Review 58 // Johanna Norville
Yes, I'm actually reviewing a character for a show I don't know, however, please don't request it. I'm only reviewing this character because this person has explained to me that they struggle to find people that can review this character and they have explained the universe to me.
So, here is a character for Jojo's Bizarre Adventure by ralsalsa
My comments will be in bold
Basics and grounding
This is literally all I know about this series except its art style. Don't request characters from this series for the reasons previously explained.
Character information
So far, she seems like a pretty decent character, even though I'm not sure how she quite fits into the universe. I approve of the wordplay with the name since you said that it has meaning. The design is rather bright, but judging from other characters in the series I suppose it works.
All I can really say is add more detail to the personality and make sure it works. For example, a lot of impulsive and reckless people tend to be violent and angry because that's simply in their nature. Adding to the character and making things like that make more sense would really add to the character.
Relationships
I don't know how to critique this because I don't know who is a canon character and who isn't, but as long as you develop these relationships further and make sure they work in the universe without changing the canon characters too much, this is fine.
Backstory
All right so this is a lot and I think it needs to be developed further for it to really make more sense and have a better flow. What made her the weird kid? How did she get up with the wrong people? Why did she date a teacher? Stuff like that can add to it and make her seem more developed and fleshed out.
Other
I don't completely get it, but those stats are pretty high so I recommend trying to balance them out more.
Seems like a cool power though.
Stats
Whilst Jojo characters are pretty, these stats are the stats of the universe with three being the average, so I recommend having a one to balance out that five.
Final thoughts
She seems like a decent character that just needs some further development. I have very little knowledge if jjba but generally speaking she's not half bad, so well done.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
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