Only --hacked completed the list. Hence the result for this category will only be based on the scores given by --hacked .

A love like no other - Euna__

Judge: --hacked
I really like how you've described every details in your story. The story goes beyond a boundary wherein, it all started with an eerie way and  then went into a full blast of mysteries. It was exciting and fun to read. Regarding errors in the story or needs to be improved, maybe with only a little touch of proof reading because the flow and plot are already in it's best shape! Keep it up! :)

Judge: Huntrezz54
Judge: arlised52

Battle of the undead - let_alpha_write

Judge: --hacked
Your story has been one of those horror short stories that gave me a thrille in reading! The way you constructed the sentences, no errors, and good details made it easy to imagine. I've been interested in this kind of stories, regarding battles and fantasies. One of the best! Keep it up! :)

Judge: Huntrezz54
Judge: arlised52

Blood War - katycage

Judge: --hacked
I'll make my feedback short. I found your story really exciting! I was hooked up starting from the part 1 itself then realized I was intriggered all the way. Your writing style is amazing, just like how fantasy novels from a published book! There comes the way your characters are also built! I love it all the way. Keep it up! :)

Judge: Huntrezz54
Judge: arlised52

Feast or Famine - SoelleKhiss

Judge: --hacked
Just by reading the first five chapters, I couldn't help but be amazed! I love how the story went by! It was amazing, I'm keeping my comment short and just tell you straight. "I really love it!" The way you describe every details were easy to imagine, the way the character speaks, and also the twists! I really enjoyed reading it! Keep it up! :)

Judge: Huntrezz54
Judge: arlised52

Haunting - LostIn2Sight

Judge: --hacked
       I've read your story truly! The story wasn't that bad but also not that alluring. I just wanted to be honest with you, this is not because of the overall plotline but it was because you only published one chapter. I think the one that I've read was a teaser so no matter how I see it, it was missing something. The introduction of the 3 girls, and also of those about their adventures as livinggood. I hope that you'll soon publish the other chapters so that your story will have it's spices. You don't really have to worry about your plotline because you have it all on your head, it's just that I couldn't find it with only one chapter at hand. Keep it up! :)
       I'm sorry for the inconvenience before^^ It was good that you've corrected me regarding the issue last time. When I read your story, there's alot of hints of exciting events I've come acrossed, and at the same time ordinary which can be classified as something that even normal people can feel when it happens to them. The story plotline was great, just a few scratches on errors. Tho, I think that's going to be an easy task if ever you edit your story. Good Luck :)

Judge: Huntrezz54
Judge: arlised52

Illusion - incubuslamia

Judge: --hacked
       You have an interesting way of your writing style when the protagonist writes in her diary. You also make it realistic when it comes to her daily life. Tho, what I wanted to tell you was that I was not much satisfied because of the grammars in the story, I couldn't help but overlook it sometimes but can actually be bothered by it as well. You really don't have to worry of such little errors, I know that editing it, would be easier for you when you want to.
       So back to the topic of your story content, the story holds a secret wherein the protagonist girl is actually having illusions in her sleep. Was that how it was suppose to be? I'm actually kinda curious of what's going to happen next in her life. Tho, I was also conflicted in my mind. Was dreaming an illusion, or is it better to call it having strange dreams? I'm just a little confused, because when you say illusion, it would most likely say that you can have it, even if your awake. You'll see something there, which is actually not there. (That's my definition of Illusion)  Tho, I think it still depends on you, how the story will progress. You really don't have to change anything. I just wanted to point out some of the things I actually noticed in your story. Keep it up! :)

Judge: arlised52

Judge: Huntrezz54
       You attempted to write a good plot, but the grammar and punctuation dragged it down. First, let's look at punctuation. Have a look at this:
" 'No... Silly lily ' I reply teasing her . She hates when I make fun of her name ." There were some unnecessary spaces and some missing punctuation.
       First, in every dialogue, remember that there must be a punctuation at the end of every dialogue. If it was fixed, the dialogue would look something like this:
"No...Silly Lily," I replied...
Did you see the comma behind 'Lily'? For every dialogue, you should correct it to that. Remember to add a suitable punctuation behind every dialogue, be it an exclamation mark, question mark, a dash or a comma, but there should not be any full stops/periods if your dialogue hasn't finished.
       Second, there shouldn't be a space before full stops/periods. Instead, the space should be behind the comma, before the start of the next sentence. So, it would be like this:
"No...Silly Lily," I replied, teasing her. She hates...
       Thirdly, there are some words that should be one word instead of two words. For example, the word "awestruck" should be one word instead of splitting them up into two. Throughout the story, there are some words
       Secondly, let's look at capitalisation. Names that should be capitalised, like Lily, Atiya etc. This popped up throughout the story multiple times, so be careful!
       Thirdly, your tenses. You often switch your tenses between past and present quite often. Be sure to make up your mind before you write. Tenses switching is quite common among all writers, but it is not a small thing to be overlooked!
       Your grammar and spelling base is there, but it definitely needs some strengthening over there. Good luck!

       Character Building: Okay, so I'm a bit confused with so many characters along the way. So Atiya is Cora, Ansh is Riyanish and there's this other guy called Rick? I think that the character relationship is quite complicated. I suggest clearing it up bit by bit, slipping little hints in between who is who.
       Second, I think that the characters are, frankly, quite 2D. Cora doesn't stand out to me, and I don't seem to find her character or personality except that she used to be a prankster and she is a bit sassy. She also has a habit of keeping a diary, but that's that. The rest of her personality and style remains unknown, and I strongly suggest that you make some changes to emphasise that she's the protagonist of the story. Secondly, I think that Ansh (and later, Atiya) is too much of a Gary-Sue to me. If you don't know what that means, Gary-Sue means an original character that is too over-powered. He is rich, he is strong, he is caring...everything points that he's too overpowered and he has nearly no flaws. Every character must have some sort of flaws, to make the character more 3D. Without the flaws, the characters could've done everything in a single snap, making the story pointless. Try adding in some flaws to Ansh, or else he might seem too surreal to the readers and they can't relate.
       Thirdly, I find that your characterization sounds a bit jumpy. At one moment, you were talking about Cora, but then you suddenly jump to Atiya/Athiya and then you jump to Riyanish and Ansh. I'm a bit confused and I lost track. I suggest that each character should have more diverse personalities so that readers can easily identify who is who.
       Just a tip: try not to make so many characters. Even you, the author, might lose track of who you are writing and this leads to a major personality change in all characters. You might need to develop a bit more on these points!

       Writing Style: The flow at the start was nice, but then it escalates downwards. As the story goes, it becomes jumpier and things happen so fast. I couldn't keep track of what happened. Suddenly, Atiya gained superpowers and she is the Mary-Sue (female version of Gary-Sue) of this illusion world, and she has the power to defeat King Zed? When I was reading it, I thought, "What on earth is happening right now? I'm so confused."
       You tend to rush over important parts, like the second last chapter that you've updated (aka Last Kiss). If I were you, I would slow down the entire pace of the story to let readers have a break. If you rush over things like that, readers won't get a clear scene of what's happening, only a blur of colours whizzing around them. Sometimes, slow and steady wins the race.

       Plot Uniqueness: I'm sorry to give you such a low mark, but the story was missing out too many details for me to understand what the story is actually about. Adding on to the incoherence of the flow, the story was too choppy and it moved too quickly.
       In the story, you often skip out some important parts, like the chapter Last Kiss. In the chapter, you only mentioned how they got into the palace briefly. I would like to see some more actual action there so that the scene of breaking into the palace would be more vivid and the characters would be more 3D, referring back to the point that there wasn't enough character development. Onto the freeing scene of Rick. The scene wasn't even clearly conveyed! Why is Zed suddenly here? Why was there suddenly a dagger in Rick's heart? You left out so many details and it made me wonder what exactly was happening there.
       To help with that, I suggest adding in some filler chapters to help with the explanation of the plot. Although they sound useless, they are actually pretty useful. These filler chapters give readers a break from the hectic and intensity of the plot (but it must be relevant to the story) and also explain to the readers what is happening.
       Second, I think that you should clarify what's going on in the story, not just skimming over the plot lines and let readers think the entire process. This is not a way to gain readers, and it surely wouldn't give you as many votes. The illusion definitely needs some more explanation as everything happened so quickly.
Remember, before publishing a chapter, try proofreading it as a reader who is reading your book for the first time. What would they see from their perspectives? Do they understand what is the meaning of it? Proofreading is important as writing a story, as this gives you a final check of the story. I can tell that you didn't proofread before publishing it, so you need to get rid of that bad habit ASAP.

       Overall Enjoyment: I'm sorry, but I really didn't enjoy reading the book as much as I thought I would. I appreciate the effort in trying, but you need some serious editing with the story. I wouldn't have read the book if it wasn't for judging.

       Other Comments: The plot is good from what I see, but it's too messy that it took me a couple days to figure out what was actually happening. You need to remember that the readers are not you. They don't understand or know what's going on in your brain, so you'll have to rephrase your thoughts in a way that readers understand what is going on. Also, the story needs major editing and proofreading, so better start working!
       First things first, the grammar and spelling need editing ASAP. Readers don't like a grammatically incorrect book no matter where they are or which platform they're using to access books. You can find an editor friend (both IRL and on Wattpad) or use some proofreading tool combos. Personally, I use Microsoft Word and Grammarly together, to double ensure that the story is grammatically incorrect.
       Second, once the grammar and spelling are all correct (or mostly, since most of us ignore some tiny mistakes), you need to work on the clarification of the story. Think in the POV of a reader, instead of the author. The author, of course, knows what he/she is doing, but the readers don't. They only know some information depending on how much the author gives them. When you're thinking in that mode, you can easily get rid of missing information and messy plot lines.
       This will take some major time to work on, but don't rush it! Take your time to make it into your own style, and readers will eventually love it! I wish you luck on that. If you have any more questions or anything you would like to explain to me, please do private message me on Wattpad or email me via my Gmail address linked in my bio. Please do not give up, because underneath all that, I can see a beautiful paranormal love story waiting to be revealed!

Immortal Beings - nicole_grey_25

Judge: --hacked
Short but clean way writing a story. I felt like I was actuslly reading a real novel because of the minor errors in your story and neatness. The way you describe and the way the character feels are overflowing, and it was great. Keep it up! :)

Judge: arlised52

Judge: Huntrezz54
       Grammar: There are nearly no grammatical mistakes throughout the story regarding tenses. There were probably some tiny ones that I overlooked, but they didn't affect the flow of the story.
       The only two things that I was nitpicking were your sentences and punctuation. First, I find that throughout your chapters, you often used run-on sentences. Run-ons, for short, are sentences that are very long and connected by too many commas and conjunctions.
       For example, "The front was secured by a well-rusted iron gate, made of gothic style, it had been there since the gravestones in it, maybe even longer."
       Here, instead of a comma, there should be a full stop/period in between 'style' and 'it'. This is an example of run-on sentences, and this problem pops up in your story multiple times. If you have too many commas, the readers get a bit tired with all that. By adding in suitable punctuation pauses, you're giving the readers a small break to let out a breath. Wattpaders tend to dislike sentences that are too long, so beware of that!
       You've got a strong grammar base, but there are some minor places to tweak back. It won't be a hard problem; just some minor editing would be fine.

       Character Building: Since there aren't enough chapters for me to judge, the character development isn't as obvious.
       For starters, I know that Hazel lost her father and her mother. She lived with her stepmother and her stepbrother and is currently living an okay life. This seems a bit cliché, losing at least one parent when she was young. Avoid making characters too cliché, since they won't stand out from other stories.
       Also, you seem to convey your characters in a straightforward way, leaning onto the telling, not showing side. Remember that everything you do, try to show them, not plainly telling them.
       More character development is waiting to be uncovered, but I think you're going to have a set of nice and diverse 3D characters! I'm looking forward to that!

       Writing Style: I have to give you a near full mark for this. Your writing style is amazing, but not extraordinarily amazing. It looks a bit plain, but it's probably my own view. The flow is nice and smooth, and it was paced in a suitable way. Well done!

       Plot Uniqueness: The story is definitely engaging, with some surprising elements and suspense at the end of most chapters. The scene is beautifully described and very scenic. I can foretell that this will be a plot that hooks lots of readers in to vote and comment.
       However, I think that the plot is a bit cliché, which is how the marks are dragged down. Some part of the story is quite predictable like the part where she's going be kidnapped, the kidnapper has a cold master etc. These scenes often pop up in cliché stories, and I do not like that. I prefer something with more originality and plot twists. Do keep that in mind when you're writing future chapters.
       Bear in mind that in a story, clichés are what attract readers at first, but originality is what keeps your readers coming back!

       Overall Enjoyment: Your story is well-written and well-planned, and I appreciate that! The flow is nice, the grammar is near perfection and the plot is engaging! What dragged it down is the character development and the originality, but well done nonetheless!

       Other Comments: I think that the story itself is not bad, with some exciting suspense and sadness mixed together. The flow and grammar are great, so keep it up!
       I know I said that I hated cliché, but you manage to wrap it up in a way that no one suspects it, and I admire you for that. The only thing that made it imperfect was the originality. Try noticing what people are writing now, and go exactly opposite to that! Ask yourself: What would the readers like to read? How can I make my story MY OWN story? This way, you can guarantee that your story is original and fresh enough for readers to like it.
       Your story is just beginning, but I think that it's going to bloom into an amazing story that everyone will love! If you have any more questions or anything you would like to explain to me, please do private message me on Wattpad or email me via my Gmail address linked in my bio. Good luck with that and keep up the great work, hun!

My Girlfriend Is A Serial Killer - DarkTeal21

Judge: --hacked
        First of all, I got confused at the beginning of the story. So Triss and Ilya were both girls in a relationship. I doubted my feelings in the first place but couldn't help reading it, all the way. What I just noticed was that, sometimes I find it hard to read because of the sudden changes in the writing style. You sometimes switch from bold/italics into italics. I was slightly confused in the usage of it, but let's get back to the main topic. The content of your stories.
        I love how you're productive in the story. You describe the scenery good. You can imagine the possibilities, greatly and the twists in your story are also great. Keep it up! :)

Judge: arlised52

Judge: Huntrezz54
       Grammar: I'm sorry to say this, but this story has way too many typos and missing punctuation that it makes the story too cringy. These things are the basic things in writing a flawless chapter, let alone a book. If you don't improve on these parts, this book isn't going to get really far. For example, the word 'didn't' is not spelt as 'diddnt' (Title of Chapter 6).
       This is a huge mistake, to even get wrong the simplest words. If you can't get the spelling small words correct, then how can you get the spelling of your vocabulary straight (no pun intended)? You will need to change this ASAP.
Second, your lack of using commas and conjunctions is, frankly, quite disturbing. Throughout your story, I've noticed multiple times that your sentences tend to be run-ons, meaning a sentence stringed with too many words. 
       For example, in the chappie "Surprise!", there's this sentence: "When I finally reached the room Illya was staying in I couldn't help but chuckle as I looked at her relaxed sleeping face while I took the syringe before sinking it deep into her neck that seemed to have a bite mark making me send a harsh glare at it before pulling out the syringe
       When I read this, I thought, "Woah. That's one long-*** sentence." There are simply too many points in one huge sentence that it's really hard to understand what's going on. Feel free to correct me, but my guess is this:
       "When I finally reached the room where Illya was staying in, I couldn't help but chuckle at the relaxed appearance in her sweet dreams. I carefully took out a syringe and filled with (insert what you'd like Triss to have as a chemical weapon). As I poured it in, I glared at the bite mark on her neck harshly, secretly swearing revenge on that wretched slut who marked my possession. I plunged the syringe in with as little sound as possible. The needle of the syringe sank into the porcelain flesh deeply, hitting its mark and the liquid inside the syringe flowed into her body. As the liquid drained out, I continued my merciless stare at the purple bite mark. I pulled out the syringe as soon as there was no liquid left in the syringe and cleaned the wound. Illya is MINE, and no one steals her away from me."
       This would sound better if you rephrased it in a clearer way. Wattpaders tend to like shorter sentences, shorter paragraphs but longer chapters, so maybe split up your sentences into smaller ones, but extend the length of your chapters to at least 2k words? Just my suggestion :p
      Thirdly, there are zero quotation marks and nearly no apostrophes, only different font styles. This is very confusing to me as a reader who read this book for the first time. I know you try to distinguish between different characters and their thoughts by using different font styles, like italics for Illya, italics plus bold for Triss etc, but this just doesn't work, especially when side characters appear in your story. With at most four types of font styles, you won't be able to fit all characters into four main categories.
       Worse, there are absolutely NO quotation marks. I can't distinguish which are actual dialogues and which are the character's thoughts. This cause lots of confusion and mess for the readers when they are reading. Instead of using different font styles and secretively indicating that this is an actual dialogue happening in the story, I advise you to use quotation marks.
       Instead of saying "Hello Illya" in italics and bold, change it to this would be more appropriate:
"Why hello there, Illya," the student council president flirted with a small but sly grin.
       There are so many more that require editing (as I mentioned in my intro in the Judges' Profile chapter, I pay lots of attention to small details), like switching between past and present tenses, sentence structure etc, but I don't want to ramble on. Remember, proofreading is very important and it is a habit you must take upon writing, no matter the proofreader is a friend of yours, a grammar editing tool or yourself. Proofreading affects your story greatly, and it is something that mustn't be missed.

       Character Building: The characters aren't that memorable to me, due to a lack in character building. You tend to over exaggerate a character's abilities/powers that it becomes a Mary Sue (a female character who is too overpowered) or ignore them that the readers don't remember anything about them except for their names and what they do in a rough manner.
       For starters, Illya doesn't show much personality except that she's insecure and an introvert. She is one of the protagonists in the story and needs attention from the readers as much as Triss needs. This is the entire trigger of the plot line. Why does Illya deserve to be with Triss? What is she like? When lacking some major development for the trigger point of the plot, the plot collapses and flops. This is not a good sign and I suggest you focus more on Illya in the second book.
       Second, Triss is too much of a Mary Sue to me. She has some sort of powers where she can use literally anything to kill, even if the tool is a wrench or something like that. She's too much of a Mary Sue because she is too much of a villain. All those psychotic killer stereotypes can be found on Triss: kills too much, likes blood, likes to rape, happen to have all those conveniently good weapons on her side even if she's going to a party. This is too stereotyped and I hate it. Not all psychotic killers have to kill their girlfriends/boyfriends. Not all psychotic killers like to rape others. Triss doesn't have any sort of unique part in her character because we see these types of people on mainstream media too often. That guy who shot 52 people in a concert in Las Vegas? Sure, let's throw that in! Jack the Ripper who is mysterious? Into the blender, it goes! This is something that we come into contact too often, and that's why Triss doesn't stand out to me.

       Writing Style: It's mostly okay, but as I mentioned in the Grammar part, it's just confusing, and this affected the flow of the story majorly.
       First, the lack of using quotation marks is a huge part worsening the flow. Without any indication of which parts dialogues are, the conversations baffle me. It's hard to tell the descriptions away from thoughts and dialogues, and that is one giant part which make you marks so low. Instead of using different font styles, like bold, italics or both, try actually using quotation marks for thoughts and characters speech. This would improve your flow hugely and I suggest you quickly fix that.
       Second, the length of sentences are also a key point to lower your marks. There just isn't enough time for me to take a rest before continuing on. The plot is moving too quickly; everything happens in a blur of gruesome killing images. It is very hard for me to grasp what on Earth is going on. I suggest you slow down the pace of your story and give readers some extra information about the protagonists' backstory. This could help your story to convey more and let readers chase up to your fast pace. Although I like fast-paced stories, but this is running too fast for me to catch up.

       Plot Uniqueness: Serial killer is a theme that is often touched in the horror genre, so much that it becomes a cliché. I think that I've seen this plot in a movie/book/TV series, but I can't ring a bell. This killing-everyone-to-protect-your-gf/bf plotline is overused in the horror genre, and I hate it. The only parts that are unique are one, Triss is LGBTQ+; two, Triss kills everyone, even the person she tries to protect.
       I suggest further developing this plot, with more backstory and motif for Triss to kill. I feel like everything is too rushed. The story briefly tells me that Triss kills in spite of anger and over-protectiveness, but that's seems to be it. The backstory is briefly touched through a simple flash of memory, but it never mentions again towards the end of the story. For readers like me, this makes the story even more incomplete, as I don't resonate with the characters.
       A good plot consists of a good motif for the killer to kill, and that the killer firmly believes that it is the only way. Here, you have done the part of believing, but the motive remains unclear. Then, it needs some excitement with the killing motive brings up the intensity of the killing. Here, I don't feel that sort of intensity within the story. You scratch the surface of the killing, describing it plainly, and just says that the person is dead. I would like to see more tension here. At last, the resolution seems a little too rushed. So Illya just dies like that? I'm a bit unimpressed. I feel like you could make her death more important, not just another corpse's life taken by Triss.
       This way, your story can be more interesting and the plot will be more developed. This story has lots of potentials to be good, but you definitely need to get the story back on track.

       Overall Enjoyment: The plot is okay, though I hate the cliché parts inside. However, the writing style is confusing and the grammar makes it cringy, which is why I don't like it at all. I feel like you haven't proofread your work before publishing it, so why enter when everything is too incomplete? I'm sorry for being harsh, but you have too much to correct to win an award.

       Other Comments: The first thing that comes into my mind is why the grammar and spelling are so bad. If you don't have a steady grammar base, the flow of the story will be affected in a bad way. Therefore, in this case, you have to strengthen your grammar skills. I suggest you proofread you work before you publish them. Through this process, most basic grammar and spelling errors can be avoided. Try using a grammar editing tool, like Grammarly with Microsoft Word, or ask a trusted friend/family member as a beta reader. Just don't ask your pet parrot to do that; it will be a disaster.
       Second, your characterisation needs improvement. With little to no character development, the story is quite boring. First, I suggest having your protagonists, Triss and Illya, to be more different. Like short hair vs long hair, short vs tall, kind vs heartless etc. You've done a bit on that, but I feel like you can enhance this a bit more. Also, you need to develop your side characters. They may not be important, but they're crucial to bring out the protagonists and push the plot forward. That student president that raped Illya? I think that you can add in more action and dialogues to show her lust to Illya, like saying how she slurs her words in front of Illya and attempts to seduce her. That will give more reason for Triss to hate her and Illya to be afraid of her. This way, with character development more complete, your plot is vibrant in colours and exciting.
       Thirdly, the plot itself. Serial killers is a topic usually touched by horror writers. You'll need a special plot to stand out from all those stories out there. Your story is a typical blood-and-sex serial killer, so you need to manipulate that in a way to attract more readers and votes. I suggest adding in more plot twists, cliffhangers and building up actions to make the story unpredictable and intense. After all, unpredictability and rising intensity are two important elements in the world of horror. Plus, if you tell the plot right to the readers, leaving no mysterious ness behind, what's good to write about? It doesn't make a good horror story. You'll need more turning points to make your story fresh and make readers crave for more.
       Your story has potential of some sort, but there are too many flaws that cover it up. You'll need to start some major editing in order to uncover that diamond. Don't give up, and keep writing!

My Serial Killer - Zerohands

Judge: embermarina
I enjoyed reading your story and I think there isn't much to improve. I loved your story and thinking was perfect, the only improvement I would suggest is writing the story in the first POV,  but it is my own personal preference, if you disagree then that is completely fine and you do you.
Best wishes,

Judge: --hacked
I felt the emotions of your characters in the story. Wherein, all took place of twisted parts! I also felt character building really good. Great job with the story! I am hooked in reading it! Keep it up :)

Judge: arlised52

Judge: Huntrezz54
       Grammar: The grammar is fairly okay, but I can see some slip-ups along the way, usually with run-ons, punctuation and some simple capitalisation mistakes. However, they mostly appear in the starting chapters of the story, and I can tell that you have proofread your works and have edited them.
       First, let's look at an example of a capitlisation mistake and a punctuation taken from your first chapter:
"Geez, calm down." he had an amused smile playing on his face.
       Here, two mistakes are seen. One, instead of using a full stop, use a comma. This is a general rule used for dialogue punctuation, so beware of that! Second, the first letter after the dialogue ends should be capitalized, despite it's after a comma. Remember this as well!
       Lastly, the run-on sentences often pop up when you're describing a scene or the background. Just in case you don't know (but I'm pretty sure you do), a run-on sentence is a sentence that is too long that it affects the flow of the story. Sometimes, it's good, but otherwise, it would be better to split them up to create more impactful sentences. Also, writing run-on sentences makes the mood a bit boring, as Wattpaders prefer shorter sentences but longer chapters. Maybe shorten the lengths of some sentences to make the flow smoother and a place for readers to take a deep breath to face what's going after?
       In conclusion, you have a good grammar base, and that's very important! With little to no grammar mistakes, it gives a huge advantage to your book! Well done!

       Character Building: Hands down. I really like how the characters are diverse and unique in their own way. Despite their differences, they fit together like puzzle pieces, completing each other in a way and making the plot full.
       Kira is a sweet and kind girl who is popular, unlike all those clichés where the kind-hearted are the unpopular ones. Leo is also kind-hearted but is twisted in some sort of way in his life. This part is a bit cliché, but I'll let that slip. Smith, Kira's father, is a loving family guy and is willing to do anything to save Kira.
       Their personalities are a bit cliché, but you manage to present it in a way that I don't feel that it's cliché. They match each other together so perfectly that I have no words left to say. You've rendered me speechless and that's a hard thing to do! Kudos to you and that!

       Writing Style: Your writing flow is nice and smooth and the descriptions weave in with the flow flawlessly. However, as much as the flow is nice, I don't like one specific part that seems to pop up in most of your works.
       Towards the end (for now), where the battle scene in Utopia commences, you use role-play style writing to describe the battle actions. Eg: *clunk*, *sobs*. You could rephrase it to make it more epic and describe in details to make the story more engaging. Instead of simply saying sobbing, try adding in more actions to make it more dramatic and memorable. Does Nyxx fall onto the ground? Does she unleash her power in sadness and rage? That's something you can consider when writing a battle scene. After all, the intense action is what draws in the readers when they're reading.
       Your writing style is nice, no doubt, but I can see some gaps for improvement. Try thinking it from a readers' POV, instead of from the author's. This way, you can know what your readers are expecting and explain more to them.

       Plot Uniqueness: As I mentioned above, the plot is great! I love how you manage to weave some fantasy elements into the story, which combines both of my favourite elements into the story! I truly appreciate the effort!
       The only part that I am a bit worried about is the relevance to the genre. At first, the story seems like a teen fic story, with Kira slowly falling in love with Leo. Then, it turns into a horror story, with Leo killing everyone harming Kira. At last, it turned into something action-fantasy based, ending the story with a fantasy battle between Utopia and the Devil King, mixed with some human elements. I feel like the story is veering off from its original genre (horror) too much, and lacks the suspense and scariness of the excitement in the horror genre.
       Just a reminder: if you set a story to be a genre, stick to it! If you plan to have the story as multi-genre, I prefer to enter it in General Fiction or the main one. If I were you, I'd pick action/fantasy as your main genre. This acts as heads up to all the readers to expect what is happening.

       Overall enjoyment: I love your flow, your characters and the plot itself. The grammar has some flaws, no doubt, but no one is perfect. I'm hooked with everything in the story, so well done!

       Other Comments: I love how you try to incorporate different ideas into your story, but now it feels like you are trying to add in as many elements into this story as plausible. It gives readers a break from the normal blood-and-gore scenes. All-rounded character development is definitely a huge bonus to your story, but try to focus on a couple of characters only and make the rest as side characters, to make the main point of the story stand out more and make the protagonists more memorable.
       Just remember, stick to one single plot and don't veer off from it! You have a great book going on, so don't give up on this book! I can tell it's going to be great.

Read For Read - BaabaRoyale

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Dear! What a unique story you have there! Very creative and very intriguing! I actually loved how it sent chill down my spine. From just the first chapters I've read on your story. I was already smiling. Creepy yet interesting! Keep it up! :)

Judge: arlised52
Very captivating. The story starts off smoothly, and enhances as each chapter goes by. The characters are very well built, and help carry the plot on scene by scene.

Sea Devil - MichaelHoliday

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Once it starts settling in, the story is a wild ride through and through. Imagination runs wild.  The writing style made it a little complicated to understand at the beginning, but once you get the hang of it, it adds to the setting of the story.

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I'm actually thrilled to read your story. The way you write, the way you describe. It was interesting. It feels like, I was also a crewman in the ship! I could hear the ocean's waves, I could see the torch lit, the will of those who wanted to survive away from the creature! I find it really good. But I'll honestly tell you this, I have read quite a few of this kind of stories and I find it somewhat cliché. I haven't read most part of it, but I hope that it could turn into somethig top notch. A twisted part wherein this story. Keep it up! :)

Secrets of an Assassin: Scorpion - Madam-Blueberry

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Hello! I wanted to say that you've done quite well with your story! It has the characteristics in it, and it was somewhat interesting! But I would like to be more honest with you, hon. I was somewhat displeased because of your usage of punctuations in the story. You use too much exclamaition points and periods, but I hope that you wouldn't be discouraged >__<. I'm only those things, because I wanted to point out, what made me distructed while reading your story. Anyway, somehow I was also curious into how your protagonist ended up becoming an assasin who had been consulted by a lot of people. I was hoping that in some way, it would clear up in the next chapters of what was her past? What schemes is she thinking while doing those requests? Is there a possibility of her getting into risky jobs? I mean like someone after her life for revenge? I am left curious with the story. I felt like the story needs progress and clarifications at the moment. The story progresses fast at the beginning and then suddenly went slow after it. Tho, I would likely want to read your story so please don't be discouraged if I was rude >__< Keep it up! :)

Judge: arlised52
With a little editing, this story could go a long way. Very descriptive; very easy to picture what the author imagines. Overall, a fun read.

Sparks - NomadicNotions

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Catchy and intriguing. There is a sudden capture of a reader's mind at times, but there are times when a scene is not introduced (as in the preface), and that makes the reading a little bumpy. However, it was a nice story to go through.

Judge: Huntrezz54
       Grammar: The only ones that you have to look after are punctuation mistakes. Remember to end a dialogue with a comma instead of a full stop/period! With that solved, you are good to go. Well done!
       Character Building: Character building is all rounded. I'm glad that you starred a girl as one of the heroine of the story and a strong female character. The male protagonist of the story, Gideon, is a bit too OP though, with seemingly no physical and mental flaws except for being inanimate in daylight. I suggest developing more flaws for every gargoyle, as they all are Mary Sues in my opinion. But other than that, a nice job done!
       Writing Style: The writing style is neat and tidy. The flow is amazing. There aren't any cringy parts in the story and the pacing is suitable. Great job!
      Plot Uniqueness: I have a feeling of déjà vu when reading this. I remember reading a similar story somewhere (I forgot), but oh well. However, I think that the male protagonist, Gideon, seems too cliché for me.
       Other than that, it's a creative one! I love the plot, the place where the story is set; just love everything about the general vibe of the story. Kudos to you, my friend!
       Overall Enjoyment: Ten out of ten, hands down. This is a total page flipper, and every single chapter hooks me. I like the plot, the gargoyles, the setting, the characters....just everything! It is perfect! Hats off to you and well done!!
       Other Comments: Try using a grammar editor so that most of the punctuation mistakes can be corrected. But other than that, this is amazing. Please update the second volume ASAP!! I can't wait for it. Well done!

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       I'd like to say that the story was great itself. You can imagine yourself inside the story and that would be amazing. While reading the story as well, you have the feeling that you want to come in her place to replace or something. That's what I felt when I was reading it! Tho, I'd like to be honest with you. At some point, I had to re-read and re-read your story to get the point sometimes. First of, I was slightly confused at the beginning of the story because of the sudden outburst of an accident, it led me to the question: What the hell just happened?
       I was left dumb-founded 'till I read some of the comments and then re-read the following chapter so that I may get the point. It also happened again and again the latter chapters. It might be because of me, lacking english vocabularies in my head, or it might also simply because I find it that you use more unfamiliar words in the story. You don't have to feel discouraged or displeased with my point, I am only saying this because somehow I could feel that I am really reading a real novel. The way the character building was great, to top it all I find it very good! It was because I could feel her, myself and it was good. The same goes with the other characters in the story. Keep it up! :)

Sweet Dreams, Darling - HEttinger

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Your story is one of the most gruesome and imaginable story I've ever read! It was easy to imagine how gore every scene happened! It was great because it really portrayed the genre you've chosen! The story also really cycled around it's title and it was great! Keep it up! :)

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The Precursor - hafsahkhanam

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It looks like you have a really good information around stuffs like this. As a Paranormal/Fantasy Genre, I think that is great. I'm not a fan of this but too keep your story very keen, it was fun reading it. Tho, at first while reading it, I couldn't grasp the dialogue conversation because you used punctuation mark apostrophe (') instead of the normal quotation mark ("). Other than that, I was not much convinced at the character building. You have your story very interesting but I couldn't feel or imagine the emotions wrapped up at the face of the characters. But still, Keep it up! :)

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The Yellow Cookie Jar - MaryEllenCampbell

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Your story was nice. I could feel the emitting love between a Grandfather and a Grandson, it was great. Tho, I was slightly unmoved because of errors I encountered in the story, and was fixitated at the fact that the chapters were too long to read. (I think this is just base on my own, the part that it was too long so don't feel discouraged). Keep it up! :)

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You Made Us - avadel

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What a very unique story, you got there! I really love how creepy it can get! It was short but it sends chill down my spine. How unique and how mind, some parts of it!

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