✨Julgust Short Story Special Results ✨

Welcome back! The results to our Julgust Special Contest are here! Many thanks to all the participants who were so patient for the results! And to those who encountered complications towards submitting, we hope you will join us again next time!

Also special thanks to our judges who submitted their scores in time. They've spend a bit of time this round compiling some feedback for each entry including what each entry did well on and what they could improve on in time for the PokemonWatties (if writers so choose to enter their entry there). In addition, feedback provided here MAY contain spoilers!

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And now for the results! Please note the results this time around were very, very close! Second and third place were off by less than half of a full point. Judges were asked to vote for which entry they thought should be placed before another with regards to which one they enjoyed reading more. Great work to all the writers!

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By Your Side by @Torterra657! 15 boosted points will be added to your rank, along with votes on all parts of your story and a commemorative PWL sticker! To receive the sticker, either PM the PokemonWritingLeague your email or Discord, and one of our admins will send it your way!

Here's what our judges have to say about this entry:

Imber:
Pro: The concept is original and refreshing, and the main character was likable.
Con: The story could be quite convoluted at times; things would happen and I would have no idea how they came about.

Kristen:
The author has many errors and typos within their work, and I didn't find any of the characters to be particularly unique, even Agni. The ending pulled at my heartstrings a little, but it was nothing more than a standard "see you on the other side" scene. The ending was also out of place and,
I didn't really see what Uxie brought to Agni's extended family.

Sam:
Imagining the entire scenario of this story was difficult; given the time period the story takes place in (estimating it based on the fact that Lake Acuity is named amidst this story), the characters appeared to be smart and relying on tools not even possible for them to own. The common problem I have with short stories is character development, but the author of this story did not disappoint me at all. I also liked the fact that the author did zir research. Agni is a Hindi word and means fire (as mentioned in the story), and the author used this piece of information to dwell further into the name and to describe the personality of the protagonist, which positively served in his emotional development. While the beginning didn't hook me in right away and there were some missing pieces, in the end, the story left me satisfied.

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Pumped by @GeekoTreecko! 20 boosted points will be added to your rank along with votes on all parts of your story and a commemorative PWL sticker! To receive the sticker, PM the PokemonWritingLeague either your email address or Discord, and one of our admins will send it your way!

You will also have the option to accept or decline an exclusive interview with us when you are ready. Just PM us the date of when you are ready and what platform you will like it to be conducted: Wattpad/Discord. It should not take more than 30 minutes. If you choose to decline, just let us know via PM.

Here's what our judges have to say about this entry:

Imber:
Pro: The characters were likable, and the ideas presented here seemed well-researched, i.e. all the bike trivia and facts.
Con: Even for a short story, it seemed a little too, well, short.

Kristen:
I liked the interactions between Rad and Rydel, and I thought that the use of Pokémon in cycling was particularly genius. However, the author left out words in a few of their sentences, and sometimes their sentence structure made everything redundant and boring to read. In addition, the ending was almost predictable, and the outcome was more evident by the way they built up to it.

Sam:
The use of puns amidst narration was a massive turnoff and the sentences could have been structured better, too. The character development did not sail smoothly and word limit also restricted the author to shine them to their full potential. Plot-wise, although the victory of #8 was predictable, the way last two chapter was narrated made me forget it momentarily. Which brings me to my last pointI thoroughly enjoyed this book despite the issues I have with it.

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And finally in first place,

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In Your Shadow by @UnisonRaider!
25 boosted points will be added to your rank along with votes on all parts of your story and a commemorative PWL sticker! To receive the sticker, PM the PokemonWritingLeague either your email address or Discord, and one of our admins will send it your way!.

You will also have the option to accept or decline an exclusive interview with us OR receive fanart of one of your Pokefic!

If you choose to take the interview, just PM us the date of when you are ready and what platform you will like it to be conducted on: Wattpad/Discord. It should not take more than 30 minutes.

If you choose to take the fan art instead, just PM us a detailed description of what you're looking for! It can be an original character reference sheet or a small drawing with a simple background. The artist(s) who choose to work on your product are not in anyway professionals, but they will certainly do their best to satisfy you with their works!

Here's what our judges have to say about this entry:

Imber:
Pro: The build-up of the characters' development and ending were quite satisfying.
Con: The concept of sibling rivalry presented here has been done many times before, and it's the main bulk of the plot.

Kristen:
I liked the contrast between the two Ninetales, and I think the author did a great job showing Rhine's struggles when Riko was taken away from her. However, I feel as if both of the Ninetales' personalities could've been fleshed out more, and they both followed very standard tropes.

Sam:
The major problem I had with this book was the pacing. Everything happened just too quickly for my liking. The use of a shiny Pokemon made me believe things might spice up, but I was left low-key disappointed in the end. Characters could have been fleshed out more, especially Riko, who barely got enough screentime. As a short story, though, it did a good job. Sadly though, I couldn't really enjoy it as much as I had expected to.

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Memories of a Young Girl by @Frosty__100

Here's what our judges have to say about this entry:

Imber:
Pro: The setting and the ideas presented were intriguing.
Con: The story never seemed to be finished, so none of those aforementioned intriguing ideas were explored.

Kristen:
Everything is in one long paragraph with no breaks whatsoever. On top of this, the author makes numerous spelling and grammatical errors, and their prose is way too informal. Nothing stood out to me, and I found the plot to be boring and too short to capture my attention.

Sam:
This story technically doesn't even qualify as a short story but a one-shot. That isn't the extent of issues I had with it--there was barely any plot, the sentences were awkward, use of tenses was inconsistent, and there were many spelling mistakes, too. The character was also 2-D and didn't develop at all, even for a one-shot. I get that the story is supposed to be told from the protagonist's perspective, but the writing is still way too informal; for example, numbers could have been spelt and paragraphs could have been separated. The author did think of infusing WWII in zir story, which is something refreshing and pleasing to see, but zie failed to elaborate on this idea properly, resulting in a messy plot.
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That just wraps up the results! If you found any of these entries interesting, check out our Julgust reading list where they'll be at. We will be returning in October with our next contest, but until then, happy writing!~

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