1.
When people do this...
"Come on, VoleStar," LightningFur meowed.
UGH!!! YOU DON'T CAPITALIZE THE SUFFIX!!!
UGH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
2.
When people do this...
Rainclan gathered in the center of camp.
Or...
The clan gathered.
NO!! It's "RainClan" and it's "Clan"!
3.
When people do stuff like this...
Teh he-cat stoped and loked at teh sttars. "O no" he mowed sadely. "Its cuming" teh she-cat reponded "but its knot tim" teh leder stod ad mowed "be quite" teh cats were quite as teh leder spoked. "we hafe a prophcy"
Please learn some spelling! I can understand a few mistakes but the passage above is...ugh.