Jury 1

My impression of the story 

I liked the os and it was really well described and beautifully poised story. A few things which lacked were scenes and character introduction for which I have marked accordingly.

Jury 2

The story was cute but it was bit difficult to understand because of language. Loved the way writer introduced herself as a major character in Ariya's love story. Also the story lost the connectivity b/w both the situation. And regarding the option chosen,  Riya's character was justified but Arjun being the lover boy wasn't properly explained. Overall the story was cute and beautiful just the writer could have work more on the matter.

Jury 3

Very nice and cute love story....

Concept was good....

Author described the character really well....and authors character was also nice........her involvement in the story was good....

But it could have been little lengthy....the ariya scenes were very less....

But all and all sweet and simple story...

Best scene:

The proposal 

Best dialogue :

( Arjun aapna past yaad karte hai jiske vajase uska kitna kimti waqt barbad hua.. aab usse jeena hai.. aapna dil ko dhadakne dena hai... banna hai usse firse kisi ka diwana paar iss baar humesha k liye ...)

This is the best dialogue....

Jury 4

It was a really nice OS, one with full of intense emotions and feelings. Really enjoyed reading it. The options chosen and the author’s role were mentioned in the end, but it would have been much better had it been mentioned in the beginning, for much better understanding of the characters. The options chosen were properly justified, Ms.Innocent for Riya was very well justified and as for Arjun, his lover boy character was more on justified in the second half than the first half.

The title was a nice one and was completely justified. The addition of the song with respect to the title was really a good and i guess a little humours idea.

There was really good character understanding between the leads. The way Arjun understood Riya can be felt from the scenes where he was talking to Sam n Ayesha at the dining table. And as for Riya, she understood him, gave him his space that he needed due to his past and at the end too, she understood him.

Arjun’s feelings and emotions were perfectly described and conveyed. His take on the betrayal he faced and his feelings regarding it were beautifully described. But, Arjun’s change of feelings were auite abrupt actually. First he was not ready to move on and take one more chance in love and the next moment, after seeing Riya’s msg and then his talk with Sam and Ayesha, he was ready to give Riya a chance. More description regarding the change of his feelings at that point was really needed, mainly beacuse the built up u gave at the beginning of the story regarding his past and how he is feeling due to it and all, the change was really sudden and abrupt, felt the descriptions of those scenes were incomplete.

As for Riya, a little bit more description about her was necessary, since the background story was different from that of the show. A little bit more about her. Although from earlier, it was clear that she had feelings for Arjun but still it was needed. Her reaction when he proposed was properly mentioned. Arjun’s feelings and thoughts regarding Riya or towards Riya were mentioned but not Riya’s and that was needed. From Arjun’s confession at the end, it’s clear that Riya did knew about his past so what was her feelings to it was needed. Lack of descriptions at a couple of places.

The dialogues were all upto mark, especially the beginning ones of Arjun’s talk with Sam, the pain Arjun was feeling could be kinda felt from them. I liked Arjun’s proposal and his honest confession though I didn’t thought it will happen this soon, but liked it nevertheless, the feelings and emotions with which he said that was absolutely amazing n beautiful. The humour on the ending scene was superb, i could actually picture Shaleen Malhotra telling that.

The author’s gueat appearance as Ariya was quite unexpected for me. Thats why i told about mentioning the options in the beginning, but i really loved the presentation of it. The role author had chosen for herself was really different and a rare one, and i liked it as well, haven’t seen that in any other OS’s, till now though. It was really really good.

Grammatical erroes were neutral. I really loved the starting portion and the ending also.