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Book: My Inner Demons

Author: blushin_bby

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Title (5/5): Fits very well with the story. If I'm remembering correctly, Trigon is a demon, right? So it works in both a literal sense and it explains the non-stop negativity Raven experiences in her own head.

Cover (5/5): Love the cover, the artwork is incredible! The font and the colors are perfect and it definitely intrigues me. The only suggestion I have, and this is 100% me being nit-picky, is to lower the picture and the title a bit so there's not as much of a space towards the bottom but that is a very minuscule issue.

Summary (8/10): The summary is a good length and I like the quote you use in the beginning because it pulls people in. It catches my attention but I think it would benefit from a little more information about her trying to leave because I'm not entirely sure what the story is about upon first glance. I also think it would help if you specified what "world" Raven is trying to leave.

Plot (12/15): I ended up knowing a lot less than I thought I'd need to know about Raven for this story so my apologies in advance for my lack of knowledge regarding the source content. The pacing seemed appropriate and you did a good job of explaining the backstory. I was a little confused after Trigon appeared through the portal for the first time because Raven shuts the portal but there's no mention of what happens to Trigon until the next chapter. I think it would help readers (and help to bulk up the chapter) if you provided some description about what happened to Trigon as Raven was destroying the door to the portal. This might be a lack of knowledge on my part, but how did they know that Trigon had killed Juris? Is he the only one in the portal and/or are they familiar with his abilities and how he kills people? I should also probably know this but has Trigon always had the ability to communicate with Raven in her mind, or did that happen after he appeared in the portal for the first time? If the former, it might be beneficial for the reader if you started to introduce this earlier on. Otherwise, I think you did a really good job of building up for the main part of the story within the first ten chapters and it definitely kept me intrigued.

Characters (7/10): Raven was always my favorite character in Teen Titans so I'm definitely partial to her but I didn't feel as though I was able to connect to Azar or Arella as much because they didn't have much dialogue. The relationships between the characters seemed to make sense but some of them developed fairly quickly without much explanation, like how Raven started to become closer to Azar and more distant from her mom. This may be something that's explained in the source content but I think it would be helpful for readers if you expanded on it a bit within the story as well.

Organization (3/5): The book is easy to navigate and the pages are clean. You make it easy to understand whose perspective it is with the headers and I really like the bird divider you use. I spotted a couple spelling/grammar errors but otherwise it looks like you were pretty thorough with your story. The biggest thing I noticed is that the chapters are really short and I was able to read through the first ten chapters very quickly. I think it would help if you combined some chapters together with dividers to bulk them up. Or if you don't want to do that, adding more details or descriptions would help as well. Chapter nine was a good length so I would refer to that.

Overall (40/50): Admittedly, it's been a long time since I've seen Teen Titans and I haven't read any of the comics but I really like the show and Raven is my favorite character so I was excited to read this story. You've got some good writing and I think chapter nine in particular was very strong. My biggest recommendation is to bulk up or combine chapters so they aren't so short, but other than that I'm excited to see what happens next!

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