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Review of judge..

It was a cute story. With a sweet story line. The concept was something new and different. My favourite scene was when Arjun called Rita in the cabin in the name of file and told her to sit and she being innocent said no sir I will go but when order her she sat there quietly. It was such an adorable scene.
I read your story it was cute and sweet. But there are some things on which you have to really work hard. First thing you took the story too fast. I was not able to feel any emotions. I mean one second you are showing that Arjun is mourning because his girlfriend left him on his marriage day and immediately on the preceding day he proposed a girl;it looks very odd as no one can get over so quickly. You should also describe the emotions of characters more briefly and precisely. One more thing to which I would like to draw your attention to is that , you gave two names to the girl who left Arjun, first you said that her name was Arya then you said her name is Roshni so I was confused regarding the name. I felt one thing very contradictory , at the beginning Ria messaged him thanks for saving her life but while Arjun’s conversation with Sam and ayesha he said Riya saved his life so this was also a bit confusing. I feel your option lover boy doesn’t go well here because u were not able to describe this properly. And the last thing is stop using short cuts because sometimes it becomes difficult to understand the words for e.g. you have used v for  Bhi.

I liked your stories concept it was something different and unique. Your title was also apt for your story. I wish you all th best for your future and I am sorry if you felt hurt due to my review. 

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13+11+7+12=43
(judges) +20=63
Vote+2=65