Title: The Chronicles Of Kaimana's Heirs : Rise of the faeries

Author: Deiwrites

Genre/s: Fantasy, Romance

Number of Chapters: 14

Mature?: No

POV: Third person

Status: Ongoing

The Chronicles Of Kaimana's Heirs : Rise of the faeries

[in the author's own words]

Those born with a great power has an even greater destiny to fulfill...

Gianna Mirabella Hastings/De Sterling is a young girl born with great power and has an even greater destiny to fulfill. But as we all know fate has its own twists and turns and nothing will be as easy to accomplish..

Throw in thousand years old rivalry, Royalty, love, friendship,romance and add a pinch of witches, demons and soul shifters what exactly could go wrong?

Let's read to find out!

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B O O K  R E V I E W

[Before we begin, please keep in mind that everything mentioned below is my personal opinion. My intention isn't to offend anyone; the only reason I am going into such detail is to be able to help my fellow writers out there. I do not claim to be correct; just sharing my opinion from my experience here on Wattpad. The following review is based off of the prologue + first 5 chapters only.]

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TITLE: This story's title is not fully visible on a laptop (website) as well as on the phone (app). That makes it a bit difficult to find or check out this story since the title is cropped wherever you open it. (I couldn't fit the book title in the title of this chapter too due to the character-limit). I get that the word "faeries" might be important to your target audience. But some of this could be in the subtitle as well. So if your objective is to draw more eyes to this story, you might want to try changing the title and see if it works.

COVER: I like this cover and the colour palette. Not sure how common the image is but it does give me the fantasy + romance vibes. I suggest make the author's name / username more clear though.

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BLURB: Apart from the cover and title, the blurb plays a major role in determining whether or not someone clicks on your story to check it out. The blurb is short and sweet. The first 2 lines seem very repetitive, only 1 of them needs to be there. I like how you showcased the overall conflicts + themes of the story in one go. Raises the stakes very quickly. The blurb has some grammatical errors that can dissuade a potential reader from reading ahead, please fix those (MS Word / Grammarly / Google Docs can help).

P.S. You don't have to change anything but if you wish to, you can always experiment with new styles of blurbs to see what kind attract readers most.

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CHARACTERS: While what makes someone click on a story is a cover / title / blurb, what makes them stay is your plot and especially your characters. Their relatability, the whole vibe they give off and how well the characterization is done plays a huge role in a story. After all, it is easy to forget a story's title or maybe even plot but some characters stay with you even after you've finished reading the story. I like that this story starts with a bang - powerful characters suffering at the hands of fate. And when the story shifts to Gia, a seemingly ordinary girl, her journey is something that will instantly make you root for her. I feel like each (even minor) character in this story plays / will play a very crucial role and I'm instantly rooting for Gia and finding out more about her new life!

♡♡♡♡.5

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Judging from the prologue + 5 chapters I have read...

PACE & PLOT - I like how the conflict is introduced head-on with the queen being poisoned and the charm given by Eleanor - that element definitely makes you want to find out why it is so important. (I personally was a bit confused with all the names in Chapter 00 / 1 with all the kings so I had to reread it again but I'm not sure if anyone else would find it an issue). I thought Chapter 02 was probably going to be your typical teenager's life but I am pleasantly surprised by the turn it took. Somehow, each chapter ahead manages to give you a small shock / plot twist and that keeps you on your toes when reading since you never know what to expect next. I really enjoyed that!

DESCRIPTIONS & WORLD-BUILDING - I may be wrong but I feel like your first 2 parts are edited and the ones from Chapter 2 onwards aren't? Either way, I liked your descriptions and world-building (especially in the starting chapters). I love how you have a glossary at the beginning of Chapter 00 to refer to and this fantasy-based world is something that is slowly revealed to you instead of info-dumping all at once which is very convenient and pleasant on a reader's end. I feel like the moments between Gia and her mother when she "finds out her truth" could be expanded on a bit more with emotional descriptions of how they felt in the moment. It was a big revelation and change for Gia and it would be nice to have a peek inside her head in those moments to get to know her better. The elements that you've picked for this story - right from the fortune telling to the balance of energy centres etc. - really caught my interest and I loved how they were woven into a single story.

GRAMMAR & WRITING - I am not here to edit and pinpoint small mistakes (a simple run though MS Word or Grammarly can do that) so I'll be saying this from a reader's perspective - the kind that don't intentionally try to hunt for mistakes. Overall, I felt like were some grammar / punctuation errors (especially with extra spaces here and there and full stops v/s commas as pointed out by some other readers too ) but as said above, all you need is a quick run through MS Word or similar softwares to solve them.

READIBILITY & AESTHETICS - The paragraphs are sized properly - neither too small, nor too big and the overall aesthetic of the story on the screen is perfectly adequate. I personally feel the small chapters work for this story. Feels like a very ideal length.

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Overall, a very entertaining story. Had fun reading so far! Wishing you good luck for this story *_*

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