I'm trying to work on description how's this?

The fell down just as the blade swept his arm cutting into the skin and making the solider hiss in pain as he was brought to his knees

The wound oozed hit red blood as it poured from his arm down his shirt staining the grass beneath him going from light green to maroon in a matter of minutes

How was that?

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