Bonus!: Cover by somebody else 'cause I'm too lazy to actually learn... Sin count: 1

A long time ago there was a war between Angels and Devils the queen of the devils wanted the 5 stones of elements the queen of angels had no choice but to send them to earth and let them find worthy owners. It was my first day of school I hit the alarm clock so hard I nearly broke it.

Uhh.... does anyone else see that.. the last sentence feels wierd...? Sin count: 2

"Eclipse! It's your first day of school come down here!" my mom shouted.

Her name is Eclipse because ofcourse it is, past me really like that name. Sin count: 3

And I quickly brushed my long red hair and put on my dark gray cop top with a skull symbol and black ripped genes I then put on my black knee high boots with white laces. I then raced down stairs.

... "Cop top" Sin count: 4. "Genes" Sin count: 5

"Who's ready for there first day of school remember you'll be in a dorm!" my mom said.

This souns so forced!!!! Sin count: 6

"Now remember no boys!" my dad said and left off to work.

I think that's a cliché... Sin count: 7

I walked to my new school when I was there a dark brown haired girl who I guessed was my tour guide was waiting for me.

That really doesn't sound right... Sin count: 8

"Oh! You must be Eclipse" the girl said "I'm Dust!"

"Nice to meet you Dust! So i'm guessing you're my guide?" I questioned.

You do not need to say 'questioned'! Sin count: 9

"Yup!" Dust said.

"We have the same classes so.. You won't have to look for me" Dust said.

Aren't they in different years? Sin Count: 7

K, so I didn't have time to finish this but I REALLY want to get this out today, so, here we go.