Judge 2

Encounters of fate

Part 4 (The Unforeseen)

Fantabulous update. I am absolutely speechless. A big hats off to the entire team for shaping up the plot in such a splendid way. All the emotions, feelings, descriptions of scenes....everything was up to the mark. U guys are really hooking up the readers to ur story by increasing their curiosity. The twist of bringing in a positive paranormal idea was really very good and its gonna be really interesting to see how Gayatri solves all of this. Really keep up the good work guys.

Part (Untying the knots)

The beginning of this part was so serene, so beautiful and so very peaceful....hats off to the writer for moulding that scene in such a beautiful way. The kiss was really a shocker for me, coz i no way so that coming, my eyes were as wide as saucers if i may add, but what happen the next moment was again certainly unexpected. Dave’s entry at Prof.Roy’s cabin was awesome and then their discussions in Prof.Roy’s cabin just increased the feeling in me that this is gonna get all the more interesting. I really loved the playful scene between Marta Gomez and Arthur Williams....really amazing guys.

Masquerade love
Part 6 (last one)

Perfect ending to the story. To me, this was the only part where Sanskar’s love for Swara was shown. Up till now it was more on the obsession side, but now it is love...Swara’s death was an unexpected one, but i felt it was needed for Sanskar to get back to his true self. I really loved the way u portrayed the new Sanskar. And the highlights of this part for me was; Sanskar, Ragini and Sanskrit’s moment, Swara’s words during her last moment and Sanskar’s moment with his princess Swara...these three scenes were beautifully portrayed.....all the dialogues were up to the point in this part.

Love:a heal to everything

Part 6 (last one)

It was a nice one. But i felt the ending was rushed. The action scene of Sankar and Sahil and then Swara’s entry and all was really good. The horse riding scenes were interesting as well. But if some more descriptions were given to the scenes then it would have been way better, wouldn’t have felt it finished in a rush...i only felt the rush towards the end. Before that it was going good. Good chappy but could have been made better.

Melody of 2 hearts

Part 6

First when i read the part, i was really confused, coz in the last part it was given as Swara leaving him but in this the starting was pretty different....not the starting of the chappy but the starting of where the spy comes n told Sanskar abt Veer’s plans. It was a nice one.....Sanskar’s pain and Swara’s fight with her own feelings were clearly visible throughout the chappy. The description of the scenes of where Veer was taking swara, and some scenes that took place there were a little confusing for me. Apart from that, the rest all were really good...keep up the work with a little sharpening here n there.

Epilogue 

This part truly left me speechless. A big hats off to the entire team for moulding up the story in such a beautiful and heart touching way. This part really highlighted all the emotions and feelings of both Swara and Sanskar. The opening scene of father son duo was described really good. I especially loved Swasan’s last moment together...it was so surreal, could actually sorta feel their pain. The idea of both of their pov at the end was really good, i could actually picture most of it, n well it was quite heart wrenching. A wonderful ending to such an amazing story.

Love beyond time

Part 6

This was a nice one...but i m filled with a lot of doubts regarding the storyline. Weren’t King Laksh n Queen Ragini dead in their past....their past had ended with their death right then how come they married later n Ragini was accepted as queen by all as mentioned in this chappy...? And though i m clear abt the change in Laksh’s father in the past abt accepting Ragini as his DIL, but those scenes weren’t smooth enough. Apart from these, this update was really a good one, the continuation of Raglak’s love story, I really liked it.

Epilogue 

A sweet update....i really loved Raksh...he is such a cutie pie. Everything was nice except for some grammatical errors her n there but that was oretty ignorable. I loved the whole family banter, especially some of the dialogues of them. Really enjoyed reading the epilogue. Although u guys had to keep ur climax an action packed one but the idea of giving a small token of their happy lives after the action packed part of climax of the story was a nice one.

Moujuza e uns

Part 6 (last part)

I m speechless, a wonderful ending to such an amazing story. Shaad and Safa’s character was really really amazing, the idea of telling the story through them was actually very commendable n due to this many of family scenes were added in the end n i really enjoyed all of their those banters. The part from start to end was amazingly amazing except for three things; one the transition of scenes n the entry of new character weren’t smooth, it was a little confusing to understand, after reading to a certain extend only could that be understood....two not introducing the new characters before, that is Ryah’s sister (although she was mentioned earlier, but her name wasn’t) n Shehryaar’s best friend and some grammatical errors. But one thing was really commendable and appreciatable, the addition of the royal language.....that idea was amazing coz it gave a new light to the story and it was way easier to picture the story which made reading a lot more enjoyable. Hats off guys....

7 riddle in our love story

Part 6

Absolutely amazing one. I m so in love with this story. The way this riddle was solved was absolutely mind blowing. Kudos to the entire team for coming up with such a brilliant answer to this riddle. The starting scene of Sanskar n Raghav was very well described; Sanskar’s love for Ragini and concern for Madhav was properly explained and then Raghav’s concern and love for his sister too. I just felt that a little more description on Sanskar’s body language at that point would have made the scene a little more conveyable. RagSan moment was perfect, though a little more description on their feelings and emotions would have been nice, but still i loved that scene. The mystery level is really being kept up. From the point that particular daasi was introduced, i knew she or maybe he was bad news and at the end it turned out to be that only. There was a pinch of humour in this part, good improvement guys. Really loved the second half of this part. Descriptions of the feelings of Ragini’s brothers and Shekhar’s towards Sanskar was up to the point. But a little more working on Sanskar and Ragini’s feelings and emotions is needed. Rest all are good.

Part 7 (last part)

A fantabulous one. I really loved the ending, a great ending to such a wonderful story. All the answers to the riddles were amazing n some were out of the box ones. The inclusion of three more riddles from Sanskar’s side was really a good idea and it was very well executed. Really loved all of the RagSan moments. In this part, there were many humorous scenes, but only some of them were properly conveyed and were humorous; many parts in this chappy actually had the humour that i had been looking for from the start of the story (didn’t mean humour wasn’t there until part 7, it was there but only in one or two parts and in the rest parts it wasn’t properly executed, hence not properly conveyed). Enjoyed reading the banter of Ishaan and Naman. A little more description on the wedding ceremony would have been good and also about Sanskar’s parents. There were some scenes in this without which the part could do and some scenes were there which was needed to be included. In this a major exploration scene on Ragini’s character was there which was missing in the previous ones, except for one or two. Really appreciating the team for that scene. A little more descriptions on the feelings of both Sanskar and Ragini would have been really good. Except for humour and a little on Ragini’s character exploration, all the other criterias were taken care off. 

Encounters of fate

Part 6 (The Conclusion)

I m lacking words to explain how amazing this part was. From start to end it was simply mind blowing. The starting with the action and thriller part, that was absolutely superb and very well described. The twist of bringing in Suresh’s character was really a good idea, one i wasn’t expecting. Finally, General Hamill went down, but there was a slight lack of the feeling of terror from Hamill side and if Prof.Iqbal’s pov at that point while he was going to kill Hamill was given, then the scene would have been a little more highlighted. But nevertheless, it was amazingly penned down. Gayatri n Dave’s scene (while returning back to the hostel) was so beautifully penned down, the emotions and feelings in that scene were upto the point and were absolutely beautiful, i could actually feel it and it was so serene. The scene where Gayatri read her Jiji’s letter to the painful scene at the canteen, i felt there was an incompleteness of emotions, that painful feeling they are going through was not very well conveyed. I m not saying that it wasn’t completely there, it was there but wasn’t upto the point. But the small scene that followed this one, the scene at the corridor where she indirectly confesses her feelings to him was so serene. At the point where finally Gayatri leaves the college and at that time both of their feelings, especially Dave’s feelings was absolutely amazingly penned down, there that painful feel n emotions were upto the mark and maybe even beyond. The village scene was good but wht abt Gayatri’s family, that was a question lingering in my mind. The last scene, the very last one of the entire part was absolutely amazing n beautiful. I was smiling so wide at that point that my cheeks were hurting, that particular scene was absolutely beautifully penned down and shaped up.  Except for some minute errors here n there (which i had mentioned), kudos to the writer for moulding up the part so beautifully.

Epilogue 

I m speechless again. What a wonderful ending to such a beautiful story. The idea of showing them in their 80’s n 90’s and then they going down the memory lane was absolutely an amazing idea. I especially loved the scene of Gayatri proposing Dave and his reaction n all those scenes which they once again live through, their first night (I literally had goosebumps at that point), him teaching the billage children english (that was a beautiful scene and it was amazingly portrayed, it really did warm my heart) and all the other scenes. All the emotions and feelings were up to mark as well as all the descriptions were perfect in this part. I just felt that if u guys would have mentioned abt what happened to Shraddha’s mother that is Gayatri’s daughter, it would have been good. Mainly coz it was repeatedly mentioned like how Shraddha is following the steps of her mother and her grandmother, how she is very much similar to them and all....so i was really thinking abt where her mother is, is she alive or passed due to cholera or something, coz of the fact that it was a main part of the story....so was just curious abt that. The ending was an amazing one, 15th August, the date every Indian feels proud of, the date which we are gonna have soon, in just a couple of days...the idea of including that was brilliant. The feeling of Patriotism, the feeling of women empowerment, the feeling of endless and everlasting love, determination, ambition...each and everything was beautifully portrayed in this entire story and especially in this part. Kudos to the writer for moulding up the epilogue in such an amazing way and a huge hats off to the entire team for moulding this plot in such a beautiful and amazing way.

Judge 1

Melody of two hearts

REVIEW Of PROLOGUE: Written by sonali112 & Priyanka011

The prologue gives us an interesting insight into the story of King Sanskar and his abductee, Swara, whom he had fallen hopelessly in love with.

Nicely written. Good description and awesome writing style. Superbly done @sonali112 and @Priyanka001!

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REVIEW OF PART TWO: Written by Sweet_Crazy_Divine

Shot Two goes into flashback mode, where we are taken into the lives of Sanskar and Swara, before his abduction of her.

Swara is adjusting to life with Veer and slowly accepting her duties as a Queen...while Sanskar on the other side is regarded as a curse even by his own father and King.

Sanskar no longer regards himself as a Prince but a common shepard.  Sanskar forgets and refers to himself as Prince, making us realise that he misses being one. Sanskar and Sameer's friendship is adorable.

Six months later Swara has gotten a little more comfortable in her roles as wife, while her husband, Veer, has managed to change in a positive way since his marriage to Swara. It seems like Swara has to compromise a lot in this marriage. 

A puja is held to bless the Kingdom of Agniprasht. Sameer and Sanskar wander there and hear Swara's melodious voice. Sanskar longs to see the face that can sing in such a pleasing way and finally catches a glimpse of her. He is floored by her beauty and can't seem to stop thinking of her. He confesses to his friend that he loves Swara. Sameer sees Sanskar's possessive side coming out and the untold curse coming true.

I'm really curious to find out more about this curse! Very intriguing! Well written, descriptive and story progression is excellent. Scenes and dialogues are good, as well as the character chemistry. Awesome writing @Sweet_Crazy_Divine!

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We are still into flashback mode where Sanskar is unable to forget Swara and wants her at any cost! Sameer tries his best to save Sanskar from the curse that was given by the Goddess of Revenge, Nemesis, but Sanskar was adamant.

The two come up with a plan and kidnap Swara from her palace.

We return to present day where Swara is broken being separated from Sanskar. She is reminded of his death, which is hard for her to digest. Veer thinks that his wife is in trauma because Sanskar kidnapped his wife.

We go into the past once again where King Veer sends his brother, Rudra, to lead the soldiers into Rajgad.

Awesome shot. Nice, clean descriptions and dialogues. Scenes were good. Well written. Excellent work @Priyanka011!

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REVIEW OF PART FOUR: Written by sonali112

The Flashback continues with Sanskar being scolded by his father for kidnapping Swara. They try to find a way to diffuse the situation...even going to the extent of bargaining Swara, but Sanskar refuses to give her up! Eventually his father supports him.

We go over to Swara who has just realised that shes been kidnapped and gets scared. She wants to go to her husband, while he confesses his love and assures her that she is safe. All her attempts to escape were in vain and slowly she begins to like Sanskar.

Present day, a drunk Veer goes to spend time with his wife but she sees Sanskar and only feels her love for him.

Veer again thinks his wife is still in trauma and vows to try his best to make her forget him.

 Awesome shot! Swara and Sanskar's thoughts and emotions were on point. Great scenes and excellent description and character chemistry. Dialogues were good. Well done @sonali112!

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REVIEW OF PART FIVE: Written by alina_1502

Swara misses her love, Sanskar and reminisces once again.

All were celebrating as Sanskar had won the war against Agniprasht and we are treated to cute and emotional moments between Swara and Sanskar.

I love that this shot focused mostly on Swara and Sanskar. The amazing descriptions and dialogues give us accurate insight to their love and emotional turmoil. It was truly heart-breaking! Awesome writing! Loved it! Well done @alina_1502!

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REVIEW OF PART SIX: Written by Angelic_Firefly

King Veer attacks Rajgad and reclaims his wife. Sanskar is supposedly killed in a bomb blast.  Swara has trouble getting over Sanskar. The depiction of Swara's love and pain was thoroughly awesome!

Sanskar is alive! This was the highlight of the shot for me. Was patiently awaiting his return. He is heartbroken that Swara has moved on with Veer and has become a poor former shell of himself.

Superbly written. Scenes and Descriptions were fantastic! Thoroughly enjoyed it! Excellent work @Angeli_Firefly!

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REVIEW OF EPILOGUE: Written by Black_Ice_Blazzers

Now this is what I call a love triangle! What an ending! It was just...wow! Veer finally realizes his wife was not in trauma, but in love! Sanskar’s scene with his dad was really emotional. Swara and Sanskar’s first and last kiss was so cute and heart-breaking at the same time. Absolutely mind-blowing shot. The depiction of these characters in this last installment was really really superb! Excellent writing team! Thanks for almost making me cry lol.

All the best!

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7 riddle in our love story

REVIEW OF PART TWO: Written by suma007

In the second shot, Sanskar has a new competitor in the race for Ragini's affections. Vikram Chalukya, is a ruthless man who is feared by his Kingdom. Vikram decides to enter the competition to win Ragini.

The second riddle, which is my favorite, "Do good and cast it into water" is read by Prince Naman and again funny, nonsense answers are produced. Vikram gives his reply, which to me doesn't really answer the question. He stages a drama with some goons and pretends to save Ragini. Sanskar witnesses the entire plan. Vikram wins the second round of the competition, only to have Ragini's Daasi come in and explain the truth about Sanksar saving Ragini and her son from the lion etc. and this riddle round ends in a tie with both Sanskar and Vikram as the winners.

Nice chapter. Cute Ragini and Sanskar scenes. Good depiction of Vikram determination to have Ragini. Writing style...scenes and dialogues were ok as well as description. Nice job @Suma007!

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REVIEW OF PART THREE: Written by Iti_Myrah

In this chapter, a drunk Vikram tries to force himself on Ragini, who just went there to pick a special flower for her love, Sanskaar. She struggles and tries to escape from him but couldn't. Soon Sanskar comes to her rescue followed by her seven brothers, beating Vikram to a pulp.

Court is in session the next day and the third riddle is read by Prince Inder: "As you sow, so you shall reap."  Prince Sanskar answered correctly using Vikram's deed as an example. Vikram is put behind bars. Ragini waits for Sanskar in her room, but when Sanskar arrives, he finds her asleep. He speaks to her sleeping form, leaves a rose for her and goes.

Vikram takes revenge on Sanskar by attacking Madhav.

Eagerly awaiting the next one!

Nice shot. Clean description, good writing skills. Scenes and character chemistry were superb. Nice story depiction and progression. Dialogues were good. Well done @Iti_Myrah!

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REVIEW OF PART FOUR: Written by TAHA2020

Vikram has escaped! Sanskar impresses Ragini's brother with the love he has for his minister Madhav. Ragini misses Sanskar wondering why he hasn't cime to see her, but then notices the flowers in her room. Lost in Sanskar's thoughts, Ragini utters his name which is heard by her brother who teases her about it.

As Sanskar visits Madhav, he finds someone spying on them and runs after him.

In the Royal Court the fourth riddle is presented: "He who speaks the truth is always at peace." After hearing some silly answers, the court proceedings are disrupted by a man seeking forgiveness for helping Vikram to escape for wealth. When asked by Prince Naman why he came here instead of running away, the man replies that it was Prince Sanskar who told him that if he never told the truth then he would not be able to live in peace. Sanskar enters and is declared as the winner in the fourth round.

Ragini sneaks into Sanskar's room and the two have a cute conversation. Garv, Naman and Ishan go to visit Sanskar. Ragini hides behind the pillar, but Naman and Ishan spots her and tries to hustle Garv away before he sees her.

Vikram is intent on killing Sanskar and gaining Ragini...

Good chapter. Story progression is nice, as are the character chemistry, scenes and dialogues. Nicely written @TAHA2020!

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REVIEW OF PART FIVE: Written by EverythingForAllah

Sanskar falls even more in love with Ragini when he witnesses her love and kindness toward her Daasi.

Story shifts to the fifth day of the Royal Court. Ragini enters and trips. Her brothers blame from the floor... to the dress...to the designer...everything except clumsy Ragini who was staring at her Sanskar. They take her away from Court. That scene was so funny!

The fifth riddle is presented by Prince Arjun: "Let Him Bring An Account of The Talking Mountain Nida." This riddle requires the Princes to actually go to Mount Nida and find the answers. Nice description of Mount Nida. While some had a hard time, Sanskar's determination helped him through his journey.

He solves the puzzle and returns to the Court, where is he named winner of the fifth round.

Sanskar does not return alone, but brings a surprise for Prince Arjun....his wife Avantika. Wow!

All are happy to see her and we get a background story into what happened between her and Arjun.

Prince Sanskar saved her and brought her back here and we are treated to another cute moment between Sanskaar and Ragini.

A celebration is held for the Prince and Avantika. A arrow is shot but Sanskaar manages to catch it. Sanskar is like a superhero in this story!

Another arrow is shot and it hits a soldier. Vikram Chalukaya had returned....

Nice shot full of exciting scenes. Descriptions could have been clearer, but it wasn't that bad. Character chemistry, scenes, dialogues, writing styles were good. Well done @EverythingForAllah!

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REVIEW OF PART SIX: Written by Diksha_Chaudhary

Sanskar remembers what Vikram did to his love Ragini and his friend Madhav and becomes enraged. Prince Raghav comes to him and Sanskar almost refers to Ragini as 'My Ragini' but Prince Raghav knew what he was about to say. Prince Raghav and the rest of his brothers are already impressed by Sanskaar and wants him to marry their sister. But there were two more riddles left...

Ragini goes to see Sanskar and is in tears at his condition. She hugs him while Sanskar assures her that he is fine. Such a cute and romantic moment! Good description of scene. Again Sanskar is being followed.

Ragini finds a letter and is scared. A daasi informs that Ragini will not come to court, but then she shows up saying she is fine.

Prince Raghav reads the sixth riddle: "What is the Mystery of the Pearl of the Size of A Duck's Egg?" Prince Raghav gave a hint, stating that the one who has the solution to the five problems before will be able to solve this riddle. While everyone was confused and spouting crazy answers, Sanskar's brain was working overtime to figure it out. Finally Sanskar get up and goes to the pearl and calls out all the answers/lessons to each of the previous riddles:  True Love, Kindness, Karma, Truth and Courage...with the final answer/test being Intelligence. Again Sanskar wins the sixth round with one more to go.

The part ends with Sanskar noticing a daasi with apparently evil intentions going toward Ragini.

Nice shot full of full of suspense and mystery. Ragini and Sanskar are too cute in this story. Love it! Scenes were great. Dialogues, description, writing style etc. were ok. Nice job @Diksha_Chaudhury!

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REVIEW OF PART SEVEN: Written by aliya598

The final shot in this story sees the return of that evil villain Vickram, who has held Ragini hostage, a knife at her throat! Vikram is soon killed by none other than his father who is tired of his wicked deeds.

Suryanand asks for forgiveness and it is revealed that he came here on Sanskar's insistence. Suryanand and team leave from there with Vikram's body.

Shekhar thinks that even before he read the riddle, Sanskar has already answered it!

We get another cute Sanskar and Ragini moment and a flashback into what really happened between Ragini and that Daasi and how the Prince of Yemen rescued Avantika.  

Finally, the day of the seventh riddle and Ragini's engagement came. It was King Shekhar's turn and he presented a two answer riddle: "Does only what is written in fate happen... or can a human being change his destiny through hard work, courage and strength?" Before Sanskar can present a reply, he is constantly interrupted.

All are given a challenge to try to tame a crazy horse, but none can manage it...except for Sanskar, with a little help from his friend Madhav. They are shocked when he manages to calm the horse down. But not me...I knew he could do it!

The final challenge is a sword fight between Ragini's father and Sanskar. After a bit of a struggle, Shekhar announces that Sanskar has won the fight...and Ragini's hand in marriage. Sanskar and Ragini are engaged!

The wedding day approaches and Sanskar has three riddles of his own for Ragini! She goes all over searching for answers!

Ragini shares a beautiful father-daughter moment with her dad and visits a lovely couple, whom she addresses as mother and father. Sanskar follows her and is even more enamoured with his soon to be bride.

Finally the two get married and Ragini heads to her new home, Yemen, with her Prince. A year later she gives birth to a baby girl who was named SanGini...after her parents.

Lovely story. Nice scenes...descriptions could have been clearer, but it was good. Writing style was ok and dialogues were good.  Character chemistry was on point as usual. Nice job @aliya598!

All the best team!

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Love:a heal to everything
REVIEW OF PART THREE: Written by ZeeSiddharthSlathia

In shot three, we are introduced to the love interests of Laksh and Swara....and a possible villain.

Swara has started a sewing business to earn more money for her and Laksh.

Sanskar Maheshwari enters to order a gown for his sister, Ragini, and both are instantly smitten with each other. Their cute and clumsy romantic encounter certainly helped lol.

The scene shifts to Laksh who is in the woods working. There he encounters Ragini, who is lost in the woods. He helps her find her way and both introduce themselves.

Over the next few days, Sanskar and Swara...and Laksh and Ragini grow closer to each other.

Sanskar drowns in quicksand and is saved by Swara which prompts the two to confess their love for each other.

The shot ends with an attack attempt being made on Sanskar and Swara. They go from there, leaving Swara to wonder who would do such a thing and why?

Nice chapter. Finally we meet the other halves of our leads and their story proves to be very interesting... especially with someone out to get them. 

Good description...Dialogues were ok...Awesome scenes and chemistry between characters. Nice writing skills! Well done @ZeeSiddharthSlathia!

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REVIEW OF PART FOUR: Written by Vaanii_Maheshwari

Swara and Sanskar spend some romantic moments together and we are introduced to Sahil the Psycho who wants to get rid of Sanskar!

Very interesting! I'm guessing he wants Swara.

Good description and dialogues. Awesome scenes and chemistry between Swara and Sanskar and nice intro into the villain! Great writing skills! Well done @Vaanii_Maheshwari!

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REVIEW OF PART FIVE: Written by Vaanii_Maheshwari

Laksh admits to Swara that he and Ragini are in love and he has proposed to her. Swara is extremely happy for them. Both talk about how lucky in love they are.

The scene shifts to Sahil the psycho(I love calling him that!), who apparently likes engaging in self harm. Sahil was in love with Swara for over twelve years. His love has turned into an obsession and he can't stand to see her with Sanskar. We get a little flashback into his history with Swara and Laksh.

His brother, Aditya, advises him to forget her, but being totally insane, I don't think we can expect that to happen. We learn that the attack on Swara and Sanskar was made by him. Aditya comes up with a plan for his brother, hoping to finally get rid of Sahil's crazy avatar.

Sanskar finds a threatening letter addressed to him asking him to meet them.

Nice shot. Very interesting. I like Sahil's psycho avatar. He's different from the usual crazy. Good description, dialogues and scenes. Writing style is super! Well done @Vanii_Maheshwari!

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REVIEW OF PART SIX: Written by ?

In this final installment of Love: A Heal To Everything, Sanskar realizes he and Swara are in danger after reading the letter and vows to keep Swara safe.

Sanskar goes to meet Sahil, who turns out to be the Mafia Lord of the Village! Well... we think he's the Mafia Lord...not too sure yet. The two have a war of words...which turns into physical violence when Swara shows up and slaps Sahil on the cheek.

Sahil's crazy makes another appearance which shocks Sanskar and Swara and both run off holding each other's hand, but Sahil stops them and challenges Sanskar to a horse riding competition. Sanskar accepts against Swara's advices.

The game begins and Sanskar falls and is injured thanks to Sahil's dirty tricks. But soon he gets up and manages to beat Sahil across the finish line, effectively winning the race!

Sanskar goes to Swara and the two have a cute moment...just before psycho Sahil tries to stab him. This dude does not give up! Sahil mis-balances, but is saved in time by Sanskar and Sahil begins to regret his actions. He apologizes to Swara and Sanskar and they forgive him.

Our story comes to an end with Sanskar and Swara getting married, while Laksh proposes to Ragini.... with a cactus. Too funny!

Nice final shot! Description and dialogues were ok. Scenes and chemistry between Swara and Sanskar! Battle between Sahil and Sanskaar was good. Good writing skills! The author of this part was not mentioned, but judging by the team list, I'm guessing it's Anushika? Please correct me if I'm wrong.

All the best team!

Moujuza e uns

REVIEW OF PART SIX: Written by nidz_055

The final shot takes us into the desert where a pregnant Ryah is being held by Shah Zaman. Wait....weren't they in the basement? How did they get to the desert? When did she get pregnant?

The story shifts to cute little Prince Shaad who is just as confused as we are. It seems that Genie had skipped ahead.

A cute little Princess enters the scene and she is not happy to have missed more than half the story! She wants to hear the story from the beginning, but Shaad wants to get to the ending first! She agrees.

The Genie, who is clearly scared of the little Princess, flips back the pages to where we left off in the last chapter. This scene is so wonderfully cute and funny.

Our story goes back a year, to the basement, where Shah Zaman has Ryah. As he was about to behead her, our hero enters and saves his damsel in distress. He banishes Shah Zaman from the Kingdom and the two finally confess their love and get re-married.

A new change came about in the kingdom and its King and all were happy....all because of an extremely intelligent girl named Ryah.

Story takes a one yeap where Ryah is pregnant. While she is out, Shah Zaman reappears and kidnaps the poor girl. She is saved by her husband yet again.

Time goes by and Ryah goes into labour. She gives birth to a baby boy. Shehyraar enquires about Rayah and is informed that she has lost alot of blood and Shehryaar rushes to her.

The story is interrupted yet again as Shaad's little fingers couldn't turn the heavy page and he is scolded by the Princess Safa. We find out that she is the daughter of Shaad's Uncle, Amar. Soo...who is Shaad? Shehryaar enters and has a cute coversation with Safa, but as soon as her Mumani enters Safa immediately goes to her.

Shaad only wants to know what happens next in the story...if Ryah is ok and doesn't realize she is standing right there. Shaad is the son of Shehyaar and Ryah.

We go back into the story where both mother and baby miraculously survive.

Shaad finally realizes that he was the baby Prince in the story. He blames Safa for getting him the book and the two have a cute spat.

Shehryaar says to Amar that they should get them married. their responses were both cute and funny, Loved it.

The story ends with a flashback into the lives of Shehryaar and Ryah....

Awesome story! Thoroughly entertaining...especially the side scenes with Prince Shaad and his Genie...it was well thought out. Well written...scenes were great... humour was on point. Descriptions...character chemistry etc was good. Dialogues were ok. Well done @nidz_055

All the best team!

Encounters of fate

REVIEW OF PART FIVE:  Written by Angelic_ghoulish

This chapter continues with Dave and Gayatri going undercover to retrieve the formula, but instead of the formula, Gayatri finds Suresh Mhatre, the man who had betrayed his entire team of scientists for money. He had been kidnapped by Hamill. Gayatri frees him and she and Dave take him back with them.

Together with Professor Roy and the assistance of Dave and Gayatri, Mhatre tries to re-create the formula, hoping to atone for his sins.

Dave and Gayatri have a cute moment, where he proposes to yet again! This time Gayatri runs away in shyness. Gayatri dreams of Dave, which makes her realize finally that she's in love with him! She decides to agree to his proposal!

A letter arrives from her sister, informing her of their father's death. Gayatri realizes that her country needs her more than anyone else and decides to suppress her feelings for Dave. She leaves a letter for Dave explaining her situation.

Dave goes to her and explains that he will never let his feelings stand in her way. Gayatri hugs him and apologizes for hurting his feelings.

Mhatre finally re-creates the formula.

Hamill is furious that he was defeated. He was determined to find the culprits and make them pay. A blast occurs and Hamill loses his legs. Iqbal comes and chokes Hamill to death. Finally he can now rest in peace!

All are happy! Gayatri moves outside and Dave follows her. The two share a hug. Dave breaks the hug and goes, leaving Gayatri in tears.

Years pass with Gayatri throwing herself into her work, her heart torn between her country and Dave. Finally Gayatri becomes Dr. Gayatri Joshi and even manages to garner the "Brightest Student Award." With that, Gayatri also managed to fulfill her dream: Injections for curing cholera. She was filled with joy and all she wanted was to see him... and there he was in the crowd, cheering for her success.

Gayatri hoped to meet Dave before she left, but that didn't happen. Dave stood there looking at Gayatri walk away and a pain pierced his soul. The two go their separate ways. Aww so sad... good description of Dave's pain.

Back home, Gayatri again deals with society's sexist views on women. Gayatri's fate was left up to the Sarpanch, who spewed their hateful views on her and decided that she needs to leave the village. Dave shows up with Professor Roy and defends his woman! He takes her back with them, leaving the villagers ashamed. Dave promises Gayatri that they will return.

Three hours later, they arrive back at the Medical College and Dave and Gayatri are left alone. Our story comes to an end with a proposal being made yet again...this time it was by Gayatri!

Awesome story! Superbly written and beautifully explained. Description, dialogues, scenes, character chemistry were on point. Great job @Angelic_ghoulish

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REVIEW OF EPILOGUE: Written by Kakali_SSC

The epilogue takes us far into the future where a ninety-two year-old Dave is reminiscing about his life with his eighty-two year-old soulmate, Gayatri and we are taken back to that special moment where Gayatri had proposed to Dave... who happily accepts!

We return to present day, where Dave is joined by his wife Gayatri and we are treated to a series of flashbacks from their life together...including their wedding night...which is very tastefully written. Good job!

Dave and Gayatri return to their native land on the occasion of its Independence and experience feelings of nostaligia. They are grandly welcomed to the village and are greeted by their grand-daughter, Shraddha, who is Gayatri's exact copy. Special memorials were built to honor the late Professor Roy and all the victims of the Cholera epidemic.

The nation's flag is hoisted at the hospital by Dave and Gayatri and Gayatri delivers a beautiful speech to all there on what Independence really is.

Our story comes to an end with Dave and Gayatri looking at their grand-daughter, Shraddha, who would make sure that her grandmother's legacy lives on.

Beautiful ending to a wonderful story.  As usual, it was superbly written and beautifully explained. Description, dialogues, scenes, character chemistry were perfect! Great job @Kakali_SSC!

All the best Team Arduous Scribblers!

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Love beyond time

REVIEW of PART FIVE: Written by Devihaa_B

This shot takes us into Laksh's point of view. A spoiled rich kid and heartthrob of many who still yearns for his soul-mate.

He describes his encounters with rival-turned- love Ragini and memories from their past life.

The chapter ends with Laksh preparing to propose to Ragini...

Good description. Again, going through and writing thoughts on each scene was superb. Writing style was ok. More emotions and feelings were needed in Laksh's narration but this shot was still nicely written. Well done @Devihaa_B!

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REVIEW OF PART SIX: Written by lali4321

The sixth part deals with Laksh's proposal and hype surrounding the wedding between Laksh and Ragini. The two stories are connected as both past and present Laksh and Ragini are joined forever.

Nice shot. Good scenes, writing style was ok...could have been more descriptive. Thoughts, feelings and emotions were okay. Character chemistry was good. Good job @lali4321!

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REVIEW OF EPILOGUE: Written by Sukorian

The epilogue consists of cute and funny moments between Laksh and Ragini, where they get to re-live the childhood that was spent in hate for each other, with their son, Raksh.

Laksh and Ragini's marriage joined their two families who were once rivals, merging their companies together and naming it after their grandson, Raksh.

The whole family lived happily together with a new addition to the family, Laksh and Ragini's little princess...Lakisha.

Nice ending. Scenes were really cute, writing style was ok, character chemistry was good and dialogues were ok. Nice job @Sukorian!

All the best Team Dreamers!

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REVIEW OF PART THREE: Written by Shanaya777

The story continues with Swara going to the temple and singing Aarti song. She is joined by her husband King Sahil, whom she is surprised to see. Cute interaction between husband and wife.

We head over to the Suryavanshi Empire where King Sanskar is again lost in thoughts of Swara. His so-called need to have her is turning into some kind of crazy obsession. Queen Ragini is worried seeing her husband like this and seeks the help of Queen Kavitaita, who tells her not to worry. When Queen Ragini leaves, Kavitaita's true face comes out and she is not happy! She vows to stop Sanskaar. Again, nice inclusion of his wives.

Sanskaar holds a meeting to discuss plans to invade the Rathore Empire. All were against it, as the Rathore Kingdom takes safeguarding their women very seriously and tries to advise him as such, but what King Sanskar wants...King Sanskaar gets!

A letter is sent to the Rathore Empire via messenger. King Sahil reads it and is furious and all points their sword toward the messenger. Huh! It’s always the messenger that gets in trouble!

Swara stops them and asks what the message contains. King Sahil informs that Sanskaar wants her... otherwise they will attack the Rathore Empire. Angry Swara sends a message back to the Suryavanshi Empire telling them to prepare for war.

The messenger relays this to King Sanskaar and he is livid and prepares his soldiers for war. Again we witness Sanskaar's creepy side, as he makes another plan secretly to conquer the Rathore Empire.

The day of war arrives and Sahil is getting ready. Swara comes to him and does Aarti and applies Tilak, and the two have an emotional goodbye before he leaves.

As he comes out out the room, he starts feeling restless, giddy and begins sweating profusely. Soon he falls down, and with the name of his Queen on his lips, his eyes closed forever. He died?! Without even going to war? This is getting too interesting!

Awesome shot. Nice writing style. Portrayal of Sanskar's obsession was really good. Scenes were satisfactory. Dialogues were good. Descriptions were lacking in certain areas but it was still really good. Well done @Shanaya777!

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REVIEW OF PART FOUR: Written by Divyanshri

Shot Four begins with Swara praying for her husband's safety. She hears a commotion outside and walks out only to learn that her husband is no more. She is shattered. Sanskaar gets word of Sahil's death and goes into creepy mode once again. Going against the norms of society, Swara performs the funeral rites of her husband along with their son.

Sanskaar makes plans to attack Rathore Kingdom once again and Swara decides to lead her Kingdom in the war against the Suryavanshi Empire, who's King has played dirty by poisoning her husband  instead of fighting like true warriors.

Swara is alone and grieving the loss of her husband. Good depiction of Swara's pain. Sanskar goes to meet Swara and again using his evil tricks, blackmails Swara into marrying him.

On their wedding night, Swara attacks her new husband. He overpowers her and tries to consummate their marriage, when Swara informs him of her pregnancy. He leaves from there in anger and spots Swara's son, who wants to fight him for hurting his mother. He tickles Sanskrit making the child laugh and Sanskrit hugs him. Sanskar then decides to use the innocent child for his benefit.

Nice chapter. Good writing skills, scenes and dialogue. More descriptions could have been added. Still a wonderful shot. Good job @Divyanshri!

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REVIEW OF PART FIVE: Written by Swarmayi

The story continues with Swara preparing for Puja in the Palace's Temple. As she closes her eyes in prayer, she hears footsteps and is shocked to see Sanskar standing there, looking at her adoringly. She immediately asks him to leave and he asserts his ownership over the palace, the temple...and her. The two have a verbal spat and he grabs her arm and then releases it, finally giving in to her words. He speaks of his love for her, which makes Swara angry enough to exit the temple, leaving her anklet behind. Sanskar picks it up, vowing to make her his.

Story takes a leap of seven months, where all are in the Royal Court. Sanskar calls Sanskrit who is scared at all looking at him. Sanskar announces that Sanskrit will be with him always at the Royal Court. Really cute interactions between Sanskar and Sanskrit.

Swara and Ragini form a lovely bond, while Kavitaita's hate for Swara keeps increasing. Her actions anger Sanskar so much that her slaps Kavitaita for pulling Swara's hair. This only manages to raise Kavitaita's hate level even more, even though Swara tried to defend her, insulting Sanskar in the process. He follows Swara to the room and kisses her angrily. She asks him not to let her son turn out to be a monster like him. Sanskar says that Sanskrit is his son and heir and will definitely be like him.

The next day, Sanskar stops Swara from applying sindoor and does it himself as it's his right only. The two have a little moment when he tries to make her wear Queen Kavitaita's necklace.

Swara accuses Sanskar of being a coward and killing her husband. Sanskar denies this, leaving us to wonder who really did it.

Lovely shot. Awesome twist. Scenes were good, satisfactory dialogues and descriptions were ok. Awesome chemistry between characters. Nice job @Swarmayi!

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REVIEW OF PART SIX: Written by AngelGoldieReal

The final shot begins with Swara not believing Sanskar's declaration that he didn't kill King Sahil, and it deeply affects him.

A search is done on Swara's room to find whatever proof she has and a Suryavanshi Family Coin is found in her belongings, which the culprit has left behind. Sanskar deduces that someone from their kingdom has murdered King Sahil and sets out to find the culprit.

Sanskar sees Ragini playing with Sankrit on his way to see Swara. She informs him that Swara needs him. Sanskar and Ragini's bonding and chemistry is so cute. Here we get a little insight into Ragini's background.

Sanskar's suspicions fall on Kavitaita and he pretends to be on her side to know if she was indeed the murderer.

Sanskar calls an impromptu meeting in the Royal Court where he reveals that it was Queen Kavitaita who had killed Swara's husband. Kavitaita in anger reveals that her accomplice wasn't supposed to kill King Sahil...but Swara! Awesome twist! This makes Sanskar even angrier and Kavitaita is stripped of her titile and banned from the Kingdom.

Ragini advises a stressed Swara to forget everything and move on in life. Here we get some background info on Swara's life, where she was always considered as a bad omen.

Someone tries to harm Sanskrit, but Swara saves him and gets hurt in the process. Swara suffers a head injury and complications also arise in her pregnancy and Vedji says he can save either the mother or the baby, but not both.

Swara gives birth to baby girl, but things do not look good for her. Both Ragini and Sanskar are in tears. Sanskar begs for her forgiveness but Swara says its of no use now as she is going to her love, Sahil. With her dying breaths, she asks both Sanskar and Ragini to take care of her two kids and raise them to be good human beings and they both accept. Finally Swara takes her last breath... This is so heartbreakingly sad :( 

The story takes us into Ragini's Point Of View, where she describes the events after Swara's death. Swara's demise brought alot of changes, mainly in Sanskar's character. He was now a ruler by heart. He spends time with his Queens and his kids...the apple of his eye being his little Princess, who he named Swara, after her mother. Awww...cute scene with Sanskar and little baby Swara.  

Queen Kavitaita was imprisoned for life for trying to harm Sanskrit, while Sanskrit continues to be the chosen heir of the Suryavanshi Empire. Our story ends with King Sanskar announcing that all girls will get an education and then he makes an exit with his Queens.

Wonderful story! Scenes, characters, character chemistry etc. were superb. Totally suprising end! Wonderfully done @AngelGoldieReal!

All the best Team Dazzling Girls!

Judge 3

Masquerade love
Firstly this story was started with a beautiful introduction of the kingdom . They even showed few scenes of how was sanskar with his wives and family which was a good thought . It even showed Swara and sahil moments and Swara with it's son . It even clearly showed sanskar obsession for Swara through various scene . Altogether it described the whole story very brilliantly . It didn't let us bored at any moment . The most important thing is they didn't drag any scene nor did they just speeded and moment. The ending was also quiet good with Swara dead . Which was quite unexpected . This plot was also having a wonderful moral that obsession will lead to ur own destruction which is sooo true . But still some where I thought they could show some past scene of Swara and sahil . They could have showen how they fall in love when and where . Tho they were not lead but still somewhere that was lagging out . But still leaving behind few look holes the story was described in a pretty good way . I personally felt they could at least introduce the remaining wives of sanskar. As I said leaving a few things this story was really a good one

Judge 4

7 Riddles in story It was a nice start guys. Though I felt a prologue or description is must which wasn't appropriate in your story. The way you showed Riddles was impressive. Main point which lacked in your story was humor. It was main point given to you. Though you guys tried a lot still it lacked somewhere. It was last part only which contained humor. Lastly, guys try to improve your grammar and sentence construction. The main thing which kept us hooked was Riddles and leads hidden romance.

Masquerade tale Beautiful start... First part explained every character almost. The way you portrayed the emotions was good... Sanskar's obsession and swara's purity. Still an essence of grammar is needed... Specially last part punctuation problem also. Guys try to work on it. The best part of your story was ending a proper and beautiful needed ending.

Love a heal to everything A great starting with beautiful scene description. Prologue given was a nice try still can be improved. A simple fairy tale with great sibling bond. Though, I felt Sahil's part was lacking something or rushed. In ending part the thing I liked most was raglak proposal. As given point villian with past connection and a big reason I felt a better reason could be there. The strong point of your story was scene description and simple still beautiful story. You guys carried it out beautifully

Melody of two hearts Firstly, amazing cover guys. Goes so well with your story and title a beautiful one. An attractive one... It held a charm a title should. Prologue was really attractive one and with great continuation. The flow of story was nice. The way swasan scenes were described was bliss. Specially the end scene heart touching one. A great story by you guys.

Encounters of fate Mind blowing cover with superb description. That's what attracted me towards your story. Starting with chapters I can say beautifully written and time period chosen was good one. The fluency and cliffhangers really kept me excited. The best use of horror plot... Truely saying I didn't expected such a good use of that prop. You guys really did really well. You guys really rocked it

Love beyond time It was nice reading your story guys. You guys really tried well. Starting from cover it was nice still somewhere it felt like simple edited collage. Introduction given was nice. It gave well start to your story. Still guys I need to mention you need to focus on many things guys starting with grammar to sentence construction. These are important to maintain fluency of story and to hook up interest of readers. Climax was well and full of action as demand of plot rules. Your story lost its charm after that only. The pov chapter added just was nothing but again and again narrating whole story. It could be carried on with more better way. Epilogue was nice... The ending and last phase of story a happy ending was beautiful. Overall, nice try but can be improved.