sproutheart

name || Sproutheart. She got that name because she was as tiny as a sprout.
okay! i'm loving the name; 'sprout' isn't a normal prefix, but it's still so pretty! plus, i love the name reasoning.

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gender || she-cat
oki!

rank || warrior
cool! i actually quite like this, because a lot of ocs are leaders!

clan || Half WindClan, half RiverClan.
that's interesting! i'm sure she has an interesting backstory!!

appearance || Calico she-cat with yellow-amber eyes. She has one torn ear, because of a battle
she sounds very pretty, and everything is realistic!

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personality || Funny, goofy, sarcastic, impulsive, impatient
everything seems good with this, with a good mix of flaws! although, i think it might be a tad contradicting how she's goofy yet sarcastic at the same time. i'm thinking of sarcasm like jayfeather sarcasm, and he's not exactly the goofy type. but that's just the only point i had.

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backstory || No-cat except her mothers best friend, Doveshade, knew that Sproutheart was half-clan. Cats used to wonder who her father was, but Leafpelt lied and said Rowanfire, who like Leafpelt. She used to be really small, but became an average size when she grew up.
seems like her backstory's pretty focused on her heritage, which is expected! i do have some questions about it, though. did she ever find out who her father was, and whether or not she was half-clan? what was her reaction to that? how did her father treat her, if they ever interacted?

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family || Her mother was Leafpelt, a tortoiseshell with amber eyes, and her father is Firenose, a orange tom with a darker nose and yellow eyes.
i don't know too much about cat genetics, but i'd say she's possible! good job!

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likes [bonus point] || Rabbit, sunny days, friends
nothing to add here! it all seems realistic based on her personality!

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dislikes [bonus point] || bullies, rainy days, and toad
can completely see that from her personality!

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final rating || 10/12 [included bonus points]

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thank you for letting me rate sproutheart, she's a pretty lovely oc! there's just the smallest things i think could be touched up, but other than that, she's awesome!

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