Title: Over The Moon 🌛

Author:_MinClara3116

Genre/s: Poetry

Number of Chapters: 9

Mature?: No

POV: N/A

Status: Ongoing

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B O O K  R E V I E W

[Before we begin, please keep in mind that everything mentioned below is my personal opinion. My intention isn't to offend anyone; the only reason I am going into such detail is to be able to help my fellow writers out there. I do not claim to be correct; just sharing my opinion from my experience here on Wattpad]

TITLE: This story's title is short (readable on every device) and simple. But due to the emoji, it could be difficult to specifically search for this story since there are a lot of other stories with the same title. If more readership is what you seek, I advice experimenting with newer titles since it's a poetry book. Over The Moon has such soft vibes though and fits your poems so well.

COVER: The image is beautiful. It would be more effective if it would have the story's title and author's name / username on it.

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BLURB: Apart from the cover and title, the blurb plays a major role in determining whether or not someone clicks on your story to check it out. Can definitely see the positive vibes your story brings out. I suggest adding the words "A poetry book" or something similar in the blurb so people can understand what kind of a book this is (eg. quotes, poems, memes or just general short stories etc).

P.S. You don't have to change anything but if you wish to, you can always experiment with new styles of blurbs to see what kind attract readers most.

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I found some really beautiful poems here! Since this is a poetry book, grammar is all-the-more important here and I noticed a few grammatical / sentence errors in some poems. A simple run though MS Word or Grammarly could help you solve those very easily. Overall, it is a brilliant collection and I would love to see you write on more. For inspiration, you can also use prompts you find on Google or Pinterest for starters.

FEEDBACK ON INDIVIDUAL POEMS

💜✨Happy New Year✨💜

This is such a sweet and wholesome poem. I really liked it! I am not sure if the random capitalizations in the middle of the sentence are intentional but they can be slightly distracting at times.

(Corrections noted (as per me; they may / may not be correct): and us* deciding, might want to add a hyphen before happy new year in the last line)

THE WEEKEND

Every reader will be able to relate to this poem. Lowkey made me want to curl up in a corner with a book and a warm cup of hot chocolate xD. Very cute and cosy! (Same as above for the capitalization thing).

(Corrections noted (as per me; they may / may not be correct): which distracted* me from, little did I know* that.)

HUMANITY

Unlike the rest of the poems in this book, this one is more of a free-style, non rhyming kind. It was deep and thought-provoking. I personally love topics like these so I liked that you wrote about it.

(Corrections noted (as per me; they may / may not be correct): it's a* / the* state of being, I suggest adding but* are we really behaving to add a more dramatic effect there.)

Science: The Diverse Sea

This poem was so wisely rhymed honestly! Loved the thought that went into this! <3

(Corrections noted (as per me; they may / may not be correct): solves mysteries*, rather,* (comma) depends.)

THEY

Love how not-so-casually this calls out our society's ironic behaviour and hypocrisy. I personally liked it a lot and it is very well contrasted. The bolds and formatting create a perfect hook to keep reading ahead.

(Corrections noted (as per me; they may / may not be correct): watch* what (out isn't required there), this is just a suggestion but the line "as if they fit into beauty standards" feels really hypocritical for the moral & theme this poem suggests. It could be changed to something like "as if all they care about is beauty standards".)

Farewell:A Bitter Sweet Goodbye

This poem and topic is very touchy. I suggest breaking it into paras / verses though since some readers may tend to lose interest after a few lines due to the long flow of the poem.

DECISIONS

The image at the beginning of this poem is so freaking cute! Gave me all the feels! This poem is based on the prompt given by a reader of yours (whom you've tagged & credited there). I liked the way this poem was presented and formatted but compared to your other poems, the message / moral in this one didn't feel quite clear. Or maybe that was the whole point, considering this story was based on the theme of confusion and being indecisive in general.

Enemy

I really recommend breaking this poem into verses. Especially because of how relevant and interesting it is! The capitalization issue returns here but I love how the character chooses to become a better version of themselves for revenge. That's very refreshing.

(Corrections noted (as per me; they may / may not be correct): "i wish i made you sue" means the exact opposite of what is intended. if someone sues you, you're in trouble usually, not them. I suggest changing this line. Maybe something like "getting my knuckles blue" (meaning: intending to hit them) or anything similar that rhymes like the rest of this poem.)

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To sum it up:

- The title is difficult to search and when you enter the title without the emoji, your story will not show up at the top since it's a common title.

- The blurb needs to indicate this is a poetry book (in my opinion).

- A grammar + tense + punctuation check is recommended.

- Not sure if the cover is intentional in any way but if not, it is always more effective to have your book's title + author's name / username on the book's cover so I'd recommend adding them.

Please write more poems. I really enjoyed reading most of them *_*

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