Title: Saving Her Lycan

Author: wreckingheartx_

Genre/s: Fantasy, Romance, Mystery

Number of Chapters: 44

Mature?: No

POV: First person

Status: Ongoing

SAVING HER LYCAN

[in the author's own words]

"Mysteries are matchmakers"

°° "Don't leave me, I will die if you do." °°

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Lilac Hirav has always lived under the radar since her mother's death. Silently tucked behind the shadow of Stepsister and her Father's wife.

So when a marriage alliance is made with the Lycan City, things would sure go southhill as Lilac finds herself at the alter, set to wed the second prince of Lycania. It is a wrap, and a twist. Now married to the Lycan Prince, Lilac has nowhere to turn to except to accept her fate, but nothing is ever peaceful for Cinderella.

Mysterious deaths are starting to take place in Lycania and somehow Lilac and her new husband are dragged into the middle of it.

Destruction is looming, and only one thing can stop it...

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B O O K R E V I E W

[Before we begin, please keep in mind that everything mentioned below is my personal opinion. My intention isn't to offend anyone; the only reason I am going into such detail is to be able to help my fellow writers out there. I do not claim to be correct; just sharing my opinion from my experience here on Wattpad. The following review is based off of the first 5 chapters only.]

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TITLE: This story's title is short (readable on every device) and simple - which is a good thing. I find it completely unique and I absolutely admire how directly it addresses your target audience with the word "Lycan" (I recommend adding #werewolf and related to the story tags btw if this is a werewolf story). Makes it appear like it is going to be a story with a strong FMC and I'm here for it *_*

COVER: While I like the colour scheme and the dark aesthetic (fits with the whole werewolf theme in my opinion), I've got to admit that the title is hardly visible on the cover. Same goes for your username. I suggest working on that or trying out some new covers (possibly in rotation) to see what pulls (new) readers most.

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BLURB: Apart from the cover and title, the blurb plays a major role in determining whether or not someone clicks on your story to check it out. The blurb is short and sweet and directly gives you the plot points without unnecessary details.

I feel like "Mysterious deaths are starting to take place in Lycania and somehow Lilac and her new husband are dragged into the middle of it." creates a better ending hook than "Destruction is looming, and only one thing can stop it...". To be honest, the blurb is genuinely good enough as of now but just to nitpick, I feel like this last line is kind of slightly anti-climatic (maybe it's just me but I can't be fully sure as to what it's trying to suggest). 

P.S. You don't have to change anything but if you wish to, you can always experiment with new styles of blurbs to see what kind attract readers most.

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CHARACTERS: While what makes someone click on a story is a cover / title / blurb, what makes them stay is your plot and especially your characters. Their relatability, the whole vibe they give off and how well the characterization is done plays a huge role in a story. After all, it is easy to forget a story's title or maybe even plot but some characters stay with you even after you've finished reading the story.

Lilac is a very understandable character. Her relationship with her father was portrayed beautifully (and also the one with her step-mother; it was tragic but her POV also gave a slight comedic relief which was needed, considering the tense scene). Got to be honest, I kind of didn't understand why no one was pissed at her replacing Milo as the bride but maybe it's just me. Kael is SUCH a mystery! For a moment, I think he's a sweet and helpless character while sometimes I feel like something dark is lurking within. So curious to find out more about him and them! The way their story progresses so far is beautiful. I like how she didn't fall madly in love with him just because they got married - makes their arc very realistic and worth reading imo. 

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Judging from the 5 chapters I have read...

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PACE, PLOT & WRITING - The pace of this story is just perfect in my opinion! The chapters don't skip on any scenes and descriptions but they don't drag on unnecessarily as well. I've read just the first 5 chapters and so far, none of them were filler chapters. Each one charts the story ahead and I really liked that! I love how your writing is a perfect balance of dialogues and descriptions - very rare to find. To be honest, I genuinely like your writing style and whatever I've mentioned ahead is mere nitpicking because there was hardly any huge flaw as such to point out.

GRAMMAR & PUNCTUATION - I am not here to edit and pinpoint small mistakes (a simple run though MS Word or Grammarly can do that) so I'll be saying this from a reader's perspective - the kind that don't intentionally try to hunt for mistakes. Overall, I felt like were a few grammar / punctuation errors, especially with the dialogue tags (eg. the dialogue needs to end with a full-stop / comma but it's left without an punctuation, the capitalizations need to be changed accordingly as well). As far as I understand, all you need is a quick run through MS Word / Grammarly or similar software to solve them. If not, you may have to change them manually. Ellipses (...) are to be used in a group of 3 so using 2 (..) felt slightly off to me. Chapter 5 needs a little formatting with respect to spacing and paras.

READIBILITY & AESTHETICS - The paragraphs are sized properly - neither too small, nor too big and the overall aesthetic of the story on the screen is perfectly adequate. I personally felt the chapter length works perfectly for this story. Feels like a very ideal length. I recommend the *POV alert* to be in bold so it doesn't blend in with the rest of the text. Genuinely appreciate the paragraph styled alignment you've done in your chapters (this may / may not continue ahead in the story). As far as I know, Wattpad usually removes this formatting so I'm guessing you've done all of that manually which couldn't have been an easy task *applause*. As for the scene breaks, one pair of ----- is alright, preferably aligned in the centre, but please avoid using two together since it feels kind of unnecessary.

OTHER POINTS - I wonder what the quotes / lines in the beginning of each chapter are. Are they a hint or a story of their own or is it random? Either way, I'm super intrigued *_* (this changed to song lyrics in a later chapter so I'm confused now xD)

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Really enjoyed reading so far! Wishing you good luck for this story *_*

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