WAVE 2 - FILIPINO BOOKS (TOP 13)
TOP 13
(In alphabetical order only)
Anak ng Bakla - AteNicca
Crown of Astria - Aria_Aeldra
Dear Crush - KyennSiAko
Decode - AlRashedyLipa
Fire Through The Rain - cnsnnts
He's A She - brighteststarever
Naked Scar - dcmuch
Natalie ( Book 1 ) - cUaroundDcorner
When Love and Hate Collide - goneduhh
The Best Of You And Me - YsadoraPHR
The Bitter Students (Series 1) - hanuelkim
The Outcast - IreneOnabia
The Heaven That We Can't Reach - LostAndAfraid_
* Some reviews are missing that's why we posted this late. We'll update this again as soon as we find em
* EurusAthena 's reviews are a bit longer. We had to compress it via screen shot photos.
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FILIPINO CATEGORY
TOP 13
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♥️ Anak ng Bakla - AteNicca
JUDGE: KylieforniaUSA
Maganda ang story. Nakakasunod ako kahit maraming errors sa capitalizations, symbols and yung paglagay mga punctuation marks. In order for your work to be presentable, you should know the proper usage of capitalizations. Nagandahan ako sa story, may humor siya, nakakaaliw. Pero hindi maganda basahin kung mali mali ang pag construct at hindi sinusunod ang tamang pagsusulat. Isa pa, I prefer to use only few characters. Kapag maraming bida, marami rin syempreng POVs na maguguluhan na rin yung reader kung ano nga ba ulit yung pagkatao ng character na yun. Pero kung sa tingin mo eh yun ang ikagaganda ng akda mo, then continue.
JUDGE: bby_winter09
Feedback: Ngayon lang ako nakabasa ng ganitong story at masasabi kong maganda at nakakatawa ang story lalo na iyong tatay nila:)
JUDGE: EurusAthena
♥️ Crown of Astria - Aria_Aeldra
JUDGE: bby_winter09
Feedback: Super ganda ng story. Feeling ko ako iyong bida. Habang nagbabasa ako ay napapaimagine tuloy ako na ako iyong bida na may ice ability kasi nakakadala talaga iyong story. Idol!!
JUDGE: anonymous
Comments: Kudos to the writer of this story. I'm not into this kind of genre but your story captured my attention. The sensory details are good and the plot is easy to follow. Just becareful lang sa paggamit ng action and dialogue tag. Kampai!
JUDGE: EurusAthena
Grammar
- Wrong use of raw/riyan/rito/rin and daw/diyan/dito/din. Raw/riyan/rito/rin ay ginagamit kung ang huling letra ng sinundang salita ay patinig (vowel). Daw/diyan/dito/din naman ay ginagamit kung ang huling letra ng sinundang salita ay katinig (consonant).
- Kapag gagamit ng dialogue tag (ex: aniya, sabi ko, tanong niya, sigaw ko), laging magsimula sa small letter at kuwit ang gagamitin sa dulo ng dialogue (quoted part).
EX: "Alis na ako," paalam niya.
- Kapag gagamit naman ng action tag (description of action that takes place after the dialogue), gumamit ng tuldok sa dulo ng quoted part at sundan ito ng malaking letra.
EX: "Alis na ako." Tumayo siya at tumungo sa pinto.
- no major errors that would distract readers from reading
Character Building
- A few slip ups on character discovery
Writing Style
- English parts weren't so bad but it could have been better if it was written in pure Tagalog Or maybe not? Anyways, the way it is written now is just good enough!
- I like how you narrated as formal as possible. No exclamations and emojis to distract me from reading! I just read an entry with lots of those before this and it's pretty traumatic.
Uniqueness of the Plot
- Plot is a tad bit cliche. Different factions, then the main character came from the weakest faction, then at the end the main character will be the strongest? Good thing the author added some twists that would make you enjoy the ride to the end.
Overall Enjoyment
- As a judge, I have to check the grammar as serious as I can. Even though I read your disclaimer on the first part that readers shouldn't take it seriously lol.
♥️ Dear Crush - KyennSiAko
JUDGE: bby_winter09
Maganda iyong pagkakanarrate. I find it unique and cliche pero bumagay naman sa story.
JUDGE: Kari_Bautista
Comments: I love it! It reminds me of my teenage years. When writing a diary is still as important as talking to a close friend. It doesn't amaze me when it comes to technical aspect. Honestly, you need to learn a lot of things about technicalities but what i really like is that you just give your heart out. A story with a heart is more beautiful than a story full of formalities. Your plot is cliché but at the same time it is so real. Reality is a life full of cliché stories. Keep on writing! Kampai!
JUDGE: EurusAthena
GRAMMAR
- I'm not really sure how to grade the punctuations. The book is written in diary format and in a diary, you can basically write however and whatever you want. But just to be fair with other contestants, I still deducted some points for emojis and unnecessary interjections. There are other ways to express the main character's expressions without using emojis and stuff.
- Mind the difference between "your" and "you're". May dalawa or tatlo akong nakita na maling paggamit.
- There are some noticeable typo errors.
CHARACTER BUILDING
- Good enough, medyo nairita lang ako sa mga emoji lol.
WRITING STYLE
- The writing style is good even though there are noticeable punctuation errors. I was at chapter "March 29, 2018", I didn't notice that I was trying to predict what was gonna happen next. Apparently that's one of the indications that I'm enjoying the story!
UNIQUENESS
- Only a few similarities to the typical story of the genre
OVERALL ENJOYMENT
- Sabi na nga ba magsusuicide yung bida eh! I enjoyed reading it even though the ending was sooooo sad 😢
♥️Decode - AlRashedyLipa
JUDGE: bby_winter09
Feedback: Habang binabasa ko ito ay naaalala ko ang Project Loki, may kaunti kasi silang pagkakapareho. I am a fan ng ganitong story at masasabi kong may magandang kinabukasan ang inyong story. Keep it up!
JUDGE: Kari_Bautista
Your grammar is commendable. The flow of the story is very easy to follow and the way you build up each character is entertaining. I can see their differences which is a good thing. I think you just need to be more careful in using dialogue and action tags; active and passive voice. It was indeed a great story, no doubt about that but as i keep on reading, ibang author ang naaalala ko sa buong kwento. I'm fully aware na you're inspired ng author na 'yon but it doesn't mean that you can just get most of his ideas to make your own story. Sorry for saying this, and i want you to take heed of this one: 'Yong way of writing, pareho; most of the characters, pareho. The male protagonist, his heroine, the situation of their club, 'yong position ng taong kinaiinisan ng bida, pareho although ginawa mong pinsan siya ng protagonist instead na magkapatid sila. 'Yong inspector, at ibang mahahalagang scenes. You gave a little twist in your story but the whole concept was still the same... Although hindi pa tapos ang buong kuwento, nakikinita ko na ang magiging ending nito. I'm not putting you down, i want you to just see your own story as far as possible— its potential. You as a writer who can do more. Being inspired by a specific author or book, doesn't mean you need to follow their every steps... their own plot.
You can still change your whole plot. Lagyan mo ng isang malaking pasabog na hindi maiisip ng kung sino. As a stand alone entry in this competition, hindi naman nakaapekto 'yong lahat ng sinabi kong negative na bagay (except sa plot) pero mas concern ako sa magiging future writing career mo. You can be motivated to create your own world because of those inspirations. You have what it takes to be a writer, you just need to have the guts to be the
♥️Fire Through The Rain - cnsnnts
JUDGE: bby_winter09
Feedback: Ang ganda nung story. Feel mo iyong emotion nung bida. Ramdam mo talaga iyong feelings nya. Habang nagbabasa nga ako ay nabibilib ako sa nagsulat.
JUDGE: Kari_Bautista
Comments: I enjoyed reading this one. It's very light yet entertaining. I can say that the author really knows how to use the show and tell effect. But i think mas strong ang impact nito kung 3rd POV ang ginamit pero napanindigan naman 'yong POV na ginamit. Basa lang nang basa at sulat lang nang sulat! There's always a room for improvement!
JUDGE: CrazzzyLEE
Mgandang pagbati.
Four words "I like this story" i really do. Maganda ang flow, Plot, Character building, tingin ko ang kailangan lang i-inprove sa storyang ito ay ang emotions. At ibang namali ng Grammar pero overall. Maganda. ^__^
♥️He's A She - brighteststarever
JUDGE: anonymous
Comments: I like the way the author narrates the whole story. It was very light at first na halatang struggling ang writer sa kung paano isulat ang POV ng main character na tugma sa edad at personality nito. Pero as the story progress, unti-unting nagbabago yung character voice which is a good sign dahil it indicates na nagma-mature ang character. Maybe next time, just be aware sa way of building up each scene lalo na kung kailangan ng intensity sa mood or emotion especially kapag malapit na sa climax. Oh well, good job for this one. Keep on learning! Write your heart out!
JUDGE: AL
"Magandang pagbati"
I liked this story i found it something different from a normal plot. At pag dating naman sa Technical error ay wala ako masyadong napansin na mali. Just add a little spice on every chapter ^_^ para mas kaagaw agaw atensyon ito.
JUDGE: EurusAthena
Chapters Completed: 10
Grammar: Found one sentence with incorrect use of rito/dito and that was the only grammar mistake that I've encountered for the whole 10 chapters. Kudos to the author for using (') and other stuffs that most (Filipino) wattpad writers tend to ignore.
Uniqueness: Crosses over the line of both originality and similarities. Plot is not so unique but the writer still owned it!
Character Building: Character built all the way through. Leaves a strong impression to the readers
Writing Style: I really like the author's writing style! One of the reasons why I wanna keep reading even though the plot is a little bit predictable.
Overall Enjoyment: I liked it! I'm so sorry I can't point out anything negative or something that needs changing/editing.
♥️Naked Scar - dcmuch
JUDGE: anonymous
Comments: The plot was already there. The story line was good. The only problem is, there are some scenes na parang dull ang emosyon na dahilan upang maging dragging ang flow kahit na intense na ang current scene. I think you just need to figure out how to control the flow of your story. Kampai!
JUDGE: AL
"Magandang pagbati"
this story is Good enough. may mga pag kakataon lang na mali ang pag gamit sa punctuation at sa capitalization.
JUDGE: EurusAthena
GRAMMAR
- Your story got me hooked that I almost wanted to read this without analyzing the grammar
- You should watch out on some tense swift. Pero bilang lang naman ang nakita kong ganito at 'di rin nakakadistract sa readers.
- Found 1 incorrect use of rito on the second chapter and some incorrect use of ng/nang of the 1st chapter. Also found 1 incorrect use of they're/their on the fifth chapter.
UNIQUENESS OF THE PLOT
- Plot was a little bit cliche but the author added a lot of twists which made the book more interesting.
CHARACTER BUILDING
- Character built all the way through. Leaves a strong impression to the readers as I find myself rooting for the characters.
WRITING STYLE
- You flawlessly added first person POV (mc's thoughts) on a third person narration!
- Overall narration is easy to follow as well.
OVERALL ENJOYMENT
- I can say that this book is a page turner! I had to stop reading as I still need to judge other entries lol. I will definitely continue reading this after the competition!
♥️Natalie ( Book 1 ) - cUaroundDcorner
JUDGE: Kari_Bautista
Comments: It was one of the story that got my attention. It was far diferrent from what i'm expecting while reading the first chapter. What can i say more? This is awesome. Kudos to the author!
JUDGE: AL
"Magandang pagbati"
Technical errors; Typo's. paki check nalang po ang ibang words dahil minsan may nawawalang letter at siguro dala lang ito ng pag ta-type. Your story Ms. is good enough, Keep it up. ^_^
♥️The Best Of You And Me - YsadoraPHR
JUDGE: AL
The Best Of you and me "ysadoraPHR"
"Magandang pagbati"
I can't say anything honestly, your story is good enough Ms. "Thumbs Up" keep it up ^_^
JUDGE: EurusAthena
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♥️The Bitter Students (Series 1) - hanuelkim
JUDGE: EurusAthena
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JUDGE: AL
Total of 18 pts.
"Magandang pagbati"
Pag dating sa tinatawag na "Technical errors" ay wala masyadong problema. Ngunit hindi ko maiwasan na laktawan ang i-ilang pangungusap dahil sa haba ng isang paragraph, na minsan ay umuulit-ulit na lamang. Sana'y maka tulong ang pag sasabi ko ng totoo sa iyong pag improve ^_^ keep it up...
♥️The Outcast - IreneOnabia
JUDGE: AL
"Magandang pagbati"
I can't say anything about the story plot. *Thumbs up*. Ngunit meroong mga parte na akin nang nilalaktawan dahil sa mahaba nitong paragraph. Kung maaring bawasan ito, ay mabuti para sa mas ikaga-ganda ng Storya.
JUDGE: EurusAthena
♥️The Heaven That We Can't Reach - LostAndAfraid_
JUDGE: anonymous
Comments: I had no problem with plot. It was good enough for me to keep on thinking what will gonna happen next? Yeah, it's not a typical teen fiction story as the author says, and i agree with that. In technicalities, the author needs to learn na basic way of writing like how to use nang and ng; mga simple words like nung-noong, onti-konti, etc. Hula ko, it was the first draft ng author at nilagay agad sa wattpad. Halata kasi na hindi consistent ang flow ng scenes, may mga scenes na contradict sa nauna at jumpy. The first draft of writing a story will never be perfect. It's okay kung masyadong malabo ang eksena. I believe, dala yun ng mabilisang pagproseso ng utak ng isang manunulat. My advice is proofread your drafts; bawat chapter dapat mabasa mo bago ilagay sa wattpad o sa kahit saan. That's all. Enjoy writing! Kampai!
JUDGE: EurusAthena
♥️When Love and Hate Collide - goneduhh
JUDGE: anonymous
Comments: It was very light to read. I enjoyed this one. Gusto ko yung gradual progress ng buong kwento. Hindi minadali, tama lang. Na-bother lang ako dahil sobrang daming apostrophe ang ginagamit mo every paragraph na kung minsan ay di na maganda sa mata. Ang siya at s'ya, niya at n'ya ay magkatulad lang ng bigkas kaya kung maaaaring buuin ang baybay, mas mainam. Maliban sa nabanggit ko, wala naman na akong masyadong napuna. Keep on writing!
JUDGE: AL
Magandang pagbati.
This story is good, may mga pag kakataon lang na nasobrahan na sa haba ang paragraph so maybe next time ay maiklian ito, huwag nalang masyado idetalye ang bagay bagay. Sa Grammar and technical errors, yes may napapansin ako pero alam kong madali lang ito para sa iyo na ayusin ^__^
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