Book : Hostel life

Author : AkoOku

Title: The title is apt for the theme of the story. Though you can do better. But the subtitle is giving away the conflict of the plot.

Cover: The cover is giving mystery vibes but not fitting the story.

Blurb: Blurb is good. Not long, not short. No errors. Ending with question mark is always a nice idea.

Plot&Subplot:
The plotline is definitely interesting and well written. I can totally relate to it. There are no major subplots I have noticed. If you are going to make Michie's side as a subplot, develop it some more.

But I have some concerns:
▪️Amnesia means loss of memory. In that there are again different types. Since, she hasn't forgotten her all memories, only certain, then you can mention it as Retrograde Amnesia or selective amnesia.
▪️Why some of the remaining characters are behaving like they met her for the first time when they already know her? If you have to reveal the reasons yet then it's a good foreshadowing but if you are not aware about it, then it's a loophole. (please dm what it is? I'm eager to know if it was suspense)

Setting: It's a cliché setting but very well explained. In accordance with the theme. I should point out and appreciate it.

Chapter titles: The chapter titles are interesting, featuring what's inside.

Characters development: You have so many characters yet you gave them all different personalities. That's a good thing. Having strong female protagonist and sensible male characters, is attracting and well done attempt.

Character Arc: I haven't found any arc of characters, may be because the story was still ongoing.

Conflict: So here, the conflict is her memory loss, the reasons for that and the consequences. Though amnesia plot is used often, you kept the flow on edge.

Details & descriptions : You are perfect in this. There was not a moment where I felt bored because of details. I can envision the hostel and the premises. You were doing good job, keep it up.

Pacing: I felt the pacing slow, considering it is now at 15 chapters and the conflict is still not revealed completely.

Mood: Interested with the plot

Dialogues: Dialogues were in sync with the flow. None are at out of place. Just natural.

Grammar & Vocabulary : I didn't find any major grammatical errors. You have taken well care of it. If you keep it up like this the entire book, you are going to get appreciated for your work.

Special Points : You are a good narrator. I'm going to read this book till the end.