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Book: Prince Charmings

Author: icanbeinterestingtoo

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Title (5/5): Perfect title because it works on two fronts: (1) it references the play within the story and (2) alludes to relationship between Beau and Spencer. I also love how you addressed the title early on in the story so that readers can see the connection.

Cover (5/5): Catches the reader's eye and portrays the right vibe for the story. It does a good job of introducing the characters and the setting and the cartoons are fun to look at! The only suggestion I have is to make the sub-captions smaller so that they don't detract attention away from the lovely art. Especially since you have a couple stickers on it as well, so it's become a little crowded.

Summary (9/10): Entices readers in without giving away too much. You could potentially buff it up with a little more information since it's somewhat short, but there isn't much need. If you were to add anything I'd recommend touching a little bit on why Beau got community service hours.

Plot (12/15): Hot damn, what a start! You do a great job setting up the story and hooking readers in off the bat. The pacing is perfect in the beginning but between when Beau agrees to join the play and his first practice, things slow down a little. We know that the story will focus on the play from the summary but we don't really get a taste of it until the tenth chapter, and even then Beau doesn't really interact with anybody aside from Spencer and Bella and he doesn't get up on stage. I think it would help with the pacing if you had Beau attend his first play practice sooner in the story and had him get up on stage in his embarrassing costume so that we can see him struggle with the decision he has made. Because for right now, it all seems a little too easy for Beau since it's helping to cut down on his hours. The events that you have take place between his agreement and the first practice show us some good glimpses of the characters and their relationships, but back-to-back they become a little repetitive since it's a lot of Fleming being annoying just for the sake of it, Beau struggling with his feelings for Clark, and Clark manipulating Beau. You do a good job of establishing these things early on so you don't need to continue to enforce them if they aren't going to aid in the progress of the plot. That's where I think bringing the first play practice up a couple chapters would help, because it would break up some of that repetitiveness but still allow for vital scenes, like Clark kissing Beau, to fit into the story. I also think the story might pack more of a wallop if Beau didn't meet Spencer again until the first play practice. I like that they seem to be establishing a good friendship and possibly a future relationship, but you could save that until after they meet on stage and realize they have to work alongside each other after everything they went through. I think that would help readers to see more of Beau's character early-on and help to make his character development stand out more. I also think waiting to develop that relationship between Beau and Spencer until after they've come to terms with working together would ramp up well for the big reveal that they're playing each other's love interests. We could see Beau start to pull away from Clark's influence more and start to see Spencer as a romantic option and then when Bella reveals the big news, it gives Beau the opportunity to act on his feelings. Don't take all this critique to mean that the plot is no good, I think the way it's written now is still great, I just think these suggestions could help take it to the next level. This is your story though, so it's completely your choice.

Characters (10/10): Your characters are very real and relatable and each one seems unique from the others. Each relationship is distinct, and the driving forces between them are made immediately obvious to the readers and easy to understand. I think the relationship between Clark and Beau, while negative, is especially strong. I think your dialogue flows well, is natural, and very entertaining. I definitely chuckled several times while reading!

Organization (5/5): The story is organized well and easy to navigate. I noticed a handful of spelling/grammar errors but nothing that deflects from the story. The only recommendation I can think of is adding chapter titles, but that's only if you wanted to and not necessary by any means.

Overall (46/50): Your writing is fantastic! It flows so well and keeps readers hooked all the way through. I love your descriptions and I seriously think you've got the skills to be a published author! I really struggled with recommendations for this story because it's written so well but I wanted to provide some ideas because I believe the point of a critique is to help improve your story. The biggest suggestion I can make is to rework the timeline of the plot a little bit to help with the pacing, but other than that I really enjoyed the story and I think you've got something great on your hands!

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