Review 93 // Kuna Sawa
Here is a DR review for DistortedMirror03
My comments will be in bold
Basics and grounding
Cool, just be careful to keep the characters in their canon ways because you're using a Canon game.
Character information
Okay she seems pretty cool and I really like the sound of her, however you could add more personality with her hobbies and mainly personality. The more they have there and the more detail, the more realistic and believable.
Relationships
No problems here, this works well in the universe and it functions well so this is good.
Backstory
This doesn't quite work with the universe if you've seen the later games but if not that's fine. Either way, this needs more detail and attention because ethe backstory should be the longest part of a characters profile.
Other
Cool cool. No issues here some pretty snazzy extra info.
Stats
Maybe lower a couple of these stats so it's more balanced but apart fro that this is fine.
Final thoughts
I like her actually, she seems like a really cool character and I think she could be incredible. Only a couple of things need to be worked on, so just do that and then you'll have a great character.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
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