Re-review 2 // Narah Howler Miscere

Strap in your seat belt boys, because this is a long one by GayCupcake69

My comments will be in bold

Basics and grounding

Okay, so this is a very large improvement from the background you gave me last time and clearly, a lot of thought has been put into it. All I can say if make sure to explain this in pieces to avoid confusing the reader and also avoid not saying it at all. This is important lore to the universe and should be included.

Also unlike pluto is good.

Character information

The only problem here are some conflicting personality traits, how can she be easily angered but also have a good poker face? Clearing little details like that will make your character feel more realistic and well thought out.

Relationships

Don't see any issues here as her parent's death fit into the universe well enough for it to be natural.

Backstory

Okay, a lot is going on here. Be careful with several tragic things happening to one character especially whilst they're still young. Having so many things happen and become a sensation before they're even an adult is a rare thing to happen. Maybe ageing her up would make this work better if you don't want to change her backstory?

Other

Same as last time, try not to make her too op because that can become a problem if not tackled correctly.

Stats

The advice I give everyone for stats is: have at least one very low stat if you have one very high stat to balance it out. Only have one incredibly high stat at most. Most of the stats should be in the mid-range of things.

Final thoughts
There is a large improvement here from your last review, but there will always be room for improvement and the more you work of it, the better she will become.

*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*

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