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Review:

Love At First Touch, a story of how two individuals meet on a rollercoaster ride and from just one encounter are completely smitten with each other.

Everything starts with our hero and heroine being goaded into going to a theme park by their respective siblings, Bulbul, Purvi and Purab. Purab and Bulbul are in love and want to spend time with each other, but according to the rules, Bulbul and Purvi can't go anywhere without Professor Pragya, who doesn't want to go to the theme park because she has a fear of heights and water. On the otherside, Purab lies that he wants to propose to Bulbul and wants his brother at his side when he does it. Just like Pragya, Abhi too has a fear of water. I wonder if it's a natural fear of water they have...or are they just scared of drowning? Forgetting their fears, Abhi and Pragya decide to accompany their siblings anyway.

Once there, Pragya's fear of heights kicks in as she gets into a ride on her sister's insistence. Pragya is left alone by Bulbul, who goes to sit with her beloved Purab, leaving a terrified Pragya to sit next to our hero Abhi. Out of fear she grabs his hand tightly and a love connection is instantly formed between them. Cute scene!

Days pass and yet our lovebirds can't seem to forget that one brief meeting with each other. Pragya explains her feelings to Bulbul, who       in turn tells Purab...and both decide to play matchmaker five months later on Valentines Day.

They all head back to the scene of their first meeting in the exact same situation, only this time Pragya doesn't know Abhi is the one sitting next to her, and even though she's scared, she doesn't want to hold anyone else's hand but his, yet somehow she ends up gripping his hand anyway.  A huge romantic scene follows where our hero and heroine are finally together.

But our story does not end there as Pragya's father gets to know about his daughter's love and doesn't accept it! She tries her best to get her father to believe that Abhi is not a bad person, but he throws Abhi's wedding card at her, leaving her shattered. Even after that she still tries to convince her father that Abhi is good as she believes in him.

Then in comes Fara with Purab on the line. She clears up the misunderstanding and then reveals that lover boy Abhi committed suicide! OMG! Abhi's dead?! I have to say I really didn't see that one coming!

After both Fara and Pragya head to the hospital to see Abhi...

After more of Abhi's truths are revealed to Pragya, the hero and heroine finally unite with the blessings of their parents and a happy ending.

Nice story...Good Job Author!

Judging Points-

-As per the judging rules:

* The Character Options "Lover Boy" and "Papa's Princess" has been mentioned in the story to a vague extent.

*The Author has written herself into the story, although, I am a bit confused as to why the character of Bulbul has been changed to Jeri. Not sure if this supposed to be the author's character or there was a mix-up of some kind with the author's role in the story as usually the author is known as "Fara".

*Title of story is appropriate.

- Grammatical errors aside, the storyline was good, but everything was really rushed and descriptions were seriously lacking in this story.

- Scenes were okay, but some of them did not make any sense. For example if Abhi committed suicide, then how come he married Pragya two years later with two kids? Why was Purab on the line with Fara?

- Rare scenes between Abhi and Pragya were good...story could have used more interaction between them. 

-Descriptive thoughts were average.

-Some dialogues were a bit confusing.

Judge's Grade: 18/30

 Scores

Jury
12.5+9+7+12=40.5
+18=58.5(judges)
+3=61.5(vote)