3 AM - CerealForTheSoul
Breathing Love  -  DreamingEnchantress
Famous In Love  -  -thomasdohertyy
From Tracktown, With Love  -  squishieshnoofus
Goodbye  -  fuzzek
If Tomorrow Never Comes - starlightgalaxies_
LOGOLEPSY  -  MagicAnimals
The Chances I Didn't Take - countingpetals
The Cloud & Her Tears  -  Samtherealist
The World Blues - underatedpessimism
To Catch A Fluttering Dream - garzala
Upside Down  -  Jelmo03

3 AM - CerealForTheSoul

JUDGE: Askaninn
Whoa. Reading this work was such an amazing experience. It's even hard to describe how much I loved this book. From the casual and intense writing style (where you can see the small details as using the words of title in bold in the body of the poem) to the message that hits deep and precise, this work made a good impression on me. It's painful, raw and totally inspiring.

Breathing Love  -  DreamingEnchantress

JUDGE: ANParker4123
I think the concept is pretty old but I must mention that the way it is written is really good. 

JUDGE: Askaninn
Well, "Breathing Love" seems to be a good story, but I could see some problems when I was reading it. There were good points in the story: I like the characters and the plot. "Chick novels" are very tricky, because you need to use all the "cliches" to make the formula works, but you need to be careful to use them wisely - for your story don't get too boring - and to put something different on it, so people can see how singular is your story. The characters need more development and I'd suggest to the author think in her special element (that something unique that will make her story remarkable). There were also some grammar mistakes (what would be comprehensible if the author weren't an English native speaker) that need to be corrected.

Famous In Love  -  -thomasdohertyy

JUDGE: ANParker4123
I think the concept is really nice and something unlike the normal books but maybe there could be an improvement in the way of writing.

JUDGE: Askaninn
I think that was the most different book I've got so far in this competition. It's kind light and funny. The character are very likable and they grew on me so fast that when I noticed I was cheering up for them. I believe the informal language used is a positive and negative point at the same time. The excess of slangs (in the phone messages exchange by the couple) sometimes turns the text a little bit difficult for some people to understand the dialogues (especially people who are not English native speakers), but I understand the importance of these slangs to give some "realness" to the talks.

From Tracktown, With Love  -  squishieshnoofus

JUDGE: anonymous
- My best read in this genre so far. The concept is not so unique if you really think about it but the writing style is really good that it makes me wanna keep reading.

JUDGE: Askaninn
Good writing, there are few mistakes along the text, but it may be one of the best written text during this competition. Some (grammar) structures and word choices really impressed me during my reading. About the plot, in general, I liked the plot. It was okay. A little bit confusing in the beginning (where I would suggest some revision), but the characters grow on you during the four pages story.

Goodbye  -  fuzzek

JUDGE: ANParker4123
I think the concept of the book is really unique and creative. There could be a little improvement in the way the poems have been authored.

JUDGE: Askaninn
I liked the plot of this poetry. When I started it I thought it'd be a sad story (as "please don't leave me, I can't live without you"), but I got so surprised when I read all this anger and quiet violence inside of the lines. This was one of the highest points of Fuzzek's work. Being written as rap was another interesting feature for me too. I don't read/listen rap very often and this may turn my reading a little bit harder, but I really liked the experience. Using my (little) knowledge on rapping, I think there were some "bland" parts (as the author him/herself pointed in the first page of the book).  There was no problem with the grammar, besides a few mistakes. My suggestion would be about the introduction. As a writer myself, I write for me and I hope other people like my works too. And there are good criticism (the ones made to help you) and the bad ones (those made only to put you down). I think it's wise to be opened to them, receiving the first ones and ignoring the last ones. I don't think it's wise writing things as "don't bother to tell me if you think my rapping is bland", because if you really want to become a better writer and you have these flaws, you need to hear it from your audience so you can improve.

If Tomorrow Never Comes - starlightgalaxies_

JUDGE: Askaninn
I'd like to start this review pointing the positive characteristics of this work. I think the highest point for me was the way the author structured his text. It's something between a short tale and a poem, I don't know if that was the original idea, but I really loved it. It was something different from the other works I've read so far. The problem was that the chapters were so small, small enough so they could become a single poem. I believe this idea could work better if the writer produced longer chapters, so maybe (s)he could try to use different kinds of arrangements in the work instead of the usual four lines rhyming (A, A, B, B). The plot is nice. It starts interesting but it kind of fades off when it approaches the last chapter, when it should escalate and hit me (and consequently bring me to tears). I couldn't connect to the character either. It wasn't bad, but it wasn't good. Stories like these (about cancer) depend a lot on their main character to bring the reader to his/her shoes. I believe with some revisions this work can become an unforgettable short story.

LOGOLEPSY  -  MagicAnimals

JUDGE: anonymous
- The thoughts are pretty much simple. Not much imagery but I can still feel you. I like the last part of your book, which was deep enough to make up for the points that was lost on the first few parts.

JUDGE: Askaninn
The work has a good grammar structure, but it lacks a little bit of style. I think even when we are just writing some random ideas we need to organize them in a specific way to point where we want to go otherwise the reader may be get lost and wonder why he's reading your book.

The Chances I Didn't Take - countingpetals

JUDGE: anonymous
- The emotion is overflowing. It got most of its points to originality and creativity. I enjoyed the short poems overall

JUDGE: Askaninn
Good verses. I really appreciate the poetry but I think the author is still a little bit raw. Small poems are very trick because you need to be very skillful to use the right words to sum up your idea and your feelings. Numbers 4 and 6 were my favorites.

The Cloud & Her Tears  -  Samtherealist

JUDGE: anonymous
- I can feel your emotions while reading your short poems. It's just that some of them are awkwardly phrased. Or maybe it's just me. Try rephrasing them or something? My favorite is the "Cactus" chapter. I get what you wanted to say but again, awkwardly phrased.

JUDGE: Askaninn
That was an awesome work. It was pretty difficult for me to evaluate it because there are so many strong points here existing with some flaws too. I think this book lacks some structure. It's really difficult to see it as poetry or a short story, but I understand that this is the category that suits this work the best. While I was reading this work, it seemed to me that I was reading random thoughts, beautifully written, but random thoughts. What it isn't a bad thing at all. If it lacks in structure to this piece, there are a lot of originality and passion. Some pages are so small that they look like definitions in a dictionary, and when I say this, I mean in a very positive way. The author brilliantly summed up her ideas and feeling in few words and made it very clear for me what words as "friend", "alone" or "home" meant to her. It was just impossible not falling for some pieces...

The World Blues - underatedpessimism

JUDGE: Askaninn
After finishing "The Worlds Blues", I spent a few hours still thinking about some of the words written in those verses. The author was very sensitive in his/her choices of words, turning some chapters like "Empty", "Cry" and "I Love. I Hate. I know" into real jewels. Another very high point of this work it's the flow of the story. Feelings that start to build up until they become a void that sucks everything into it. Feelings that become so powerful that get out control. Even it's passed one day after I read the book, it seems that it's message is echoing inside of me and that's an evidence of a true masterpiece.

To Catch A Fluttering Dream - garzala

JUDGE: ANParker4123
I think the poems written by the author are really heartfelt. There could be an improvement in the creatively because it is pretty similar to other poems but overall it is a pretty nice collection of poems.

JUDGE: Askaninn
I have to confess that the first piece of the book didn't get me. It wasn't bad, but I didn't get too excited after reading, but piece by piece I was getting more involved to the author's works. "Empty" was one of my favorite poetries. Something that really got my attention was the structure of the poems. I think some revision is required. I know there are some structures that use free rhymes, but I think some parts couldn't be fit in that case.

Upside Down  -  Jelmo03

JUDGE: Askaninn
Well, that's a good story and I really like the idea to bring some light to the "bullying" topic. Thanks to 13 reasons why, a lot of other good works are finally coming out. I found some grammar mistakes that should be revised (and I think it's okay, especially because English isn't the author's native language). The short story has a good plot, but I think it still need some rewriting. I'd suggest some changes in the development of the story and how all the situation got so bad, because when we talking about bullying is usually a long term process. It's like small things that hurt you more and more until you can't handle anymore. Besides that, I saw a great potential in this work.