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Book: Letters

Author: MY_AMAZING_SELF

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Title (1/5): I'm assuming the title refers to the letters Martin found about his family but it's hard to tell since there are only five chapters. If the letters play a larger part later, then this title will become more relevant, but as of right now I think it's too simple and doesn't really give us a sense of what the story is about. Other titles you could consider include: "Karma" or "Karma & the Devil".

Cover (4/5): Fits well with the title and the story and gives us a good sense of what we might find inside. I'm assuming the man and woman on the cover are Karma and Devil and they both definitely don't look like people to be trifled with!

Summary (1/10): The summary is very vague and very short. It does a good job of encapsulating the vibe of the story, but it leaves readers to wonder what exactly the story is about, which I believe is going to cost you potential reads. I would recommend leaving the first two sentences but combining them with a comma and changing "were" to "where". The last sentence is really confusing so I would chop that. From there, I would advise adding some information about Karma and Devil. You don't have to add too much detail that you give stuff away, but some basic introductions of the main characters and the setting would help readers to get a better sense of what they're about to read.

Plot (6/15): The prologue sets up very well for the story and definitely hooks the reader off the bat. The story is intriguing and action-packed, but there's a lot going on in a short amount of time. I think your story would fare better from slower pacing because as of right now it doesn't really give your characters or your readers a chance to catch their breath and sort out what's going on. Within what seems to be only a day, Karma steals an important watch from the mafia, takes down 30+ men, fights Devil three times, and gets kidnapped. That's a lot for five chapters. I was also confused regarding Martin's motives for stealing the watch, as he had already found his family through other letters he had stolen years ago. Does he want the watch to figure out Devil's background? Martin and Devil worked together before but it seems there's no love lost between them now, so why would Martin care about helping him? I'm assuming that Devil is Isaac, although I could be completely wrong about that. If I'm not, this may be a personal opinion, but I think you should reveal that right away. We're already aware that Karma is the same Karma from the prologue, so it's natural for the reader to guess that Devil is Isaac. I think it could create a great parallel throughout the story and make it more enticing for the readers because they know something the characters don't.

Characters (6/10): There's only five chapters and there's been a lot of action so it's hard to get a sense for the characters, but so far I like Karma. She's strong but she clearly has flaws and I found myself relating to her. I also like how she stuck with Esra long after saving her from her rapist and formed a tight sibling-like relationship with her. Martin, Esra, Sean, and Karma seem to have a great familial relationship but I'm confused as to what their biological relationship is. In the last two chapters it's mentioned that Martin is related to Karma and that Sean is Martin's younger brother, but it's not entirely made clear and the information just seems to come out of nowhere. I think it would help readers if you introduced these connections in the same chapter that you introduced Martin and Sean in.

Organization (0/5): There were a lot of spelling and grammar errors which made parts of the story confusing and difficult to read. I also noticed that almost every time two characters were speaking to each other that their dialogue was contained within the same paragraph. Make sure to separate different dialogue with a space so that readers understand who is speaking. This is more nit-picky, but I'm not a huge fan of the fonts you used for your chapter titles because they were all different and difficult to read.

Overall (18/50): It's difficult to say where this will all go since there's only five chapters but I think you've got some great bones to start with. My biggest recommendations would be to fix all the technical errors and to slow down the pacing of the plot to make the story easier for readers to understand. Otherwise, I'm excited to see where you take it from here!

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