Express review by Abeeha.

Title: Master Disaster: A Superhero Tale.

Author:  usaimeenyoosuff
Reviewer: @Abeeha_32

R/N: It's a bit weird but I found your writing skills so similar to mine. Reading your book reminded me so much of myself when I started out with my writing journey. I hope you find this review helpful and it helps you grow as an author.

Cover+Title:

The cover is beautiful. The use of the moon to illustrate Kip's power is very beautifully presented. It specifies that the boy sitting alone, facing the moon, is not your normal teenager. The clouds spiralling the boy add to the magical ambience of your book. It's extremely attractive, especially to someone who is a sucker for fantasies. Good job with that. The author's name is also easily-readable and the colour of the font used does not merge with the contrasting blue tint of the background. There is a little suggestion I have for the title's font. With the use of such an impressive picture for the cover, the font comes out as a bit haphazard which contradicts your story's concept. I believe a cursive/calligraphic font would work better for a fantasy read like this. However, this is only my opinion and you can stick to the font if you like it like that. You can also add 'A Superhero Tale' to your cover as a subtitle. It'll look extremely cool.

Coming to the title, I believe it's so captivating. With the rhyming of two almost- contradictory words, you made it even more attractive and I love it so much! Well done.

Blurb:
The blurb has no major grammatical errors as such. It's okay but it could have been better. Here are some things I'd like to point out:

*The blurb is too long. I am not a very big fan of long blurbs. I believe that they should be short, sweet and to the point. This might be an exception in some books if they have a lot of complexities in their storyline but yours is a comparatively simple story. You can write it in a better way, eradicating long phrases and certain repetitions. I feel that the same thing is being stated over and over again.

*Lanthus should be capitalized everywhere you've used it. It's the name of a country and proper nouns begin with a capital letter.

*Your genre being so intriguing, I believe that the blurb does not satisfy the needs of a curious reader. Try making it more lively with little questions:
You can refer to blurbs of famous books and see how descriptions are written. Use your imagination and you create something out of the blue.

Grammar+ Writing Style:

There were some errors with grammar, which I'd like to point out.

Chapter-1
...when a red alarm clock IN his bedside table.
Correction: when a red alarm clock ON his bedside table.
The use of the preposition 'on' is more appropriate in this context.

There were goosebumps on his body.

Something feels wrong with this sentence. You can maybe rephrase it as 'He got goosebumps' or entirely change the sentence to something more suitable.

He wore his clothe slippers.
Correction: He wore his 'cloth slippers.' Eradicate the letter 'e'.

And safely placing it in his closet.
Correction: And safely 'placed' it in his closet.

Chapter-1
People were leaning AGAINST their lockers.
Leaning 'in ' their lockers isn't correct.

half of the school cheering and watching him BEING attacked.

You've used the name Kip too many times. I suggest you to use the pronoun 'he' instead. Use the name once and after that, you can continue with pronouns.

Chapter-3

There was a small bandage ON his arm.
Use the preposition 'on' instead of IN.

A mirror was placed ON his bedside table.

*There were a lot of typos which I pointed out in the inline comments. You can check them out and make the necessary changes.

*Your writing is good but a bit rushed. There were some moments which I wanted to feel deeply but you haven't described anything in detail. You should do that more often because good descriptions really help to elevate one's work.

*Sometimes, Kip's thoughts are confusing. When you write it in italics, make sure to separate it in another line. It will not only make it less haphazard but also well-executed.

*There was one thing that really bothered me. When Uncle Duddly gifted a wristwatch to Kip, he thought to himself that the watch must have cost him a fortune. On the other hand, you've written that his Uncle owns a Mustang (which is an expensive sports car). You are contradicting your statement which felt a bit out of place and jarring. Hope you get it and make the changes.

The writing style is promising and the vocabulary is considerable. It's simple yet very intriguing.

Characters:

There hasn't been any character exposition as yet when talking about other characters except Kip.

I really like Kip's character by the way. The way you have written it actually makes me feel bad for him. The way he aims to leave no stone unturned for finding his wristwatch gifted to him by his uncle is so heartbreakingly beautiful. The way he can't control his temper, his psychic side is well portrayed. All I can advice you is that take things slow. Let people feel every little thing. It matters if you want readers to connect with the characters on a personal level.

Other characters such as Uncle Duddly and Spencer are also well thought of. Uncle Duddly is super-caring and it's so good that he calls Kip 'son'. Nice thoughts!

Plot:

Such plots are surprisingly difficult to decipher. They are cliché but also non-cliché. All that matters is how good you are at carrying your MC forward in which I felt you did a great job. I was hooked to your story right after I read the prologue. A teenage boy having super powers sounds so fascinating. I was really excited while reading and there was no dull moment at all. The storyline is very engaging and, if molded into the perfect shape, it'll turn out amazing. We all, deep inside, are fascinated by superhero stories. It's time to bring the fascination inside people's heart out with your promising novel.

Overall enjoyment:
I really enjoyed reading your novel. It was a fun and lighthearted read and I loved the concept of the superhero element. Make sure you introduce some detailed descriptions, more realistic dialogues and the correct use of grammar. I know you have a lot of undiscovered potential. Thank you so much for asking me to review this book and I hope it was helpful to you. Lots of luck with your writing.
Until next time♥️