ARRANGED TO LOVE

Author: Khushworld1234

No. of chapters: 56 (incl. of epilogues)

Genre: Fanfiction of Rikara.

Title: Perfectly suits the plotline. Simple and beautiful. (10/10)

Cover: I presume it could have been better. The pictures used in the collage don't go with the story quite appropriately. You can always search for more apt ones. One more thing, when you're putting colorful images in the background, make sure that the font style, color and size is done accordingly. In the current story, it might take the reader a bit of effort to read out the name of the story.
(6/10)

Description: Nice. It gives glimpses about the characters and their nature. Intrigues interest in a reader's mind.
(8/10)

Plot: The plotline isn't something extraordinary. But as they say, simple things are more beautiful. I found it sweet and subtle. The mystery adds up some spice. It was essebtial, I believe.
(9/10)

Character Development: The development in characters is slow but steady. Gauri and Omkara seemed 'made for each other'. As the story progresses we slowly observe changes in them, which I felt, was realistic. The supporting roles are also very beautifully portrayed. 
(8/10)

Story telling: You have a different way of narration. It feels more like a script than a story. There are chapters filled with dialogues and no descriptions, which may confuse the reader. It sometimes becomes impossible to understand, to whom the speaker is actually speaking. Moreover, usage of abbreviations of names like, 'G' for Gauri and 'O' for Om adds up to the confusion.

    Avoid putting emoticons in dialogues. Without writing a single word, an emoticon doesn't seem to work. There's a point where it feels that you're writing because you have to, and not because you want to. It, somewhere perhaps, reflects a compulsion on your part.

     When you are adding any numerical value in between dialogues, write them in spelling and not in numbers. For example, ''two hours" instead of "2 hours".

    Do not use SMS lingo. It's not a good practice. Write in full and proper spelling.

    When writing about past events, try keeping them in italics. It becomes easier to understand.(the chapter where Gauri disclosed about Ridhima and Dhanush).
(5/10)

Punctuation: Punctuation adds the main flavor to the lines. Good labor is needed in this regard. Trying writing dialogues in one single paragraph, because that makes it easier for readers to read. Please try beginning proper nouns with Capital letters.
(7/10)

Grammar: Language used is easy, simple and good to go. However, good amount of work is necessary. Especially in tense.
(5/10)

Overall assessment: This story is, no doubt, a mood lifter. It's like anytime 'go to'. But the story will bloom to a whole new level, if the glitches are properly attended on time.
(7/10)

Graphics: Pictures used were, unambiguously, perfect.
(10/10)

📍A trait I absolutely admire is, the author has written in simple sentences, which has to be applauded. To be honest, this trait is seen missing in many well known authors. Kudos on that note.

PROS:
>Steady plot.
>Simple language.
>Short, simple sentences.
>Graphics used are appropriate.

CONS:
>Writing pattern needs improvement.
>Hard work on tense.
>Usage of emoticons.
>Punctuation needs special attention.
>Need to learn the difference between story narration and script writing.

To the author,

"To err is Human."

You are,no doubt, a very deserving writer. But in order to flourish more, like everyone else, you too need to work on your weaknesses. I know you can do way better. Infact, your writing skill has improved as the story has progressed. Read as much as you can. Reading will definitely improve you for good. Love and best wishes.

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I would like to recommend this story to all those who are into sweet stories on arranged marriage. This book will win your heart. It's a lovely story.

Thank you.

Reviewed and published by _sarcasticpanda