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20 Truths - speakingofLynn

Judge: theunicornthequeen
The plot is interesting but slightly confusing. I like your characters though and I was moved by the bit where she talks about Liam committing suicide. Please continue writing!

Judge: AutumnWinters221
The opening chapter was very gripping but as I moved forward into the story, I found that it lost a little bit of it's spark - though not enough to make me stop reading - but it also tackles some important issues such as the pressure and criticism of family; which can be a driving force behind a lot of suicidal thoughts and so in this respect, the author has done well considering this is a major topic in their book. I may suggest an edit to polish the book and this would also give the author a chance to rewrite a couple of sentences to make them flow better and to polish the grammar, for example: Their use of '-' in place of either full stops or ';' though it doesn't take away from the story, it does affect how it reads. Keep writing 'speakingofLynn' you're doing really well!

Judge: Narrative_love
This book is close to perfect. The sentences used are not in anyway cliché. The ending of chapter makes one keep flipping!

Judge: brighteststarever
I want to commend the author for being brave to tackle such a sensitive topic. I hope you can achieve your goal and bring awareness to your readers. I think you just have to work on the technicalities part.

A Dream to Reality - abellanacara101

Judge: theunicornthequeen
The grammar needs improving. You keep on mixing tenses and it comes off as awkward. Despite all of this, I have to commend you for writing about something so difficult. Please continue writing!

Judge: AutumnWinters221
The author switches frequently between tenses in their opening prologue. They also use repeated words, making a sentence redundant - as though they're trying to up a word count on an essay - for example: 'My room was dark, it was covered in darkness, as if there was a big shadow covering it.' Their use of 'darkness' wasn't necessary as they had already described it was dark and the use of covered/covering was also unnecessary. The plot is unique and interesting and I would be more than happy to read a book with this plotline, however the grammar and the tense-hopping is very off-putting and actually made me give up after chapter two. I would suggest that the author go over their works with a fine tooth comb and pay extra attention to the grammar, the way their sentences flow, and their writing style.
I saw that the writer is Filipino and therefore, English may not be their first language. May I suggest that they read a lot of english-written books to practice and gain technical skills from. They are free to message me if they're in need of recommendations. I believe, if the author practice's and performs a major-polish, then not only could the book be really good, but with an imagination like theirs, the writer could be too.

Judge: Narrative_love
The storyline is a bit unique seeing as it doesn't follow the normal plot of most teen fiction stories. The way the author narrates is slightly confusing and the main character doesn't really leave an impression- of a confused, pained and somewhat afraid man who thinks he's going insane- to the reader.

Judge: brighteststarever
Nice plot but poor execution. There are a lot of improvements to be done especially when it comes to punctuations, tags and tenses. A story with a good grammar attracts more readers.

Breaking Up - ShawMcKnight

Judge: theunicornthequeen
The plot is interesting although a little bit slow moving. It's build up for Jax being some kind of psycho perhaps but a little too slowly. I like you characters, especially Ayden and Davis but when there's a conversation it gets a little confusing as to who is speaking.

Judge: AutumnWinters221
There were grammatical mistakes, mainly the repeated use of full stops. Almost all of the sentences in the book are short and choppy, making it feel like I was reading a book of random facts about your characters instead of a book. Another problem I had was that it's not always clear who is saying what dialogue - there are no identifying qualities to the conversations making it a guess. The plot is very teen-mystery which by definition is meant to be slow paced in order to build up the reveal/twist at the end, however I feel like your book could maybe do with a little bit of quickening in terms of pace. Keep practicing and reviewing your own work! Everytime you look back, I can guarantee you'll find ways to improve it, yourself! Good luck and I hope you do well!

Judge: Narrative_love
The book is interesting and the grammar is flawless. The book gets confusing because it isn't clear on who said what during a conversation and the scenario changing also gets confusing. There are many characters but they are still unique and different.

Judge: brighteststarever
While I was reading the story, I found the narration a bit off. I really couldn't pinpoint which is making it that way, maybe the structure or the writing style. What I can suggest is for the author to make each part appealing by describing more. Describe more so we could feel more.

Captured Soul - midhumeghana

Judge: theunicornthequeen
I want to start by saying that there is a definite improvement in your writing as the story progresses. I think that's something that needs congratulating!
The grammar is quite bad because you mix verbal tenses, there are sentences that are out of order and some that don't make any sense.
I also think that their is a lack of description (especially at the start).
Also please use capitals at the start of a sentence, you don't use capitals during dialogue and I don't understand why.
If you went through editing and adding more description, this story could be quite good! Don't be discouraged and keep on writing ;)

Judge: AutumnWinters221
The books starts out quite rocky in terms of grammar and cohesion however the writing style improves as it goes on. The book's plot seems interesting enough however it was very confusing - or atleast to me - if this book was deliberately fanfiction or if the names are coincidental, at first. It became more evident as it progressed and I would suggest to the author that they make this apparent in the very beginning so that people not in those fandoms - like myself - can abandon ship. It feels deliberate that the author didn't mention this, hoping maybe to draw a reader in so completely that they'd either not realise or move past the fact it is a work of fanfiction however, it was definitely a stopping point for me as I am not a fan of this type of writing. If the author wants their work to appeal to the masses, I would suggest a name change and a rewrite and overall edit in order to remove the fanfiction element and improve grammar.
This is of course just a suggestion and completely up to the author. I may not appreciate the subtle art of fanfiction however, it is a well known fact that there are millions of people on wattpad who do. I wish the author luck and success in this genre.

Judge: Narrative_love
The plot was a cliché at first but an unexpected plot twist changed my view on the story a little. The characters do not leave that much impression on the reader as the author isn't detailed in explaining.

Judge: brighteststarever
Always start a sentence with a capital letter even if it is inside the quotation marks. You can also improve your narration by showing us more of what's happening by describing more and giving us details. I noticed that almost half of every chapter are conversations without even proper descriptions.

Center Of Attraction - titaniumdioxide

Judge: theunicornthequeen
I am completely confused, I don't really know what's going on at some points of the story. It's like it's a load of random scenes stuck together. You need to be careful with the pacing of your dialogue, it doesn't feel natural and you use it a lot. I also think that some of conversations are unnecessary like the one about coffee being hot or warm? I love the names of the characters and I think in your mind you have a good plot, I just don't know what it is yet. If you ever edit this story I will definitely give it another try : )

Judge: AutumnWinters221
After a somewhat intriguing opening, the book began to decline. The constant use of dialogue in place of descriptive writing became slightly tiresome and I suggest the author reduce some of that and while they're at it - the use of capital letters during dialogue to exaggerate the feeling or tone of the words is not necessary, just use an exclamation point. There are also a few grammar issues, such as using a capital letter after a comma. I appreciate the hints of what the plot could become however implore the author to be dubious on how the book is paced. I suggest an edit to polish the book and believe that once it is done, then the book could be very gripping. Keep working at it!

Judge: Narrative_love
The story was confusing at first but as it progresses it became understandable. The characters are slightly alike as not much effort is put into describing them.

Judge: brighteststarever
There were some minor errors but did not really affect the flow of the story. The consistent error you've been doing was using period to end a dialog which was followed by a dialog tag. If that's the case, comma is the proper punctuation to use.

Cracked By Him - ScarlettBlackDaisy

Judge: kaninga_duh
Grammer : There basically was no grammatical mistakes at all, but some of the sentences are not smooth enough, and some polishing can be done to that part. Otherwise, it's great!
Character building : Let's go through the characters you've mentioned so far. There's Hayden, who seems like a typical bad boy, who smokes and gives the impression of being a rule breaker. Hayden has family problems as well. There's Will, who is Hayden's friend, and is - in Hayden's opinion - a goody two shoes, a "jerk" and the only reason he puts up with Will is because he's too sweet to give him away. In a way, this Will reminds me of Will Solace from The Trials of Apollo, who is also a ray of sunshine. These characters are solid but they don't give me a lasting impression because I've seen too many bad boys in stories. Helena, however, leaves a lasting impression on me, and she's different from other typical heroines you see in teen fictions, and I can see the changes you make for her that's atypical and not often seen.
Writing style : You start with the prologues which gives us insight on both Helena and Hayden, but both of the prologue feels too much like an info dump and less with a prologue. The last part of both the prologues are the best, and they are both able to draw me in, but I don't recommend having information dumps in the prologue.
Uniqueness of the plot : Your story starts off with the usual things happening, but the thing is that Hayden falls for Helena after just barely meeting her. After the first few chapters, things start to get interesting, and I really appreciate the effort made because this story is just so gripping and it has a lot of twists and turns and it really intrigues me.
Overall enjoyment : I love your characters and the plot as well, I can definitely see why it's won so many awards!

Judge: theunicornthequeen
WOW. I'm basically speechless.mI completely forgot I was supposed to be reviewing this story and let myself just enjoy it. I haven't read it all yet but I most definitely will. The story combines the cliché bad boy/good girl story with an original plot and I LOVE it. I'm worried about what will happen next because I know it can't be good, the author's note at the beginning told me that much. Congratulations on writing a story I would definitely read and reread in my spare time! Oh, and well done on only having one big typo in the 22 chapters I read, it has been well edited.

Judge: brighteststarever
It's nice to know that you are sharing a true story. Through this, I hope that as the story progresses, we could feel how "true" the story is by giving us the needed emotions since of course it already happened. I just found the POVs of the two main characters slightly the same. Give each POV a distinction wherein even without mentioning whose POV it is, we can already distinguish it.

Judge: AutumnWinters221
The book is written very well, grammatically! The characters are well established early on and it makes me, as a reader want to read on! I'm quite impressed with the authors use of wording and how cohesively the story flows. It's very easy to read and the plot is very interesting.

Cream Puffs and Courtship - ThatMatchie

Judge: kaninga_duh
Grammer : I see no grammatical errors, no punctuation errors, basically there's nothing grammatically wrong so far. Your sentences are smooth and coherent, and there are no spelling mistakes as well. However, in some cases, such as in Chapter 1, there were 2 girls, Ella and Evie. At first, you referred to Evie as the "young lady" and Ella as the "younger girl". Later, you referred to Evie as the "young girl" without saying her name and it might confuse some readers.
Character building : Your characters are wonderfully built, but most of then just don't leave lasting impression on me. Your main problem is that you don't really have any specific characteristics that are immediately distinguishable for that particular character, because most of them are too similar. Take Kennedy and Ella for example. They're both bubbly, and like to have fun, and so far, I haven't foumd any characteristic differences between them yet.
Writing style : I love your writing style! It's very unique and it's really able to draw me in, and the world you created for this story really helped with improving the writing style for your story as well. Even though the story's set in a different "dimension", you don't do information dumps but you still leave bits and pieces of information to help us learn what this place is like, and kudos to you for managing to do that!
Uniqueness of the plot : This story reminds me a bit of a story I've seen on the app Episode once, with a "normal village girl", somehow meeting the "prince" of the country, and in that story, they fall in love. In this story, I see more. Evie faces problems, and it makes people sympathize, or empathize, with her. Most of the details are different, but the basic idea is similar. Since I've already seen a book similar to yours, I daresay that there are more similar ones, but your's is different from your normal teen fiction, and you truly deserve a four out of five.
Overall enjoyment : 8.5/10 - I really love your plot and your characters, and you made a very lasting impression on me, starting with the amazing cover. This is a really good piece of work, good job!

Judge: theunicornthequeen
I love this story! It's unique and the characters are very well rounded. Devon is so cute and Tina is the nicest friend ever. I also love Ella and Evie's relationship! There were no obvious grammar mistakes and the pacing was good. No complaints. I really really enjoyed this, thank you!

Judge: brighteststarever
The story itself is good. And I'd like to commend the author for the title because it is so catchy. This story is one of those that caught my attention because of its title. Just be careful when working with dialogs. Don't make continuous dialogs. Put descriptions every now and then. Describe what's happening while the characters are talking.

Judge: AutumnWinters221
This story really sucks you into the plot. The descriptive words used are very effective in stimulating your brain into imagining the world they've created! The storyline is crazy and unique, the way they've taken all of these wattpad tropes and combined them for a book that wouldn't usually be found! I will continue to read this book and look forward to seeing how it develops!

Fantasies and Broken Dreams - sweetly_sadistic_

Judge: kaninga_duh
Grammer : Your sentences are coherent and I can read them easily, but you often miss a comma or a punctuation mark. Your tenses sometimes change as well, you should stick to one tense for the whole story - unless it's a flashback or a dream. I noticed in chapter 1, the mistakes aren't that noticeable, but around chapter 2, I start noticing more mistakes, but all of then are easily fixed with some editing.
Character building : Your characters are diverse and they give me a sense that the story could actually happen in the real world, which gives readers a connection to them. You also hinted on that Hazel had a bad experience with "bad boys", but we don't know for sure, so it really builds suspense. Jason and Zeke also didn't really leave a long lasting impression on me, because they seem too similar, both with good looks and both are part of the "popular kids" group.
Writing style : It's a bit jumpy, especially from the second to the third chapter and the flow of the story would be much more coherent if you rewrote the start of chapter three like this : The party turned out to be pretty amazing, though it was shocking on a certain level as well. When I reached the first floor - luckily without falling this time - my mind was full of questions for Adrian. This paragraph could be used to establish the connection between the 2 chapters, because you didn't mentioned anything about Adrian in the first quarter of the chapter until Hazel bumoed into him again.
Uniqueness of the plot : I can clearly see the clique you're following, but you did add some of your own flair to it, and that's what makes the story ten times more enjoyable. However, there were some parts of the story that were too similar to the basic outline of the good girl and the bad boy clique, for instance "accidentally" bumping into the bad boy of the school at a party, and it was her best friend's idea to go to that party. As a reader, after seeing that clique for multiple times in teen fiction stories, it gets boring.
Overall enjoyment : Your title was intriguing, and the cover totally drew me in. I could understand how the story is probably going to go, but you still managed to surprise me with the occasional twists and turns. I liked the effort put into this book, plus the mistakes maken were only minor ones, and after a few minor corrections and edits, this story will be a whole lot better!

Judge: theunicornthequeen
The characters are well done but I think the pacing is slightly off. The storyline is cliché but I like it and I LOVE Adrian. It's a great story and I can't wait to read more!

Judge: brighteststarever
Looking through the story, it is evident that the author knows his/her thing. Just a little more improvement especially on proper punctuations. And there's this thing that I can't really pinpoint but while reading, I felt like something's missing. More emotion, I guess. And please avoid putting author's notes in the middle of the story.

Judge: AutumnWinters221
I was enjoying this book but am majorly put off by the use of author's notes in the first chapter at the end of sentences regarding casting and looks of characters. It rips people from the world you're trying to create and makes them very aware they're reading a book. It's annoying and useless. If you want to ask your readers questions, do one big A/N at the end of the chapter. It made me want to stop reading. I carried on in spite of this and found that the overall storyline is cliche but it's not cheesy. I happen to be a fan of cliches but maybe find a new way of saying 'the bad boy' like maybe outlining some things he's notorious for or maybe saying, 'the boy that everyone knows by reputation'.
The author should continue writing with confidence. There are a couple of grammatical errors which can be fixed with editing and are in every book so the author shouldn't feel bad about that! I enjoyed the plot!

How Far I Went - Yeahyeah_Erickson72

Judge: theunicornthequeen
It's hard to judge this story because it is very short but from what I've read, the grammar isn't too bad and the plot has potential.

Judge: kaninga_duh
Grammer : Your grammer is nice but occasionally I see a few errors, such as double spacing in the prologue and some grammatical errors near the end of the prologue. You sometimes miss some words (eg. "My sister is sitting on the bed holding pepper spray..." You should add 'a can of' before pepper spray) You also tend to include dialogue in the same paragraph as a description, but I suggest you to have a separate paragraph, and between the spacing of the paragraphs, try to have a line in between so readers can clearly see that there is a second paragraph.
Character building : I feel that your main character is a bit cliche and from reading the description, I learnt that Emma, at a young age, was put through foster care and she struggles to find a place in the world. This isn't an information dump, but I feel that you should include more in your description to hook readers in. In the second chapter, the characters such as Frankie and Rosie need more description, maybe you could include a conversation between them and have them say something about their personality or background, because all our knowledge about Frankie and Rosie are limited to their names and a brief description of their looks.
Writing style : Your writing style varies sometimes from having an information dump about that person, while sometimes giving little to none information about the characters. You should evenly spread the information, and I suggest you polish your description as well. The only lines of the description were about the main character, but what about the background information, the suspense? In chapter 3, the cliffhanger was hooked me in, and made me wanted to read more. Good job there!
Uniqueness of the plot : When I read the first chapter and the prologue, I wasn't really surprised by the plot and the twists and turns. Your story at first sounded like a cliche. Towards the end of chapter 1, I was pleasantly surprised because I hadn't been expecting that the foster parents were nice, because their house was described as a house that reminded her of a horror movie. The second chapter wasn't cliche as well. I liked that Emma could be accepted as the new kid, because the "new kid is an outcast" cliche is too overrated.
Overall enjoyment : Your book isn't perfect, and some areas need polishing, but your story was enjoyable and I sense that you have a lot of potential, keep practising and you'll improve!

Judge: brighteststarever
I have to be honest that there's a lot of improvements needed for this story. I believe the author has a good plot in mind. It shows in the first chapters of the story. However, the delivery of the story was not well-done. Most are quite confusing to read. Work on the writing techniques—grammar, punctuations, spacing, etc. With great narration, I think this story would be amazing.

Judge: AutumnWinters221
I found it hard to read, not because of the storyline - which seems extremely intriguing - but the way it's written. The author does not do paragraph breaks between dialogue which makes it hard to follow because I got lost as to who was saying what. Another reasons for paragraph breaks: The author writes long blocks of words that blend in together and it makes the writing look like a very daunting task. If I were to suggest anything, I'd suggest the author changes the layout of her writing to make it easier to read and aid in the flowability of the words.

How To Be A Heartbreaker - ScarletFairy-

Judge: theunicornthequeen
FOr me the story was paced wrong, it was too fast. That made it hard to follow and enjoy, or at least in my opinion. Despite the pacing, your story was pretty good because the grammar was fine and your characters were built quite well. It's a good story!

Judge: kaninga_duh
Grammer : Your grammer is fine, I barely see any grammatical errors, but I suggest you to add a word or two in the middle of a sentence to make the story flow more smoother. On several occasions, I also spotted incorrect use of punctuation, such as using as a dash when a comma can be used. It isn't anything major, and it can easily be fixed.
Character Building : I know very little about the characters in the book, and all the characters I know are Tyler, Mia, her dad and the person who fired the gun so far. Even so, I know very little about Mia or Tyler, who seem to be the main characters. The characters give off a mysterious feel, but I don't think that that mysterious feel suits Mia. In Rule #2 (chapter 2), it feels like an information dump about Malia's friends, so maybe you could weave their descriptions about their personality and looks through Mia's point of view, instead of straight on telling us what they look like.
Writing style : The description of the book could be more organized, and I suggest combining the first and last snippet together and leave the second snippet as it is to make the description seem more organized. The actual story's writing style is quite inventive, and it had me hooked.
Uniqueness of the plot : I like the start of the book, it really gives off the mysterious vibe. I also didn't expect a twist to the plot though, I never thought that Mia was a new student - if she is, why does she know Tyler? The story also looks like it was based off the bad boy and the good girl cliche, but it's got it's own twist and turns, so it's definitely interesting.
Overall enjoyment : Your plot has definitely hooked me in, and I'll definitely look forward to reading more of your work in the future!

Judge: brighteststarever
Narration-wise, the author is good. He/she knows how to work with words. Just a few more improvements and it would be superb. Just work on the dialog part. Be wary of the spacing and the proper punctuations to be used.

Judge: AutumnWinters221
Honestly, I am confused about the overall genre and storyline of this book. I can tell that it's intended to be a love story between Tyler and Mia with the twist but I can't tell what the twist is and without sounding mean, I lost interest quite quickly. It'd be my recommendation that the writer adds more details about the surroundings and uses all five senses to transport the reader into their universe. I also suggest that they reveal a few more clues and moments to keep the interest of the reader.

Invisible Scent - xTheRoseIsMex

Judge: brighteststarever
Even though the flow and the scenes are a bit predictable (at least for the first few chapters), I still hope that there'd be a good twist as the story progresses. I think the major issue I've encountered while reading the story is grammar. There are many noticeable mistakes especially when it comes to proper spacing and punctuations as well as the proper past tense of some verbs. These hindered me from reading your story smoothly. And I want to be very specific with this one; from the very beginning, there's already a mistake—you've spelled Prologue as Prolouge. I'm giving you the benefit of the doubt that it was just a typographical error but as a writer, it is our duty to go over our works and look for possible errors especially that this one is the title of your chapter. In this case, it is literally the first thing that the readers would see (well, aside from the title and the blurb) so having that simple error might leave a lasting impression of your story.

Judge: Narrative_love
The book has many noticeable errors. Mistakes like: wrong use of punctuation marks, spelling mistakes, lack of accurate paragraphing, the list goes on. The characters aren't that bad, if they were put into an edited work I'm sure they will make more sense. The writing style and uniqueness of plot are the same- when I think I'm finally getting what it's about something happens and I'm like 'I give up!'. The book isn't overall bad because the writer has an idea in mind (I think) and a good editing overnight will definitely help.

Mission Disaster - pandacupcake1024

Judge: Narrative_love 
This book is really good! There is hardly any grammatical error except for some paragraphing mistakes that are hardly noticeable. The characters are unique and different. I fell in love with Kat and Dexter at first sight. I wanted to stop reading after the first five chapters but I always say 'let's just take a peak at the next chapter'. So yeah, totally a page turner!

Judge: brighteststarever
I LIKE YOUR STORY! It is one of my two favorites for this set. Your concept's so amazing and is really unique for the genre. I got hooked and I actually finished all the published chapters! However, there's just something missing in your story. Maybe add more details and describe more the scenes. Do not just tell us what is happening but make us feel that we are a part of the story. I was also bothered by those inside the parentheses. You may omit them as they are, for me, unnecessary. Nonetheless, your work is superb! I'll definitely read your story even after judging it.

Judge: AutumnWinters221
It's very rare (at least for me) to read a wattpad book of this genre with a spy component to it. I was really intrigued and got a sense of the main character's personality straight away! The grammar has a couple of errors but nothing that takes away from the experience of the writing or the impact of the words. I look forward to reading on with this one as I find it refreshing and intriguing. Well done to the author!

New Girl In The City - Wizard-Hunter

Judge: Narrative_love 
The writer has a unique way with words that keeps me on my toes. There are lots of mysteries that keeps me flipping through pages. The characters- especially Grace-are secretive and any of their action triggers an emotion in me.

Judge: brighteststarever
Honestly, as I started reading your work, I thought that it would be just another cliché story but hey, you've proven me wrong! I was intrigued and the mystery behind the character's true identity kept me reading! Great job on that! You also have a talent in narrating things very well. It is very descriptive and I felt like I was with the characters. You only have to work on some technicalities such as proper punctuations and capitalization especially when you are using dialog tags. There are also some misspelled words. Also, know when to cut sentences.

Judge: AutumnWinters221
This book sucked me in right away. The writing was well thought out, easy to follow and the visual aids at the beginning of the book are very well done! The story has aspects of the cliche but uses them in a completely non-cheesy and unique way! The characters are well described and aren't over fictionalised. Reading this book, feels like the characters could be real people, experiencing real things, while still having a slight feel of the unrealistic that I enjoy from a book. Really well done to the author.

Not the Only One (The Four of Us #1) - eternalfelicity

Judge: brighteststarever
There are a lot of stories in Wattpad that are alike from your story. I suggest you add more spice and a big twist to set yours apart from the rest of the stories having the same concept. Be more descriptive so that it would not be too plain. There are also too many POVs leaving the readers no mystery. Take note that revealing everything to us might stop us from reading your work. It makes your story very predictable. It is really bothersome knowing almost everyone's thoughts. Give the readers something to look forward to—secrets, mysteries, other characters' thoughts. Having questions in mind makes the readers read more because they want to know the answers in the next chapters.

Judge: Narrative_love
Despite being narrated from different point of views, the book is easy to follow and understand. The characters are so different yet they fit perfectly together. The plot is unique in its own aspect despite being a bit of a cliché. The book is really one of those you patiently wait for an update from the author.

Judge: AutumnWinters221
Truthfully, the story has potential however I found a lot of it confusing to follow. Writing multiple povs in the story are a hard thing for any writer to try - even with just two and this writer has five - and I commend the authors courage to attempt such a feat however feel like she does not pull it off as well as she hoped. The characters are quite one dimensional and I found it hard to relate with any of them. The use of words like 'Yass' in a story just stand out as red flags to me because they look tacky written in a book and truthfully, the trend of 'yass' will die out eventually like all others before it. If the author wants her book to stand the test of time, she should stick solely to words used in everyday language by every generation and not just tweens.
The grammar is almost flawless however, there are a few errors which I'm sure the author will rectify when she edits it.
Switching POVS halfway through a chapter is unnecessary and confusing. Fair enough if the author wants to tell one chapter from both sides but doing it consistently throughout the book makes it very hard to follow. To be completely honest - although it is refreshing to see a high school setting through a teachers eyes - I don't think the teachers POV is needed. It takes away from the book.
The twist at the end with the two male leads being brothers was consistently foreshadowed in an obvious way and I feel like the author could write some of the clues in a more subtly hinted kind of way because sadly, I was not surprised by that at all... I actually expected it.
I also can't help but feel as though the book would be written better in third person, that way the author could capture all of the feelings of all characters from their own point of view. Because of the constant pov jumping, the relationships between Miles and Rachel and Luke and Brooke don't give me authentic feelings.
There are massive pacing issues with the book. It moves far too fast with the feelings and the overall plot. I get teenagers live their lives at a hundred miles an hour, however it's hard to read that. Miles' initial crush for Rachel comes seemingly out of nowhere and develops into full blown love within a couple chapters. Brooke disdain for Luke also does a complete 180 degrees, again within a couple chapters. There is no slow burn romance that I, personally adore. There's no suspence and the author relies on these relationships to keep the book progressing as well as the background plots that again, move too fast. The author should slow it down and add more details using all five senses to give the book more realism and suck readers into this world they're trying to create.
I really commend this author for tackling huge issues such as abusive parents and the effects of bullying on teenagers and enjoyed discovering how these situations played out during the course of the book.
The author is a good writer, no doubt and they could even be great with a little more practice and experience, however I would suggest that reading many books and getting a sense for how other writers describe their settings may be a useful thing for them to do. Reading is subjective and some may disagree with my views and if the writer wants to completely ignore me, that is one-hundred-percent up to them, however if I were them, I would be thinking seriously about some revisions. I did enjoy the book overall and will also admit that this is one of the few books on the list that I read until the end however suggest that the author works on all things listed above to make the reading experience more enjoyable

R&J: A Forbidden Court-ship - Annalisa_Coppolino

Judge: brighteststarever
Reading your work felt like reading a best-selling published book! Being a grammar nazi, I was very happy reading your story. I only found two errors which are very minor and barely noticeable. Your writing style is superb! I felt like I was in the story. I can't really say anything more because I'm almost speechless with your work. I definitely love it!

Judge: Narrative_love
There is hardly any error in this book. The characters are unique and there is a strong bond that draws me to the book based on the way the writer writes. The book is a unique one because it shows Romeo and Juliet in a different way.

Judge: AutumnWinters221
I appreciate the storyline and am intrigued by the main characters however I would suggest the pace of the first couple of chapters be increased to get into the overall storyline quicker. I do appreciate the way the writer has tried to incorporate elements of romeo and juliet into their story! It's very unique although I am not sure it's my taste. Reading is subjective, though and for that reason, I am sure it will be very popular.

Sorry Charlie - ANTARl

Judge: AutumnWinters221
The authors technical skills are very well polished which helped the books readability and didn't make it feel like a chore to read. The storyline is a basic 'boy next door' with a twist since its not her door he's next to, but her best friends. It looks to be shaping up as a cute-read, cliched, love triangle book that will appeal to the teen masses but may be overlooked by older readers.

Judge: Narrative_love
There is hardly any noticeable grammar mistake. The characters are unique and each of them gives you a different impression. Though the writing style is a bit confusing, the plot keeps one reading for it is somewhat a twisted cliché.

Judge: brighteststarever
The story has a nice narration and is very descriptive. It is easy to imagine and the plot is easy to follow. The thing I noticed most is the use of comma. As I was reading, I thought it was overused. Though it may be grammatically correct but, somehow, using too much of it made some sentences/parts bothersome to read.

The Bad Boy Prize Possession - xAnnabella_115x

Judge: AutumnWinters221
This author needs to work on their flowability. Not to be harsh but the experience was similar to reading a grocery list. There were barely any actual sentences. A lot of full stops. And Weird paragraph breaks. I think this author has great potential but needs to work on their technical skills. Practice makes perfect! It felt like the author may be young of age, maybe fifteen or so? And just discovering her writing style. We have all been there and I wish her the best of luck.

Judge: Narrative_love
Even with the cringe-worthy mistakes and the cliché plot, a good writer- like this author- can always keep you reading and make you fall in love with the characters (like I fell in love with the cocky bad boy).

Judge: brighteststarever
There are a lot of noticeable errors especially when it comes to grammar and proper punctuations. There are also too many notes written inside the parentheses which are kind of off and made the story awkward to read.

The Chemistry Between Us - arlised52

Judge: Narrative_love 
This book is over ninety-five percent free of grammar mistakes. The main characters were strongly built and so is the plot. The writing style has a coherent flow with the plot which makes one not able to get enough of it.

Judge: brighteststarever
Feedback: The author has a good way of writing and the characters are well-presented in the story. The only thing I had a problem with was the dialogs. There were instances wherein there were continuous dialogs. There were no descriptions in between, not even dialog or action tags. Be cautious as that may make that part of the story boring and, sometimes, confusing.

Judge: AutumnWinters221
There were grammatical mistakes, mainly when lower case letters were used after a full stop. There is an example of this in chapter 2 so the author should check that out and go through their writing carefully to rectify this mistake. The overall plot line seems like it is a cliche with a small twist which I enjoy. I feel like the Author should put more sarcasm and life into their main character, William. I get that he is mopey over Lilian but he comes across a little drab.

The New Girl - Dorcasdeke

Judge: AutumnWinters221
The Author has a lot of grammatical errors, mainly stemming from their lack of full stops and commas throughout. The plot is cliche but a lot of people enjoy this kind of story and I imagine it will do well with its intended audience however it didn't flow the way I wished it would and a major note to the author would be that leaving 'authors notes' in the middle of the story is distracting and unnecessary.

Judge: Narrative_love
Even with the spelling mistakes and the cliché plots, the way the characters are put into writing makes one ignore the mistakes and swirl in their imagination, which is the main purpose of writing.

Judge: brighteststarever
The major error I found in the story was punctuations. Never forget to put a period at the end of a sentence unless, of course, if it's a question or an exclamation. This also applies to dialogs. Use period to end dialogs unless you'll use a dialog tag in which case you have to use a comma. Be also wary of your spacing.

The Royal Renegade - MartPuniste

Judge: AutumnWinters221
I really enjoyed the chapters of this book that I read and I am definitely going to keep reading. It gives off 'Hunger Games' and 'Harry Potter' vibes. Two franchises of which I devoured and loved so I may be biased as I say, I am really looking forward to seeing how this one turns out!

Judge: Narrative_love
The way this book was written is very intriguing. The writer decided to make the story stand out in many aspects, which s/he succeeded. The figures of speech used makes the story more captivating.

Judge: brighteststarever
Superb grammar! The story was also well-narrated. It was very descriptive and easy to imagine. It feels like I was part of the story. And, also, I love the concept! Overall, it was amazing!