary names and appearances could have sufficed. 

Death: Probably illness? Think a little bit more/ dig a little bit deeper before submitting! It's not hard to come up with a death, even if you are going to change it in the future. 

Rank: Med-cat. Alright.

Past ranks: Apprentice, Loner. Okay, you may have forgotten 'Kit' as a rank. 

Good traits: Defensive, morally good, good sense of hearing. Defensive isn't really a very positive trait. But other than that, it's fine.

Bad traits: Can't control voice volume, harsh, trust issues. Why does she have trust issues? What happened?

Hunting: 3/10

Fighting: 6/10

Swimming: 7/10

Climbing: 5/10??

Leadership skills: 7/10

Reputation: 9.03/10

A tad bit high, but only a little bit. 

Likes: Going for walks, running water, leaf blowing, apples. Does she eat apples? And how does she leaf-blow? 

Dislikes: Her mentor, treating cats (NOT THAT SHE DOESN'T LIKE THE IDEA OF TREATING THEM- JUST DOESN'T LIKE IT??), unrighteous leaders. I don't get the 'Treating Cats' addition. It's worded a bit strangely. 

Scars/Injuries: None. Okay... Most cats have at least some little scar like a notched ear, broken claw, etc. Even if the scar isn't visible under the cat's fur. 

Backstory: Her mother was a loner who got laid by her dad, who was a clan cat. Her dad got exiled and FawnFlight was a loner for a few moons before being put in Hollowclan because her mom's safe space was being destroyed. Uh... Interesting? The language is a bit odd. What about her apprenticeship? Her Medicine cat journey? Friends, large events, training, etc. How was her mom's safe space destroyed, and what was it? 

Other: Exposes her mentor for SEVERAL war crimes in front of the entire clan. You can't just say 'SEVERAL WAR CRIMES' and not explain the war crimes. WHAT DID HE DO?! 

So... Fawnflight was an interesting OC. She definitely needs a lot more development, and some more structure to her character and backstory. Also, her appearance and personality were so basic, that I had quite literally nothing to rate. Thank you for submitting! Fawnflight gets a 4.5/10. With some more development, she could easily be a 6-7/10

Bonus: What I think she could look like (This might be completely wrong, as I don't know her coat colours.)