A Court of Hope and Legacy - Annalisa_Coppolino 

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• Very nice selection of words. Have a few grammar mistakes, but they're hardly noticeable.
• Writing style is amazing, but I get confused sometimes. Some parts are a bit vague.
• Maybe give space in between paragraphs.
• Only thing disturbing is the mature scenes. It's fine putting them in, but they're really long.
• Overall, nice work!

JUDGE: RoxyRoshie
It was a nice story. Although, there are not enough chapters/episodes for me to understand the plot. Plus, the chapters/episodes are short.... :/ Oh and I noticed some... Errors....

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
There are a lot of descriptions. While descriptions are important, sometimes reading them constantly can become tiring. And the pieces of information are a lot to take in too, sometimes. It's better if you could advance through the story and then unfold all these one by one, little by little.

JUDGE: bad-liar-
Absolutely loved your writing style and the choice of your words. This is my first time reading a romeo & juliet fanfiction and I didn't think I would like it as much as I did. Great job.

Aim To Please - xDRAG0N0VAx

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• I'm a bit lost sometimes because I don't know Fallout before, but I can follow the storyline just fine.
• Spotted a small amount of typos, but you wouldn't notice at first glance.
• I really enjoyed reading the book!

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
As I am not familiar with fallout, it was extremely hard for me to understand some parts. Maybe a bit more explanation would have been better?
The writing style is very mature though, still with some typos that need editing.

JUDGE: anonymous
I was a bit confused at first because I don't know anything about Fallout but I was able to follow the storyline and understand the plot. Other than that, I found this work really intriguing. Good work.

Creative Writing - AylaAntoni 

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• A few typos are still present. Please remember to edit the chapters and check for typos.
• I really love these stories. Unique, and made me really intrigued. Love them!

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
I like how you add a lot of descriptions, it makes the image in my head very vivid. The story was rather interesting too.
There are still some typos though, which needs revision.

JUDGE: anonymous
Although this book just contained a series of short stories, I found myself liking them a bit much and wishing I could read a bit more of the stories. Loved the plot twists and cliff-hangers. Good job.

Dear Diary - marialoveswednesdays 

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• It's a bit confusing to read because of the huge paragraphs.
• I spotted typos. Be sure to check on the chapters before publishing them.
• A bit boring and monotone. Try adding some exciting elements into the story, but don't go overboard. :)

JUDGE: RoxyRoshie
So apparently Dear Diary has only a few typos and grammatical mistakes.... But that's not the point.... Anyways, I like how Riley (the main character) expresses her emotions as a normal person would've written in his/her diary. The chapters are short but you can really understand what the author wants to portray Riley as. It also doesn't follow those common clichés but that's what makes the book more unique and interesting to read. Overall, it was a wonderful story. :)

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
The whole thing is very messy. You need to work on the organization and paragraphing a lot more. The plot needs more work too, try writing in a more interesting way. I also found some typos.

JUDGE: anonymous
Ummm, I really confused and I don't think there's actually a solid plot in the story. I get that this is supposed to be diary entries of a girl, but it just feels more of like a rant book. I think you should probably go back and take a look yourself and edit some stuff.

Fang's Angel Girl - Tokyo_Bound_19

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• There was small noticeable mistakes you should check on. Remember to edit the chapters before publishing them.
• This book is cliché. While there's nothing wrong with that, people like new stories. Create a plot that will intrigue readers. Keep this in mind as you further write the book.

Haunted - bluntpencils 

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• A few grammar mistakes here and there. Even if the chapters are all edited, you missed a few spots. Check again!
• Bree's eye color change from honey brown to dull grey. I suggest you check the chapters again.
• Interesting story, I like it!

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
The story is not bad, it seemed to follow the usual teen horror format.
There are some parts which are irrelevant to the plot, it would have been better if you could omit or at least shorten those parts and make it more relevant. (For example, the part where you talked about how the MC thinks Kristin Stewart's acting is horrible) Unless there's a hidden plot line, then that's another case.

JUDGE: anonymous
Grammar's alright. Plot's good too, kept me wanting to read the next chapter and next. Just a mild suggestion, if you could change up your writing style a bit, it'd be nice.

I Dated An Alien: The Inter-Galactic Shipping Reports - CynkNapp

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• These Lan creatures are new to my ears and I'm sort of lost at the beginning, but this book gave enough information as I keep reading.
• The grammar is good, but there was a few typos.
• I really liked the book! Well done!

JUDGE: RoxyRoshie
The writing style is very confusing. However, the grammar is not bad at all. I couldn't understand what I'm supposed to feel in a particular chapter because the writing style is too 'alien' to me. :|

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
The story is a bit vague and confusing, a little more explanation would be better. (Or maybe it's because I don't read this genre often? I am not exactly sure)
The change of perspective was not mentioned clearly, which was very confusing too.
There are a few typos that are hard to ignore.

JUDGE: anonymous
A very interesting concept. I've never read any story like this before and I found it quite enjoyable. However, sometimes it just gets too confusing and I have to read again and again until I can finally get it.

In Between Dreams Book 1: Remnant - Jason_Tenjiro

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• A few typos lying around. Even the title of one of the chapters has a typo.
• Question marks disappeared from question sentences.
• A really intriguing plot you have. Good book!

JUDGE: RoxyRoshie
Actually I like this story. The grammar is not bad. The plot isn't very confusing. AND—I don't know if this correct—I think it's sort of a fan fiction combining two different anime's in one.....

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
I couldn't really see anything that different than other fantasy stories, but note that I didn't read the whole story. I only read the first few chapters, so there might be a twist that I don't know of.
The pacing reminded me of Harry Potter, it went on the same flow. However, Harry Potter has a better way to build the world and the character. (I am not asking you to write like JK Rolling, I'm just pointing out where you could improve)
It's better to add something in the first few chapters that will keep the readers hooked.

Let Me Try - Antiseptictrash 

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• I saw typos as I read. Keep editing your books.
• Your writing style is pretty good, and the story idea is pretty interesting.
• Good book!

JUDGE: RoxyRoshie
The paragraphs are too long. But it's really a nice story. It just doesn't have enough chapters for me to understand the whole plot.

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
Your writing is very descriptive, in a good way. However, some of the paragraphs are pretty long and it sorts of tires me to read it.
I like how you build the story.

JUDGE: anonymous
A nice story but I found it hard to follow as there were bits that were confusing. Other than that, it was nice.

Meridian Lights - MikleoKrein 

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• A few typos. Check your book again!
• The book has so many information about figure skating and it was amazing to read as Elana progressed over the years.
• Also, I love that you inserted Filipino and Japanese words into the book. Made the book better.
• I love this book!

JUDGE: RoxyRoshie
It's an awesome story and isn't hard to follow. It also has nice grammar and a very cool title.

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
I know you said you prefer non-English terms because of your own writing style. I thought I get you at first, however, it was still distracting. I use non-English terms while writing as well but only when it's absolutely necessary. I can't help but feel distracted when you used other languages when it's not necessary. Khaled Hossaini also uses languages other English, but it's not distracting and rather needed.
Other than that, the story is not bad.

JUDGE: anonymous
A really really good book. No other comments, just a really good book.

Nothing To Fear - Starelf555 

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• No grammar mistakes that I spotted, and your writing style is really good!
• All of the suspense made me so intrigued and I couldn't stop reading the book! This is really good for a fanfiction! :)

JUDGE: RoxyRoshie
In "Nothing to Fear", the author uses a lot of commas. She/He could've just put a dot or a semi- colon perhaps.
The grammar is not so bad. Although, I have noticed a few errors...
The characters are not perfect but they etched themselves just fine.

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
The unnecessary gaps before punctuations were really distracting, please fix that. I had a hard time reading this fic.
The jumps between the chapters were a bit confusing at first and there were a lot of fillers, which made the story seem dragged.

Queens in Brooklyn - Dreamerwithabook 

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
Queens In Brooklyn:
• Kariia and Peter just met and suddenly they're best friends? Flashbacks just suddenly appeared between POV's. Perhaps take a look again at your story.
• There wasn't enough character building, and Kariia's personality needed to be developed more. So far, she's a Mary Sue to me.
• Develop your story and plot, and this would be a great fanfiction. :)

JUDGE: RoxyRoshie
Personally, I like this book because of the less noticeable errors and "most" of the characters are very good.

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
When using first person POV, there's only supposed to be thoughts of that person, but
there are places where other's thoughts are included as well.
There's rarely any character or even plot building, everything is just thrown randomly without any hint.

Sunborn: Swords and Crowns - abiran1995 

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• Just a few grammar mistakes. If they weren't there, the book is perfect.
• Reading your book was like reading a published book and your writing style is amazing! I love it!
• Great book!

JUDGE: RoxyRoshie
Almost perfect!!! Dude who's the author of this???? I super duper like it!!! It's so awesome!!!

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
Not enough chapters are updated for me actually get what exactly the main plot is. However, the writing style is really good, almost like a published book.

The Kids Aren't Alright - MrBendezedrine

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• Very few grammar mistakes you should check on.
• I like your writing style, and how Patrick's emotions were portrayed. The first chapter really hooked me in.
• Really good for a fanfiction.

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
The title is really good, it grabbed my attention right away.
I like the idea behind the story, but isn't it a bit inappropriate for the teacher to just flirt with a student like that? Maybe it's just me.

The Shadow That Follows (Katana of Spirits Book 1) - shivastrife 

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• Chapters are really long, which made it easy for grammar mistakes to slip in between all of the words. Check your chapters again.
• The story was interesting and your writing style is really good.
• Great story!

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
The description is very long, I would suggest you to shorten it since wattpaders like shorter descriptions.

The Spark Within - mashton_loves_cake 

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• I saw a few grammar mistakes. Your and you're mistakes was one of them. Make sure to edit your chapters.
• Writing style is easy to follow, and the plot is interesting.
• Keep writing, this is a good story.

JUDGE: RoxyRoshie
It was a nice story though there are grammatical errors. I just thought maybe that the mature scenes shouldn't take a chapter long though.... :/

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
I have read a lot of fanfics and the good ones I have read usually don't require you to be in the fandom to understand it. This one, however, was pretty confusing for me. The story is also a bit dragged. There are more questions than answers, it's better if you can balance it out. There are too many speeches that it gets distracting at a point.

JUDGE: anonymous
-Good story, although it is rather confusing at first to read. Since it's a sterek fanfiction, I feel like only people who've watched teen wolf before would be able to fully understand the flow of the story from the start- other readers it would be a tad bit hard (I've watched teen wolf so I could understand the story perfectly).

The Perfect Thought - wi_se_gi_rl 

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• I found many mistakes on grammar and typos. Always remember to edit your chapters.
• I was a bit confused on who was talking sometimes because the paragraphs are big.
• Overall, it's a good-enough book.

JUDGE: RoxyRoshie
I honestly liked the PJO series and when I knew this was a PJO fanfic, I was so excited to read it... but... there are so many grammatical and typographical errors... I hope the author will fix that.
But, even though there are lots of errors, I really liked the plot and concept of the story... And I even made theories about the prophecy in the story... :)
I just hope the author will make another book for the tags and update it sooner....

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
Frequent POV changes is a huge turn off, and honestly I didn't understand anything when you changed it that frequently. If you are writing in third person, it's better if you keep the whole story in third person. Also, please use more paragraphs. There are places where it would have been better if you used more paragraphs.
Other than that, the story seems intriguing at first, but then it becomes a bit cliché, which is not necessarily a bad thing.

JUDGE: anonymous
-Nice story, managed to pique my interest to a certain level to keep me reading. I haven't read or watched Percy Jackson series, but I still managed to understand the flow of the story fine. Good work, keep it up

Under the Sea - rageynerd 

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• I spotted no typos or any grammar mistakes, well done!
• The stories are very unique and beautifully written!
• This book is amazing! Keep writing! :)

JUDGE: RoxyRoshie
This book is such an amazing book. It interprets the myths of under water tails. Although, I've seen a few typos but they're hardly noticeable.
The book have only two chapters though... I hope the author continues writing it because I really liked it... :)

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
(Neptune's mystery)
One thing I noticed while reading your story is, you need to show us what happened instead of telling us what happened. And you need to do it when you first started the story(like you did in the end). You can include the back story in the middle, little by little, or else it the writing becomes dry. The story is actually more interesting towards the end than when you started.
The accents you wrote was also a bit distracting, but maybe it's just me. Other than that, the plot is intriguing.

JUDGE: anonymous
-Love the writing style, although it tends to get a bit confusing at some places. For some reason, the story didn't really manage to capture my attention, but still hats off for the efforts put into the writing

When Shadows Crawl - HEAVYDIRTYSOULED

JUDGE: -flowerfairies
• I didn't see any typos or other flaws, great job!
• Writing style is amazing and very descriptive. The ending was epic too!
• Well done on completing a really good book!

JUDGE: RoxyRoshie
This story has many noticeable mistakes such as typos and grammatical errors. Sentences in this story doesn't start with big letters when it should've. Names of an individual - e.g. Andy - must also start with big letter initials but that didn't apply to this story. The author needs to fix the grammatical problem. Other than that, most other parts only need a bit of revising and editing. The story isn't unreadable and confusing, it just has many typos and grammatical errors that reading could discourage the reader at first glance.

JUDGE: Hakuna_Andy
Use capital letters when you start a new sentence, there are a noticeable amount of grammatical mistakes which need serious editing. While the writing style is not bad, it is a bit dragged.

JUDGE: bad-liar-
-too good. Deserves much more recognition. It starts off quite normal but by the end of the first chapter itself my interest in reading this work just surged. Kudos to this work, man.