Book by @roarcus

Chapters read: 8
Category: Fantasy and Adventure/Action
Total points awarded: Undisclosed for judging purposes

SCORES WIPED BECAUSE OF JUDGING

Technical Aspects
Overall, really good SPAG (spelling, punctuation, and grammar), though I do have a few things I want to bring up. One of those things is, after dialogue, usually a dialogue tag is started as a lowercase if describing the dialogue. For example, it would be ""Oh my!" exclaimed Hagrid. "'E's beautiful!"" instead of ""Oh my!" Exclaimed Hagrid. "'E's beautiful!"". It's not a big thing, but it did catch my eye a few times as I read. Don't worry, this is something I had to go in and correct in my writing during editing. Another dialogue related thing, when you end a dialogue then go on to describe it with a dialogue tag, you almost always end with a comma instead of a period unless it just... feels right or looks right I guess. That was something that caught my eye as well, especially around the capitalized dialogue tags (it's actually  probably what caused them, because of autocorrect). I also want to suggest that when you have a hyphen symbolizing the cutoff or sudden stop of dialogue, you put two instead of one. ""Oh no—"" instead of "Oh no-"". This just makes it easier to see and is honestly a matter of preference, so I'm not taking points off, just want to suggest it.

Writing Quality
Ok, I love your writing style. It's very descriptive, and in a story like this with a completely made up world and norms, that fits really well. It enhances the reading experience well, because it makes readers able to imagine this new place and still guides them through the story. The dialogue also helps push the story along, most of it not just for show but to reveal something or other about the plot to further it.

Plot, Pacing, Storytelling
Your storyline is pretty engaging, and it's definitely well-paced. It doesn't go so fast that there's gaps in the storyline, but not so slow that readers get bored with the story. It maintains interest throughout, and I expect it will continue to as the chapters move forward. One thing I would like to touch on, is that sometimes when you're describing things you tend to create big chunks of text. This can be easily fixed however, as most have good points to break it up a bit. Some readers, like myself, do t particularly love large chunks as it creates a big puddle of sorts (I'm not explaining this very well, I apologize). I think your overall structure and techniques are very good with the exception of that though.

Character Development
Over the course of your chapters, I can feel your characters growing into each other and shaping each other, and you do it well. Each character is unique, well-crafted, and thought out, and it shows wonderfully in your writing. It helps provide that engaging and enjoyable read that I love.

Emotional Impact
I feel like, despite your writing being descriptive and unique, it's just not far enough into the story to be able to have an emotional impact. I also feel like there just aren't a whole lot of major emotional scenes, which could change or may not, either is fine. However, this is not to say I didn't enjoy it, I very much did. I just feel it didn't make me feel a specific feeling at specific parts.

Originality & Creativity
In both categories, action/adventure and fantasy, this book sits really well. There are so many unique approaches to the different aspects of the book that I haven't seen before and I love it.

Themes and Messages
Ok, this part will have the most iffy review of all of them, as I have always struggled with identifying themes and messages in stories (because believe it or not, reading and writing are my worst subjects in school). I can definitely sense somewhere in the mush of jello we call a brain that there are underlying messages in the story, I just can't tell what they are. (Again, not your fault, just not my strong suit. At all). I thing you've done an excellent job at it if I can even identify, without help, that there are some distinct themes in the story.

Overview
Honestly, this book is amazing. Well paced, descriptive, and the perfect blend of fantasy and adventure. I loved reading it and will be adding it to my library to receive chapter updates. I highly recommend it to anyone who loves slightly more toned-down fantasy with a bit of action and adventure thrown in.