Note:as we already mentioned this competition was arranged by one of the freakss.. Who is active in this but never came up to judging or something..
This time neither of other freakss judged os's.
Because we hand overed this to her
Because she is an judgemental person bit straight forward away from freak and to tell you she is an article writer in one of a magazine and also she has written stories if everything goes straight she would soon be known as an author and was also script writer for plays at the age of 13
So why we gave description is we never want to say low!!but this time if you feel the reviews were too strong then please don't mind it..intention is not to hurt you!

So today she finished reading 3 stories.. And one story review is here!!

Faasle-The distances
By GS_Stella

-First thing.. It's about plot..
It's just 'wow' that you took a story from a widows life
And the harsh reality,you have shown it beautifully
Her parent's disowned her for the sake of other 2 daughter's life
And entry of an Angel i. e.. Mr Maheshwari
Till you mentioned her dead husband was Sanskar,i thought Mr Maheshwari to be Sanskar but the fact was he is Sahil
And Swara's letter to her unborn child was so heart touching

-Character exploration
swara's character was Amazing!!! Showed the truth
Even Sahil and kavitha's character were also explored brilliantly
But somewhere Sanskar's character exploration was lacking a bit

-description of the scene
Description was brilliant to whatever the scene you have written
But.. But still expected some scenes like some more scene's of sanskar
You have shown their first night after the marriage where sanskar found to be understanding but description was also lacking here and there was no sight of his family, which we felt the main reason of incompleteness and also just mentioned it was an accident.. Would have said perfect to the description but couldn't because extremely felt here it was incomplete

-descriptive thought's
This was brilliant.. No words to explain it all
Either it would be Swara in vidwa aashram or in the day's with sanskar and when Sanskar's death news arrived her everything was just excellent se upar wala excellent
And main thing was words which is mentioned for her unborn child mahi later named amaya by Sahil and kavitha

-dialogue delivery
Except the words for unborn child.. And few other scene's between sahil and Swara
There was nothing special like it's said excellent!
Still it was very good
But it could be excellent if you had tried some impressive dialogues because your plot had the chances!!

-Introduction
It was quite good

-ending
This part was extraordinary..
This had some unexpected things!

-Title
It was good..
Suited the story

-cover
Extraordinarily beautiful!!

All in all
Amazing job!! And all the best saw the reviews of 2 judges about your one shot but my review would be different from them! Because i don't agree with them!!

Sorry if you are hurt by my review as my own friend's said it was too strict, they forced me to give review and i gave what i felt,you may agree to it too and also my friends mentioned your os was one of the best os, may be best among all other as i haven't go through all one shots and i am not fond of shows but books! And this competition fully not arranged by me my friends are lying 'Fara' was the main key they just trapped me!

If you didn't add the last line then see....
-Shruthi