[The structure of this review will be different to others because this review was written for TheHeavenlyAwards contest]

Title: Armageddon

Author: cat_bostick

Genre: Fanfiction

Number of Chapters to Review: 1

REVIEW:

Prologue

First impression: I can already feel the tension in the air! This story has me hooked already.

I quite enjoyed this chapter. It served as a good introduction to the story, establishing Margo's character as well as the state of the world she lives in. 

I thought it was interesting how you hooked the readers in with a fast-paced action sequence (Margo running away from the zombies/monsters) and then switching it to a flashback explaining what had happened. Usually this causes a change in the tone and pace of the story but in this case, your tone and pace remained pretty consistent.

You also write action really well, and I could practically feel the exhilaration, tension, confusion and anxiety of the situation radiating through the screen. Great job!

Considering that this chapter was rather short and was also written quite well, I don't actually have that many pointers to give to you. I would say that there were times where the wording of your sentences sounded a little awkward and could use some editing. For example:

'Margo looked at her hair, she loved how long her hair was, it took forever to grow.' 

This is phrased kind of awkwardly since the commas causes the sentence to run on, and that doesn't sound very natural. I would suggest changing it to something like:

'Margo looked at her hair. She loved how long her hair was, as it took forever to grow.'

Overall, this chapter was great, and the cliffhanger at the end would have readers wanting to read more. Great job!