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Judge 4

Inteqaam

Review... Nice cover with a beautiful description. Though, title was a common one and not so eye catchy. It gives a feeling that it may be a simple revenge story and it results in many readers skipping it. Coming to plot it was really confusing dear. Really saying the whole concept confused me a lot specially whom swara loved... Reason of revenge was not so clear. Everything was rushed up. Still the scenes described by you and dialogue delivery was fine. Ending was a simple beautiful lovey dovey end. Still at end also it felt rushed up and kind of incompleteness. Just will say win or not do edit it and try to clarify the plot.

Desi chhori ka videshi chhora

Starting with cover it's too simple guys. Coming to title and description, title was really straight forward and no description a direct two lines giving hint of whole plot. Plot was also a common plot like plot next door type. Just thing which kept us hooked was a sweet beautiful shot you have written and little bit of comedy you added. It was a simple sweet mini shot type but with common plot and not intriguing title, cover , description. May be with simple twist and some eye catchy title and description it could have done better.

Dream comes true......

Cover was nothing great just a simple picture with title and coming to title a common one. There was nothing so good in description. About plot,a very common one again. There was no new thought and twist to keep reader hooked up. Still if considering, how you have written a common plot... I can't appreciate it much. Common story line with common way of plotting. Lots of grammatical and spelling mistakes. Do proof read guys. What you have written is good but can be improved by proof reading. I personally recommend to change title,keep something eye catching and hooking one.

Pyaar : Ek lamba intezaar

starting from cover as always there was no particular cover or Introduction specifically. Moving onwards towards title it was good still it felt a mismatch... Either word pyaar didn't fell correct with tag line or vise versa. Still it was fine according to your plot. Plot of your one shot was show based which can be problem for many you see. As this one is for competition you never no judges are of your Fandom or not or they ever watched the show or not. I didn't find it good idea to write an one shot on show track for competition. Still moving to your idea on track it was unique. Still I felt incompleteness and a lots of grammar and punctuation mistakes. As earlier also I said in your story review, don't start each and every word with capital words. There are some basic rules, you should follow them. This things make reading your story awkward. In whole os what I liked most was the last lines by sanskar bold ones. It was a good try dear still you can do better. Scene description, dialogue delivery everything was rushed and main problem most of dialogues were in hindi. You should give translation many don't understand it dear you should take it into consideration. Yeah, if talking only about plot and serial track it was unique idea... It could have been better with some minor points

Justajoo

Starting with cover it was nice though I feel you should add something in description. It gives a new charm to story. Coming to title perfect and suitable to your story. The plot of your story was common rebirth one but twist was parents and children exchanged that's something new. Still, it's said that it's in your hand how better you can make a simple and common plot. Really you done it well dear. The idea of continuation of story like this was nice. The pinch of fantasy you tried to add in name of showing past and cute fights of both couples was fun. The humor you added that's something which kept me more excited. End of story was nice specially Aditya's reaction and words seeing sanskar. A very nice try dear. Keep writing.

Denigrated

Starting with cover it was really simple dear the only thing that attracts was lines written on it. Though, it could be represented more nicely . Moving to blurb / description it was fine the only line attracts was that " Mard ko Dard hota Hai..." that's one. Still I feel just a small play of words and it could have rocked. Title was simple and straight one as the requirement of plot chosen. Plot of story was really appreciable, a main topic of awareness these days. Women using the harrasment case otherwise... Fake cases and all a topic in talk. Topic is common talk but still not in Wattpad. The only problem was grammatical errors and some times specially the lawyers student teacher relationship and all reminded me of Tere liye movie. I think instead of coincidence you should have mold it your way. Nothing was rushed every thing and scenes was clearly described. Only thing which let towards lack of interest was grammar and sentence construction errors. Somewhere, fluency in the story, a smooth flow seems to be missing sometimes. Otherwise it was perfect with a cute love story. Ragini's and Shekhar's supportive role was impressive. Overall it was nice try. If possible concentrate on English grammar and all.

Faasle

A very beautiful cover with nice synopsis. A simple synopsis felt special only by the quotes used. Moving towards one shot, poem at starting was like cherry on the cake. Plot choosen was really beautiful. It's about beautiful relation and the memories we collect through out the life... The only thing came in my mind after reading your one shot. Every thing was beautifully explained. Specially, the way sanskar memories being remembered by swara and a silent love from a mother to daughter. The idea of letters and song selected was really awesome. The end I really felt like crying the only song I remembered that time was yadein title track. The best thing was realistic end given. Every time there is no guardian angel like stories we have to live for loved ones and with special memories of special ones. It really touched my heart guys. You really rocked it dear

Judge 3

WHEN DREAMS COME TRUE

So firstly the title of this story is related but it was not a catchy one or attractive one . So secondly about the plot . It was truly a good one saying about how a girl life changes from prostitution to a normal one . But it was a unique or different one . I personally felt they didn't give much importance to laksh character like why was he so attracted towards ragini and her story. Like I felt their should be something why he felt so connected with her except humanity. They have gave much importance only to ragu and her feelings and missed out others . They could give thai pov or laksh or any of ragu family members . Tho initially they have described the scene brilliantly but at the ending they just made it a bit hurrily and didn't expand the scenes like they could expand how ragini's parents accepted her back or how society taunted her . Or few scenes how ragini used to leave with her family or her interaction with laksh family . But they just completed with a single line. But one thing they have done beautifully is how they presented ragini's feelings. How she felt and what she felt . During introduction they did it perfectly. And described each and everything brilliantly but ending they just rushed off. I thought them to extend a bit more and show a bit more drama or romance . Like how raglak fall in love with each other . Or some family drama or few scenes of ragini with her future family . Altogether it was good os but not the best one .

FAASLE

It was a very catchy title from my pov. The title itself has impressed me a lot . Coming towards plot it was definitely not a fairy tale one but a reality based story . It made us keep in suspense till the end about sahil maheshwari which it self was fab . The twist of mahi was also cute . Each and every character was explored till it could which was also satisfied enough . Coming ahead to scene description I didn't felt any where there was any dragging or which scenes which means they have done their work pretty well . The introduction was good and ending was superb . Frankly speaking i didn't expect her to leave mahi so the ending was extra ordinary from my pov . Altogether I felt this os as the best among all of them.

Justajoo

This story title was a good one and a really catchy one . Loved it a lot . I liked their idea of using their group story in their os that was a good one . And mostly I felt the innocence in this os . The plot was really good and a cute one . I felt they could have showed some thing more for sanskar but their just rapped it in a scene . The scenes were also taken how much even possible. But I felt they could have shown something more in their past story . Introduction was superb and fab but ending was a very simple one . I felt their could have been something more . All together it reached my expectation but I expected something more in it .

PYAAR- EK LAMBA INTEZAAR

The title is very ordinary nothing special but a related one to the story . Introduction was a simple one but some where the ending was unexpected that he was not sanskar and Swara will move on. Plot I didn't find it a good one . Tho everything was normal not a special or epic one . And characters were also didn't explored till it's end . I felt they could have shown something more . Coming towards the scene I don't know why I felt all very ordinary nothing uniqueness in it . And frankly speaking I didn't even liked it. It was a not that good but just k . I didn't feel like it is a competition os . It was just a normal os .

DENIGRATED

Firstly it was having a very good and attractive title . Which is quite impressive. Coming towards plot it was definitely a unique one as nowadays this is always happening with ladies but they brilliantly changed it for man so surely it was different one . And mostly they have described every scene beautifully and detailed which is a good point again. I felt they have didn't explained characters much. Bcoz they have concentrated on plot and left the characters briefly. Like they could show few scenes of sanskar with his family . And dialogue delivery was very good . But I felt they could also have shown how and where ragini started to sanskar . Introduction and ending was not a catchy or attractive one it was simply a simple one . But I liked the court hearing dialogues the most . Ending was not a special one . So all together it was a nearly perfect os with a little exceptions.

INTEQAAM

So basically the title of this os is superb . I just loved it don't know why . The plot is really amazing and unique . This is really something not random and best .I personally felt the way they described each and everything is just perfect especially the proposal part , I loved it a lot . They the way they presented an revengeful , thriller , suspence yet a love story was the best idea . The dialogue was also delivered very brilliantly. And here also they gave equal importance to all the characters which is remarkable . Coming towards introduction it was quiet amazing but I was a bit disappointed at the ending . I thought at least sanskar should take a bit more time to forgive Swara . If not Swara then at least Sanskrit . And some where I felt didn't really Swara couldn't differently between those two . Like I do understand they faces r same and somewhere there name also but what about their behaviour and life style. And couldn't she understand the difference between her childhood friend and love . And it was said in past that she was having one sided love with Sanskrit they couldn't she differentiate those two brothers . Both on the second hand this is just a os not real life so I bit liberty is allowed . So all together this is almost a perfect os.

DESI CHORI KA VISDESI CHORA

This title was again related to the story but not a attractive one . It was a very simple one . Coming to plot or was a simple and similar plot . Nothing is special or unique in it .the characters were explained in a good manner . But again nothing special . They have not described any scenes in detail and didn't even name the place . There is no speciality in thoughts also. So it was a way ordinary os . But the way they described the dialogues was really good. The way swasan were cute and sweet . There was not a good introduction or ending . The main point is they didn't show any uniqueness in their os . So all together it was not a different and best os but it was a cute and simple one .