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Armathenia by Thorgirl1
JUDGE: RafiaZ
It's well written and the description she has given is very good. But some chapters were too short I think one should maintain a standard.

Dreams: A Love Story Which Never Happened - MAckMalice
JUDGE: anonymous
The idea is pretty much unique but the execution of that idea needs improvement. Writing Style is slightly confusing but it gets better as the chapters go on.

My Life as a Slave After Being an Arabic Princess - arabic_writter
JUDGE: RafiaZ
Your plot seemed pretty good but you really should reread and edit your chapters thoroughly before you upload them. There are no pauses between sentences and people don't usually continue when there are so many mistakes just in the first chapter.

Ridden-Off Innocence - Cray-CrayReading
JUDGE: anonymous
Noticeable grammatical and punctuation errors. Crosses over the line of both originality and similarities. Characters doesn't leave that much impression but not that bad either.

Scales - flyingunicornz_
JUDGE: @nekochiiii
The writing is good and so as the plot. Good start. It captured my interest... especially the first part where it had a bit of a thrill.

Sixth Sense by Mind_Power
JUDGE: RafiaZ
The story you've written is good but you really need to pay attention towards the tense you're using. Also you need to improve your writing style. But overall it was a nice book and I enjoyed it. You've describe some of the action scenes very well.

The Dragons of Russia by xDRAG0N0VAx
JUDGE: RafiaZ
This novel was amazing and I did not find a single weak point. The plot is very different and very well written. Description, vocabulary everything was pretty good.

The Foreigners in The East by mYu514
JUDGE: RafiaZ
It was truly a great novel, and the way she has written is extremely good. The vocabulary was good too. I felt like I was reading a novel by a professional author.

The Resistance - roguewarrior2002
JUDGE: @nekochiiii
Your novel crosses the line of both originality and similarity, just a little bit cliche but it still make me wanna read some more.

Timeline by YourmyPast
JUDGE: RafiaZ
It was nice but more of a fanfic and I wasn't really expecting that. But overall it was good.

Time Limit by Fab-Fangurls
JUDGE: rebeccagragg
Time Limit is different to me, the colloective group of authors work to pull you in and hook your attention.

When It First Struck - MasterEpicnesss
JUDGE: @nekochiiii
Your writing style is good. I'm literally holding my breathe while reading the first part.

The Angel - Meggie_shadowhunter  

JUDGE: underatedpessimism
There were a few grammar mistakes at the start which you want to fix up so the reader gets a very strong first impression. Engaging story, loved it, wish there was more to judge :)

The Gathering, Bloodmoure Chronicles  -  JRShepherd  

JUDGE: underatedpessimism
Nice character building, that was your strongest element. The description at the start was great, but it was used to your advantage better in the next few chaps:)

God's Daughter  -  _musu__   

JUDGE: wi_se_gi_rl
This book is a different story but it has many gramatical errors that make it difficult to read at times. The characters have a few similarities to your everyday high schooler but have good depth. This story is interesting to read but difficult to get into and enjoy.

Beginning of an End - Jelmo03  

JUDGE: underatedpessimism
The Writing style kind of confused me, because in the first chapter there was a car crash and then we suddenly went to the mother finding out about it.
Your unique plot line is your strongest element:)

Reclamation - Alpacat   

JUDGE: kaninga_duh
The character names were a bit hard to follow and I'm not that sure if Amora-Tae's power is healing. Is it? Overall, this book is splendid, and with so much description it makes everything flow. I also didn't had much trouble following the story line.

Rhistmaege  -  WilliamHowells   

JUDGE: kaninga_duh
I thought that the writing wad jumping from one event to the next event, without much connection to the previous events. I've never read something following this storyline, so a 5 for uniqueness.

Guardian Angel - Lickerfish  

JUDGE: underatedpessimism
Some grammar mistakes but your writing style definitely is your strongest element it contributed the most to my overall enjoyment. I like the biblical references at the start and it's relation to angels, interesting..:)

Thief - MagicAnimals  

JUDGE: underatedpessimism
My only criticism is that the characters were introduced all at once, so as a reader I hardly had an idea of what the protagonist's personality was like.

Queen Of The Night  -  xDRAG0N0VAx   

JUDGE: wi_se_gi_rl
This book has a semicreative plot line but the beginning develops a bit predicatably. The characters are detailed and relatable and match the plot. This book has a great storyline and is very fun to read. Continue the series!

Dawn Of Corruption  -  teklis

JUDGE: kaninga_duh
It's writing style is good, doesn't jump from place to place and it has enough description, just enough to let the reader understand what's going on, while having a aura of mystery. Sorry if this offended you.

The Last Princess  -  kakpie291203

JUDGE: wi_se_gi_rl
Although the storyline is creative, you put few cliches in the book such as the main character  falling liking twin brothers. Other than that, the Last Princess leaves me wanting more and waiting for updates.

Ellie and The Prince - JMStengl   

JUDGE: wi_se_gi_rl
This is an amazing book. It has a great concept that is executed nearly perfectly. I love how the characters are developed and act like real people would. You even included the mean girl that everyone hates! I was so into this book that I lost track of time while reading it!

The Blood Reader - Twinning94   

JUDGE: kaninga_duh
I really enjoyed reading the book, because I felt like I've stepped into a whole new world, even though I thought the start of the first chapter was a bit cliche-ish, with the main character running away and having powers and all that.

Ocean's Child  -  PaintingBlossoms

JUDGE: kaninga_duh
I've actually read something similar to this book before, but generally the books I've read that are similar to this is in the category teen fiction. This story has me hooked right from the start with a murder case right in the first chapter and a lot of relatable stuff too, despite being a fantasy story. 

Girl In a Mirror House  -  UnicornThatLovesBTS

JUDGE:
The idea is pretty original and they got most of their points for plot. The problem is that it was written poorly. Events seemed to just happen, there was no background for anything, and some of the characters actions went beyond just unbelievable.

Venusaur.exe - BladeratopsT 

JUDGE: HenaAdlakha
•  You need to practice. A lot. Start by writing articles of one page and get it proof-read by your teacher, or a 'grammar-wiz' friend.

Kill Shadow  -  fiction-fiesta -fiesta

JUDGE: HenaAdlakha
•  Simply, this is lit. Never ever read a book of this kind.

Choice of Insanity  -  Silver_LiningCl09

JUDGE: -
The main character is done well, but the rest are lacking. It jumps around constantly, making it hard to follow.

The Witches Curse  -  1224kayla

JUDGE: -
The characters are more like ideals than actual people. The writing is really basic and the story has no set pace. Things just happen.

7 days - Marie_rocks 

JUDGE: HenaAdlakha
• Just read it because I had to judge. But continued because I wanted to see what new twists you were having in store.

Kill Or Be Killed  -  Meggie_shadowhunter

JUDGE:
I'm excited to read another one as the first one that I've read receive an almost perfect grade from me. It might have made my expectations higher as I'm not quite satisfied with this one.

Obsession  -  LoveStruckStories

JUDGE:
- I like the plot, in spite of noticeable grammatical mistakes. I believe your story will be great if you do some MAJOR editing. I really wanna keep reading your book but I just can't bear with it.

Madness  -  aribasx

JUDGE:
Overall Enjoyment: this isn't one of those page turner books. At least not at the start but It made some developments as the story goes on. You just have to bear with the first few chapters.

JohnLock: The Prince and His Personal Guardian  -  CarrieGChandler

JUDGE: Happysmile4721
This is an amazing book! It's very descriptive and has no grammar mistakes (that I've noticed). Since it's set in the past, I didn't understand certain terms/words. I really enjoyed this book and am already reading the sequel.

The Traveling Lan's Galactic Tour - CynkNapp   

JUDGE: Lily-B28
- I have never read a book about this 'LAN' before so I found it very unique. Is this a plot/character you came up with on your own because I found my self lost at some points with no direction.

The Broken Diaries - sadcookii3

JUDGE: Lily-B28
- book was more so poetry(even though you stared it wasn't) and I feel like your quotes were very personal, overall uniqueness was fairly high. Although a little dark/depressing I get where you are coming from.

Weird Short Stories - WeirderMum

JUDGE:
• NEED TO WATCH THE PUNTUATION AROUND THE QUOTATION MARKS
• VERY UNIQUE STORIES. I HAVEN'T SEEN THEM ANYWHERE

Calamity | The 125th Hunger Games - CherryQueen55

JUDGE:
• DETECTED NO MISTAKES
• AUTHOR MADE IT HER OWN

Alternative Care - jettmanas

JUDGE: Lily-B28
- almost no mistakes, easy words to understand.
- compared to your other books they are somewhat the same but I feel like this compared to others work is still unique.

The Selection - lolamaddie

JUDGE:
• no separation of speakers. huge paragraphs. no explanation of the selection. what is illean events? not everyone reads the blurb

The 7 Princes  -  pinkskyjihye

JUDGE: -
• structure lacking/rules not followed ellipses need three dots not two lower case "i"
• the structre was so distracting i couldn't follow the plot

Intelligence Isn't a Magical Thing  -  Flutterbolt667

JUDGE: Lily-B28
- I haven't read any books about these characters, but I do feel like they were created before hand (this would be a great fan fiction).

The Girl He Left Behind - marialoveswednesdays  

JUDGE:
the first chapter was so cute and then the second chapter killed it with the "sudden move letter" too bad. many convenient areas- never bringing up ross to your new best friend?

The DNA Test (WDW Fan - Fiction)  -  Happysmile4721  

JUDGE:
GRAMMAR
Huge paragraphs. No quotes around spoken text. No grammar rules followed. This would be better suited as text messages or something

The Star Wars: The Prophecy of the Three - BluePearl22  

JUDGE:
CHARACTER BUILDING
was thrown off by one character. she disappeared during one crucial scene and her attitude toward Luke was, to me, way out of character, even if she was worried (at least toward Luke)

Poetry & Short Story

LOGOLEPSY  -  MagicAnimals

JUDGE: anonymous
- The thoughts are pretty much simple. Not much imagery but I can still feel you. I like the last part of your book, which was deep enough to make up for the points that was lost on the first few parts.

The Chances I Didn't Take - countingpetals

JUDGE: anonymous
- The emotion is overflowing. It got most of its points to originality and creativity. I enjoyed the short poems overall

From Tracktown, With Love  -  squishieshnoofus

JUDGE: anonymous
- My best read in this genre so far. The concept is not so unique if you really think about it but the writing style is really good that it makes me wanna keep reading.

The Cloud & Her Tears  -  Samtherealist

JUDGE: anonymous
- I can feel your emotions while reading your short poems. It's just that some of them are awkwardly phrased. Or maybe it's just me. Try rephrasing them or something? My favorite is the "Cactus" chapter. I get what you wanted to say but again, awkwardly phrased.

Upside Down  -  Jelmo03

JUDGE: Askaninn
Well, that's a good story and I really like the idea to bring some light to the "bullying" topic. Thanks to 13 reasons why, a lot of other good works are finally coming out.

3 AM - CerealForTheSoul

JUDGE: Askaninn
Whoa. Reading this work was such an amazing experience. It's even hard to describe how much I loved this book. From the casual and intense writing style (where you can see the small details as using the words of title in bold in the body of the poem) to the message that hits deep and precise, this work made a good impression on me. It's painful, raw and totally inspiring.

If Tomorrow Never Comes - starlightgalaxies_

JUDGE: Askaninn
I think the highest point for me was the way the author structured his text. It's something between a short tale and a poem, I don't know if that was the original idea, but I really loved it.

The World Blues - underatedpessimism

JUDGE: Askaninn
After finishing "The Worlds Blues", I spent a few hours still thinking about some of the words written in those verses. The author was very sensitive in his/her choices of words, turning some chapters like "Empty", "Cry" and "I Love. I Hate. I know" into real jewels.

Goodbye  -  fuzzek

JUDGE: ANParker4123
I think the concept of the book is really unique and creative. There could be a little improvement in the way the poems have been authored.

To Catch A Fluttering Dream - garzala

JUDGE: ANParker4123
I think the poems written by the author are really heartfelt. There could be an improvement in the creatively because it is pretty similar to other poems but overall it is a pretty nice collection of poems.

Breathing Love  -  DreamingEnchantress

JUDGE: ANParker4123
I think the concept is pretty old but I must mention that the way it is written is really good. 

Famous In Love  -  -thomasdohertyy

JUDGE: ANParker4123
I think the concept is really nice and something unlike the normal books but maybe there could be an improvement in the way of writing.

The Gifted Masters: A Silver Century - Celestious91 

JUDGE: RomanceFanatic1
• I was surprised at how unique this story was. I never seen a story so unique. Usually I would get a glimpse or dejavu of another story. I found none. Great job.

Hunger - Claceshadowhunterpt 

JUDGE: RomanceFanatic1
• I had to read some sentence again to make sense of what the author was trying to say. I believe with just a hint of a small proofreader or help. The grammar would be perfect.

The Lycan Within  -  xlionheart 

JUDGE: RomanceFanatic1
• This book has little similarity with others of the same genre. It was refreshing to read something so unique

My Possessive Vampire - VolleyGirl_104 

JUDGE: RomanceFanatic1
• The story crosses the line of both originality and similarities. The author shouldn't get discouraged though. Is a story about a possessive vampire. Aren't they all though?

The Fallen One  -  ZaynieBear   

judge: underatedpessimism
- love the character choices
- Nice start with the abomination and accident thing drew me in

Foreseen Nightmares  -  edara1999   

JUDGE: RomanceFanatic1

When I started to read the story I was thinking it was going to be the same flow. Following the storyline as other. But I kept reading to give a good review. All the way thru chapter 7 I was glad I was wrong. The story is completely unique and differs in every aspect from other story of its genre. It was truly refreshing to read.

Silent Verses  -  whiteshells123   

JUDGE: RomanceFanatic1
The story was slightly unique but there were some scene that seem similar to other抯 story of its genre.

In Love With Him  -  SayantiDatta   

JUDGE: RomanceFanatic1
- I found the story fascinating and unique. Vampire books is something I read a lot. I can honestly say the story was completely different from other story of its genre.

The Alpha's Daughter -  rebeccagragg   

JUDGE: RomanceFanatic1
Literally a page turner. I read this book in less than an hour. Great job and keep up the good work.

Between Love and Hate  -  belkisaris   

JUDGE: RomanceFanatic1
I love the writing style of this story. Sometimes you're reading a book without feelings or anything. This story gave you goosebumps in the right places and make you cry in the right scenes.

The Last of Her Kind - BFWorlds

JUDGE: anonymous
- You could read the book smoothly and wouldn't even notice the errors if you wouldn't look hard enough

Searching For My Heart  -  weaver_of_tales

judge: underatedpessimism
-  first with your intro it's great but its also very typical add a twist or something that would draw the readers in like a flaw

Alpha's Bargain - mistandfuryy

JUDGE: underatedpessimism
- Nice intro engaging: by introducing character flaw its not 100% typical

Twisted  -  marialoveswednesdays

JUDGE: underatedpessimism
When mason was introduced idk, he didn't seem that threatening, so I assumed he was the 'good guy' in the stereotypical plot line, just some food for thought:)

That Name Doesn't Exist  -  xxIWontBlackOutxx

JUDGE: UnicornThatLovesBTS
I believe that it needs to be more verbose, it also needs more twists. But I really loved the suspense, it makes the readers read more and more.

Mind Games  -  danielarsh  

JUDGE: UnicornThatLovesBTS
I liked it but it was a bit cliche. I suggest to add a twist like the murdered friend comes to life. But I did really love the other criteria.

Casey Opacus and the Cursed Ancestry - J-Copeland

JUDGE: UnicornThatLovesBTS
I believe that it was too descriptive like I already had the image in my head but the book was still describing. I liked that the vocabulary was good, also the plot was good.

Poison - miladysachi

JUDGE: UnicornThatLovesBTS
The start already gets me hooked. I love the events. Especially the suspense. The descriptiveness was enough and perfect.

Curse Of The Kind - Truewritersheart 

JUDGE: sweetly_sadistic_
I know I have given this book an almost perfect score but I really think the author deserves it. Amazing prologue, though at first I didn't really understand why the first set of characters were involved, maintains suspense and I really did like the book

4 Killers in Suburbia  -  BladeratopsT  

JUDGE: sweetly_sadistic_
author needs to give more descriptions, specify why the characters are even there and explain how they came together. Also the author keeps jumping from one incident to another and you don't get a chance to comprehend the incidents and it gets jumbled up

The Game of Revenge - fiction-fiesta

JUDGE: sweetly_sadistic_
it's a great start and screams mystery. I did really like the book and the author managed to keep me engrossed

Memories Mistaken - ShipiGee  

JUDGE: sweetly_sadistic_
Great interesting start, keeps the readers engaged, the summary attracts readers but it would be greater if there were more mentioned but overall great.

You and The Night - SaintIves__   

JUDGE: anonymous
- Finally! A decent read for this genre. Has very few mistakes. You could read the book smoothly and wouldn't even notice the errors if you wouldn't look hard enough

He Sees Me - ShawMcKnight   

JUDGE: anonymous
- No major grammar mistakes that distracts me from reading
- Only a few similarities to the typical story of the genre.

Fading Memories - MasterEpicnesss

JUDGE: anonymous
- Noticed a few silly words used. Some noticeable mistakes.
- Crosses over the line of both originality and similarities.

Scars Of The Past - oxnikeraxo

JUDGE: anonymous
- Grammar mistake on the first sentence of the first chapter "...everything when black". Noticeable errors and punctuation mistakes.
- Only a few similarities to the typical story of the genre
- Good enough. The "evilness" of the antagonists doesn't seem natural.
- Not much cohesion with the flow
- Good enough

Blinding Lights  -  ravenhelm98

JUDGE: @CrescenteFenice
• Though the concept is rather interesting, plot and story itself fall short. There is some inconsistencies within the story that need fixing.

When Silver Met Gold - IEscapist 

JUDGE: mistandfuryy
Feedback: I adore this book! Only three chapters in, you were able to lure me into the story! Your writing style is absolutely incredible; I felt as if I was reading a published book. I honestly could not find a reason to mark any of these categories down. Amazing!

Entry #3 - Author

JUDGE: CrescenteFenice
• It's different just kind of confusing.
• Lacks character building at all. Hardly any back story for anyone. It makes it hard to understand where the characters are coming from with the lack of a reason for their actions. EX. Why is Troy a drunk? How tall is he? Does he always act that way? Is Edric the only one who recruits? Why?

Love Happens  -  _musu__  

JUDGE: ShipiGee
The story has grammatical errors which are easily noticeable and the narration jumps between past and present tense which makes it a bit confusing. Character buildup was nice and intuitive but yet confusing at some point.

A Perfect Life Without You - helpmeimine 

JUDGE: mistandfuryy
Everything kind of seems really choppy in the book. You're showing the mc's thoughts, but not her feelings. I would also recommend adding some descriptions of characters/setting. There were a few grammar mistakes, but other than that, you're good. Also, I LOVE your cover!! So mysterious and elegant.

Beauty Lies  -  queen_licious 

JUDGE: mistandfuryy
I'm so sorry to say this, but your book is very cliché. I could predict every action that any character would take. There are grammar mistakes too. Also, don't put your quotes in italics, it's not supposed to be, unless you want to, then it's your choice. Everything happened really fast with the kiss and all, so I'd try slowing it down. Once again, sorry for being so rude ):

Don't You Remember  -  CarrieGChandler  

JUDGE: CrescenteFenice
• Needs work with comma's. Run on sentences make the story hard to read.
• Typical romance story, one night stand becomes love.

Finding My Valentine - BarnaliBiswasRay  

JUDGE: mistandfuryy
I do like your book! I like the descriptions and the way everything runs smoothly, especially conversations. It did tend to get a little boring by chapter 3, but that just might be because it's the start of the novel. Try adding more of the mc's feelings into the book and you'll be good!

Lost Butterfly - Charly_kaal

JUDGE: ShipiGee
While reading this piece, I found the plot quite interesting and refreshing. The writer has good foresight on how to turn the events accordingly to mold the story.

Welcome to AA  -  rachksnaps

JUDGE: CrescenteFenice
• definitely a page turner, it's a book that you never want to put down. Even know at the start of the book you believe it's going to be similar to "A Fault In Our Stars" it takes a unique turn separating this book from the movie/book mentioned previously. The author pulls you in with her writing style, it feels real.

A Mysterious Woman - Danica-Minax54  

JUDGE: ShipiGee
The writing of this story needs some improvement. The long paragraphs at one point of time become a bit boring n tedious for readers to read. As the story goes, it is a bit cliche dark past story. The emotions are straightforwarded in my opinion.

Fate - aishanitrisha28   

JUDGE: ShipiGee
This particular story caught my intrigue because there wasn't much mentioned ij the description. It feels while reading the story that something is bound to happen next. As the plot is not completed yet, it might turn out to be a plain simple romance story or it might be a really nice one.

Lovefool  -  Twinning94 

JUDGE: makcheetah
I loved this book. The grammar was perfect, I couldn't find any wrong spellings, bad phrases or anything. The story was a tad bit cliche, with the shy girl and popular guy scenario, but I like how you interpreted the blog into it, making it more original. It was a great page turner, the flow was amazing and easy to understand. Keep up the good work!!

Meant To Be (Love Story) - faty_n_ 

JUDGE: makcheetah
The plot line was very cliché, I could almost predict everything that was going to happen. The forced marriage, the groom and bride not liking each other, then actually falling in Love etc. What really killed it for me was the grammar. I couldn't focus on the plot line, because there were more grammatical mistakes then correct ones. I realize that you do say how there are many errors and to read at your own risk, but grammar makes up a lot of what interest readers. Fixing those errors (like capitalizing your I's) will help make your work flow so much easier. I did like how you interpreted the different languages. The character development needs a little push. I want to know a little more about the main characters.

The Girl At The Last - crazypoodle 

JUDGE: makcheetah
I loved this book! It was a total page turner. The characters are very relatable and it's refreshing to see how they both struggle in their own world. There were some grammar mistakes like spelling, but it still flowed perfectly. I loved the sarcastic humor and plot line. Fantastic job!

Transitions - blackbearrrr

JUDGE: Cray-CrayReading
Nice story line maybe if she had a proper flow it would make the book more enjoyable

What is MAck  -  MAckMalice

JUDGE: makcheetah
This book was ok. I couldn't really get into it however. Based on the first five chapters the plot line was smooth, and was intriguing to see what would happen. The grammar was alright, there needs to be some spacing between each dialogue. There were a lot of characters, which is ok, but they can sometimes get confusing. Good job!

His Beanie Girl - luckyGoody12  

JUDGE: Cray-CrayReading
book has a nice sort of flow but was too predictable

Royals - bluntpencils

JUDGE: Cray-CrayReading
like the story plot and love the cliche scenes but maybe if the book is edited properly it'll be better.

Clueless - sweetly_sadistic_   

JUDGE: Cray-CrayReading
I really enjoyed reading even though there are some grammatical mistakes. This book deserves to get noticed.

Escape Route - teller2    

JUDGE: anonymous
The first part of your story almost got me hooked but the "*flashback* *end of flashback*" is just too cringy. The content itself is fine, it's just the way you illustrate the flashback is the problem. Again, maybe it's just me. Maybe try finding another way to say it's a flashback? One thing that I liked about your story is that it has a mystery-ish vibe in it. Your points are almost perfect but I have to deduct a two or three on the writing style.

On The Rebound  -  squishieshnoofus   

JUDGE: anonymous
Not surprised why your book won so many awards. This is one of my most decent reads in this competition! Writing style is good. I was nervous when I read that part where she used a mirror, thought u gonna start describing the characters image in the mirror, but you didn't. So yey, finally something not so predictable.

Bad Boys Trapped Her - Sinchana_  

JUDGE: anonymous
It's nice that you familiarized us with the main characters on the first chapter but, eh, too much info dumping. Maybe it's just me tho. I'm not really a fan of just plainly describing their looks, whenever I read something like those on a book I literally throw em away. Specially with the part where you used a mirror to describe her lifeless eyes. But it's an improvement compared to those people who literally just describe everything whenever they see a mirror. It's just too convenient. I'm not surprised tho, I see these stuffs whenever i read romance and teen fiction genre here on watty. But aside from the writing style your scores on other criteria are good.

Uninvited  -  ShawMcKnight   

JUDGE: makcheetah
Based on the first ten chapters: The story line was much like other end of the world books. The characters were unique, but they could all use a little more background (which I'm sure is shown in the rest of the book). The dialogue can get a little confusing when there are several people talking and there aren't any "Jess said, Julian said" etc. The writing flowed, but could use just a little bit more of a push. Keep up the great work!

My Butterfly - BarnaliBiswasRay   

JUDGE: theunicornthequeen
• This story isn't something I'd read generally because it's just so absolutely full of metaphors!
• The first mistake I noticed is that you don't introduce the character... we don't even get his/her name! Secondly I want to point out that you can't "abruptly" throw on your shoes, because abruptly means all of a sudden in an unexpected sort of way!

The Heartless Mobster - _musu__   

JUDGE: theunicornthequeen
• I think maybe all the characters should be introduced more because there are so many names and it's very confusing unless the author introduces them properly, plus, how old are they all meant to be? Because one minute they are acting like teenagers and the next they're adults... confusing!

Saving Emily  -  taislebaron   

JUDGE: theunicornthequeen
• I am absolutely in love with this story! I think the characters are pretty well thought out and the story is full of mystery!

Rani Sees The World  -  Kelsea_Dove   

JUDGE: makcheetah
The character development was phenomenal! Great originality in the character. Rani learning how to love and how to be independent is amazing. There were some grammatical errors however, which can influence the overall writing flow. Keep up the good work!!

An Assassin in Time - PhoenixBMeadows   

JUDGE: theunicornthequeen
• Not at all my cup of tea. I found it very confusing, like it doesn't really have a storyline but instead is a collection of random action packed scenes.
• I only read 10 chapters but I ended up with a million questions and absolutely no answers and I really had no idea what was going on.
• Also, it's like the author presumes you know who the characters are already? They need to he introduced properly and it needs to be clear who is doing what in each moment.
• The grammar was pretty good which is obviously very important, but for me this story just really wasn't good. Sorry!

Oh My... Embarrassed Again!!!  -  BarryBJ

JUDGE: makcheetah
The book was comedic in a way, and you felt embarrassed for the main character. The individual stories should be split into their own individual chapters, so they stand alone. All the stories, seemed redundant, where the character has to dress up in costumes by losing a bet, etc. Interested to see where the story leads.

Adore  -  ms_adoorah 

JUDGE: anonymous
- The only thing that distracted me from reading is that you tend to omit connecting words like "to" or words like "the". There are also punctuation errors but I might have just overlooked.
- Crosses over the line of both originality and similarities. I've seen something like this before but on different genre. Even though the plot is familiar I still wanna know what happens next.
- Not a page turner. Some cliff hangers are forced but it's not the worst book that I've read.

Unable to Stay, Unwilling to Leave - SayantiDatta

JUDGE: anonymous
- I'm not sure what to say about your story. I felt like I was reading some sort of a narrative report about these two lovers or something. Maybe you should change the genre to Short Story? Since the chapters are too short and there are no big events or important happenings on each chapter.

The Artist's Skills - black_hole_survivor  

JUDGE: anonymous
- One of my decent reads in this competition. You could read the book smoothly and wouldn't even notice the errors if you wouldn't look hard enough

Death and The Deeds  -  RafiaZ

JUDGE: anonymous
The concept of this story is not that unique anymore. I'm not that satisfied with the plot. It's not the worst thing that I've read but it's not that kind of a page turner either. It's just... good enough. I'm also not satisfied on some chapters, not sure if they are too short or just lacking of some content. But then again... hey, this is chicklit. so maybe it's just me. Sorry if I can't give you a very detailed review. Do look forward on what your other judges would say. Tho your scores are pretty good despite of my semi-negative comment lol.

just learned how to post gifs here 😢 i'll be abusing this feature from now on 😈)

~ JUDGE: MondoMTPD ~

Control - Brooklyn3433

Control was easily surpassing the rest of the mature genre in the contest for level of maturity, grammar, and writing style. There was very little to find that were off, which I was happy to see, but it mostly concerned a grammar mistake I saw occurring again and again.

There were incomplete thoughts and sentences finishing when they should have been extended with a comma instead. Some sentences were not independent clauses or failed to keep the writing in a calm flow.

With that said, there wasn't much else to complain about. The protagonist is a female, Eva, who has a lovely mental Angel who promotes sexual thoughts about a man named Gavin , has a chapter all narrated by her, in which occurred the most mature situation: sex.

I was surprised, not because I wasn't expecting it, but rather because the other entries were based on Mature because of lgbt elements or vulgar language, so this story really helped tie in all the mature elements of the book. Seeing as it is a short story, I wish that the first two chapters were more revealing of some type of plot, which it may have done, but I was instead drowned by the authors way of words (which was sometimes interrupted by a period where I thought a comma would be better appreciated).

I would recommend this story to those who would enjoy a well written sex scene, with a bit more story elements found after the first sexual encounter. From the beginning you already know the story will be well written, and it doesn't fail to keep reminding the audience. I mean, look at the comments, there's already a group of dedicated Wattpadders who love the story, hehe.

The Aftermath: Masked Mutant - TheTrueTerrydactyl

There's a lot I can criticise, which I love about the book. @TheTrueTerrydactyl presents a work of literature in third person limited in an abstract way, with elements of both dystopia and humor. Set in a future with a destroyed America from war, Freddy is a mutant who says bad ass lines and acts as a killing machine when promoted to.

The plot of the book unfolds slowly, yet at a steady pace since the New "Old" World has yet to developed. I wish the narrative voice, which was both a nice touch but failed in certain areas, would have displayed information at a more comfortable pace and with better technique. There was also some unneeded information that could have been eradicated from the story, which would sometimes have the story flow much better.

There were some grammar mistakes considering punctuation, since some forms of usage with periods were done in the standard of Europe, while in other areas of the text, it followed American guidelines (I may be wrong, there could have just been prominent punctuation mistakes across both systems). I also found some misusage of periods and commas, in specific: some areas needed commas and others did not.

These errors, along with others that have not resurfaced from the reading, did not deteriorate from the content. Though a bit cliche in the way that the dystopia is set up, I found it unique enough to give it 4 points because of the more thought-out aspects of the world (so much so I find the narrative to begin giving information instead of showing).

Reading this attracted me as a reader and a judge, ultimately having me rating it a 8/10 for overall enjoyment because it seems to be able to attract readers of humor, action, and adventure. There were sentences from what I've already read that I feel in love with right away, which really lead me to that conclusion.

March From Darkness: Crypti

The story has a lot of content as a begins, and with the content, an onslaught of words, but it disappoints in its execution. I enjoyed the Norse ideology, and some philosophical touches the story included, but some aspects I found to be common with other stories I have read.

The protagonist has a character that is already building; a 6 foot homosexual male with a ponytail, and a more explosive though process, as "heard" from his mind (; I wish there were more memorable qualities to the character.

The sentences in the story drags a lot, and there are definitely parts that can be cut out and improve the story by doing so. Then again, some parts, such as the introduction of the Sofia was a nice dab of humor in the story, which I found a bit bland ): after reading the description that he's an assassin, I was thinking there would be some action on demand.

My overall enjoyment was on the lower side because the story lacked in action for me, especially for its genre. How the environment and actions are typed is less show and more tell, which makes the reading a bit dry. I appreciate the lacking of grammar mistakes, but the story falls into a long drag of mediocre settings I didn't find too fun to read. My enjoyment suffers even more so with the transitions, falling more on the weak side.

Nonetheless, I loved the ideology and the names of the demigods. Their personalities were developed from the start, and the ideas portrayed by the story has already got me thinking, from the democracy to suffer in Hel or not to, and then the dinner with the servants and their respective masters, ("just Dimitri, haha).

Juullezs | honey;

At first look, I thought of the title and cover to both be beautiful. The use of the semicolon is wrong, but it creates some sort of aesthetic effect that the cover elaborates upon.

And that is where it ends.

The story is centered on two wives who have their own conflicts in their respective working environments, veiled in LGBT and Mature themes. I disliked how Alex's gender wasn't mentioned until much too later (for me), but it would be a great small plot twist if played with better cohesion.

I also recommend a very hard editing process, due to the onslaught of improper grammar and dialogue. The story touches on sensitive topics but fails to relay the message because of such grammar mistakes, which taint the message. Characters are somewhat built, but society has been built sufficiently by the first few chapters. I also found the dialogue to be nice and natural, but that is overshadowed by the weak transitions which come as an influx to the reader throughout the chapters.

ShipiGee | Do I Know You?

*Contains Spoilers*

"Do I Know You" amazes in the Narators voice. It's distinct and even without a prior warning, allows for obvious distinguishment of which character POV is active. From what I've read, Mikki is a usually bold and snarky girl who prides herself in pranks until one is experienced by none other by an important person who could very well put her future in danger. Then Jared is introduced as a rich, prominent man, one who has a rusty past that involved the protagonist. From there the story develops.

The story is very much in need of revisiting to edit. How the sentences flow isn't great but manageable, but makes it a harder read. There are some great parts, though ruined by the obvious grammar mistakes. Characters are strong in quality and are developed enough to begin the story. There are parts where unnecessary information is disclosed, such as when the story describes the characters apparel for the day. I wish the characters were a bit more relatable, but her pranks made me cringe since I'm a goodie-goodie, hehe.

Overall enjoyment was a * for me, since some parts bored me since it seemed like a bit of filler, but other areas were entertaining.

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Sorry, the wattpad team is biting our asses with these Tagalog parts. Meanwhile they only notice those stories that reached the hotlist, they didn't even bother looking at those stories that weren't so popular and violated something. Meh.