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Book: Black Knight

Author: MauliKundlia

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Title (5/5): Encapsulates the heart of the story and intrigues readers to learn more!

Cover (5/5): Simple and clean. Gives us a good glimpse at the main character without revealing too much. I like it as is, but it also might be cool to change the font of the title so that it stands out a little more and doesn't look so uniform. Either way though, great job!

Summary (10/10): Provides enough backstory to intrigue readers without giving too much away. I really like the last line, "Because she's my princess and I am her Black Knight". That might even be a cool subtitle for the cover. My only suggestion would be to add the names/usernames of those who made the comments, but that's not all that important.

Plot (9/15): You do a great job of alternating between the characters' perspectives; the transitions are really smooth. However, it's a little confusing in the beginning as to what the plot actually is. You give us a lot of great backstory but it'd be nice to get a better idea of where the story is going to go earlier on. Because of this, and because you devote most of the first ten chapters to introducing and re-establishing Kaidon and Alice's relationship, the story starts off a little slow. I think it would help to strengthen readers' interests if you introduced and discussed more about Cross Consultancy and their special abilities sooner. I was also a bit confused about the Black Knights and how everyone in Seydon and Alice's class knew about them even though they're a secret organization that wiped its entire history from the internet. But perhaps this is explained later on. Aside from all that though, I really like Kaidon's motivation to wait out his revenge against his father until he's the head of the organization and can run it into the ground. I think that's a great track to continue the story on and am excited to see what his final revenge looks like, if he decides to go through with it.

Characters (8/10): You do a great job of building your characters and giving us a sense of how they operate. With all the great insights you provide, you could give readers a random scenario and most of them could accurately predict how Kaidon and Alice would react/what they would think/how they would feel. Kaidon and Alice have good back-and-forth dialogue and you can tell that they mesh well even after seven years of being apart. While I personally didn't click as much with the main two characters (that might mostly be because I'm not much of a romance gal), I was really intrigued by Riannon. I'm excited to read more about her.

Organization (3/5): I noticed some grammar errors here and there, mostly alternating tenses and missing commas, but it doesn't detract from the reader's ability to understand the story. I would recommend renumbering or changing the titles of the chapters with decimal points in them because they seem a little random. For example, there's a few chapters where the number has .5 following it, but then there's chapters with .1, .2, and .3. I think it would make it easier for readers to understand if you just omitted the decimals and added "Part 1", "Part 2", "Part 3", etc. to the title. Or, in the case of "Chapter 7.5", you could change the title to simply, "13 Years Ago".

Overall (40/50): You've got some good writing! Your description is great and made it easy to visualize the story as it unfolded. You've mastered alternating perspectives, which is no easy feat, so be proud of yourself for that! My biggest recommendations would be to establish the movement of the plot sooner, sprinkle in more information about Cross Consultancy and their special abilities earlier, and re-title some of your chapters. Otherwise, keep up the good work! You've got some great talent!

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