Group 1: Inteqaam by Crazy_Sidhantian(Team Black_Ice_Blazzers)

- Title was appropriate

-Gripping trailer/Introduction into the story.

-Good storyline

-Descriptions were superb.

--If you are using hindi dialogues, please add translations...thanks!

-Character chemistry was good.

-Nice plotted scenes.

-A bit of a confusion with the whole childhood love thing with Sanskrit and Swara. If she loved Sanskrit...how did she end up with Sanskar and it totally amazed me that Sanskar was able to survive four shots...but I guess it's different in stories. This part needed to be explored more.

-Awesome writing style.

- Thought/Emotions and Feelings were good as were the dialogues.

-Grammatical errors spotted.

- For someone who has been drugged by his brother and shot four times by his wife...for a woman who was raped and made to abort her baby by her 'out of it' husband and brother-in-law...and for another who has been seething in revenge for so long...this ending was just too forgiving and happy...even for a story.

Group 2: Denigrated by aliya598(Team Terrific TeVarians)

- Title is apt.

-Good plot. We rarely get male-centric storylines so this was something really different in the competition.

-Dialogues were good, but lacked clarity in some instances. Translations were needed for some!

-Scenes were carefully plotted. Awesome work!

- Love how the author used the members of her team(Terrific TeVarians) as characters. Superb!

-Grammatical errors are there.

-Writing syle and structure needs improvement.

-Character Exploration was ok, but I felt that Sanskar's character wasn't explored properly. He is the title character and focus should be with him, but it tends to lean a little more toward Ragini. Although he did express his feelings/pain to Ragini during the rain scene, the rest of the story only gives us snippets of his thoughts and emotions. Would have liked to know more on his thoughts when he was in jail, his experience there and his feelings for Ragini before he was acquitted etc.

- Sanskar's Character Development was a bit weak. He ended exactly as he had started out....not being heard. He might be freed of all charges, but he is still the same silent Sanskar, whose voice only exists in his thoughts,  Give him an opportunity for his voice to be heard also, rather than letting Ragini overshadow him.  

-Good character chemistry.

-Emotions were there but somehow I found them lacking in certain areas.

-Ending was good, but i was expecting something a bit different.

Group 3: Desi Chhori Videshi Chhora by Jaanvi_Paras_Babbar(Team Fierce_Icers)

- Appropriate title...well suited to the descriptions and scenes of the story.

- Good chemistry between leads

-Character exploration was a bit weak.

-Needed more descriptions in all areas.

-Scenes were satisfactory. I love how the story differentiates between the upbringings of out leads in different societies, but the first meeting between Swara and Sanskar, after years of not seeing each other, could have been better written. Was expecting alot more out of that scene.

-Good writing skill

-Dialogues were good, but if you are using hindi dialogues, please add translations...thanks!

-Thoughts/Feelings and Emotions were a bit short in supply.

-Cute, happy ending. 

Group 4: Justajoo- Sally_Blr(Team Mental Sisters)

- Title was appropriate

-Nicely thought out plot, adding layers connecting the OS to the Arabian Nights story, and including a cross over between Swaragini and Bepannah. 

- Descriptions were clear, but lacking in some areas. 

-Scenes were awesome, but more needed to be added, like why was underaged Ragini in that bar in the first place? Aditya and Zoya's background story felt rushed.

- Dialogues were satisfactory, but if you are using hindi dialogues, please add translations...thanks!

-Character exploration needs work.

- Awesome twists in the re-birth storyline with Shaad and Safa being reborn as Aditya and Zoya and Shehryaar and Ryah being reincarnated as Sanskar and Ragini.

-Ragini's character is too adorable.

-Superb writing style

-Awesome character chemistry between Aditya and Zoya and Sanskar and Ragini.

I really loved this Os. You have brought life again to my favourite characters from Arabian Nights. It was both adorable and funny and maintained an air of real surprise with the arrival of the genie and the re-birth twists. Nicely done.

Group 5:  Faasle by GS_Stella(Team Arduous Scribblers)

- Fitting Title

- An absolutely amazing story that switches from past to present,  relaying a beautifully painful tale of a widow and surrogate mother, Swara. Awesome plot.  

-Each scene was well thought out and perfectly written, although more thoughts on Sanskar would have made this story even more perfect.

-Superb descriptive writing and narration. Each scene could be pictured clearly.

-Good suspense build up, leaving us eagerly waiting and wondering to know who Swara had married and who had saved her from the Ashram.

-Great writing style.

-Swara's Character Exploration was superb! Her thoughts/emotions/feelings were clearly described, helping us relate to the pains of a wife and mother who had been deprived of both roles.

-Grammatical errors were sparse.

-Character chemistry between Swara and Sanskar was adorable. There was a little bit of a cute Sahil-Swara bonding happening too.

-The ending was awesomely heart-breaking with Swara deciding not to reveal the truth to Amaya.   

Fantastic story! Seriously this shot left me absolutely in awe..and a bit speechless. I was hooked from beginning to end.  Well done! All the best!

Group 6: When Dreams Come True by KitkatRaglak(Team Dreamers) 

-Title was approppriate.

- Nice simple storyline.

-The main gist of the story was clearly explained but more detailed description was needed.

-Character exploration needs work.

-Scenes were good but to the end story felt a bit rushed.

-More descriptive thoughts on their feelings for each other/emotions etc were needed.

-Great character chemistry between the lead pair: Laksh and Ragini

-Dialogues were good. Thanks for the translation!

-Ending was nice and happy.

Group 7: Pyaar- Ek Lamba Intezaar by AngelGoldieReal(Team Dazzling Girls)

- Title was somewhat appropriate. I think a better option could have been used for this story.

-While the plot was good, the descriptions/emotions/scenes didn't live up to the hype of the storyline and it felt a bit rushed.   

-Too many unnecessary scenes at the beginning, causing the first part of the story to drag a bit.

-Dialogues were satisfactory.

- Grammatical errors are there. Please refrain from beginning all your words with capital letters. It makes the story a bit harder to read and concentrate on.

-If you are using hindi dialogues, please add translations...thanks!

-Awesome twist, but like I mentioned before, the scenes, emotions and description weren't enough to support it.

-Good writing style.

-Character exploration was a bit weak.

- Clearer descriptions were needed in all areas, especially the ending.

-Descriptive Thoughts/Feelings/Emotions were ok, but still lacking.

- The ending was left me as confused as many of the other scenes in this.  I re-read the scene a few times and I'm still not sure if she knew that it was Sanjay instead of Sanskar. If she knew, then why did she keep referring to him as Sanskar in her thoughts? If she didn't know, then she was wayyy too calm about the whole thing.