Melody of two hearts

This is an exciting plot...
And guys you did a great job!we would appreciate your skills of writing

First part

You created a mystery of the Rajgad war... Nice!

Yes you have up to the character of Swara which we expected..
That's the great thing!

And veer's character was also shaping to the expectations

The descriptive thoughts were Amazing!
All in all it was nice!!!

Second part

It was an amazing part..

With sanskar and sameer's coversation

And also we get to know that sanskar is disowned by his father

And descriptive thoughts were really good..
Description of scenes mainly the descripto of swara was excellent

But.. But.. We expected bit more intense when sanskar encounters swara! Like we felt bit common while reading it! Description was nice but didn't felt the intense

Except that it was all good!

Third part

Hmm.. Very good scenes between veer and Swara
And Sanskar's plans which running in the mind what it could be?
And ya curse part was also introduced.. Which is interesting
Swara is kidnapped hmm interesting... And waiting for Sanskar's love for her

Entry of Rudra made it more thrilling

Description of scene's were nice!

Fourth part

This part was excellent in all scenes

Described it very well.. If it's thoughts or a scenes everything was good at it's place

Sanskar's nature was nice even if he kidnapped swara his each and every thoughts we felt 'wow'
This exploration we were searching in character!
Nice!

Fifth part

This part was nice with cute moments..
But felt some incompleteness
Wanted few more scenes. It was described in a paragraph but still...

And the dialogue delivery was really really and really good.. Felt the dialogues ringing in ears!
A great dialogue delivery

Sixth Part

This was an excellent part with Swara's confession
And Sanskar's POV added lime light to it
And veer's try to make swara comfortable was also nice
And the burned kingdom.. Hmm can't say word until we read the final part

Epilogue

This was nice....
Required points are been used very well
The beautiful heart wrenching scenes are shown between swasan
It was so beautiful.. There's no words to describe it
The beautiful dialogues
And you have managed the story brilliantly

But still there was some lack of scenes
Every parts was nice
But we felt was 3rd 4th 6th and epilogue were the light of this story!
Met the expectations but if still there was some scenes chaar chaand lag jaate!

Great job!
And All the best!

7 Riddles In Our Love Story

First part

Before telling about this story..
Want to confess this is bit tough plot which we felt!

But you people did a great job by riddles used in love story

The thing was lacking was description of scenes and thoughts and proper introduction of leads!

Dialogue's were really awesome...

And the names idea of Ragini's brothers was also amazing

Second part

Amazing introduction of villain

And good description of scenes

And also good dialogue delivery

And riddles answer was nice and unexpected winning of sanskar was also good.. Even after losing still he won!

But lack of humours and no description of lead characters

Third part

Thrilling!!!came in mind and ya also bit unexpected thing too happened vikram got caught red handed this soon!
Excellent description of scene and thoughts
Also good dialogue delivery
And attack on madhav was also thrilling
But still it had some incompleteness there was no much humour or the scenes which we expected! And also character exploration of Ragini!

Fourth part

Aha!! This part got what we were searching for!! Humour

And loved every scenes and description was nice

Fifth part

Mixture of every emotions
Nice..
Beautifully penned down every scenes and description
And an unexpected new entry!

One thing to clarify is Moutain Nida..how did sanskar got the answer which is still confusing!!

Sixth part

Excellent humour
With good description of scenes
And the beautiful answer for the riddle!
Each part, each riddle was getting interesting
And this answer was awesome

7th part

Excellent humour
Excellent description of scenes and thoughts
And also very good dialogue delivery
Here we also found the character exploration of Ragini which we were searching from start

And the new 3 riddles was good
And the 2 riddles we our self searched for answer.. But we couldn't get the answer.. Here we found humour in our self.. Haha

And yup the story with positive thought..
After the 4th part it was amazing!
But 6th and 7th part was up to mark!
Required plots were used lately!
Didn't meet the expectations!

Love:A heal to every thing
First part

Hansel and Gretel who didn't like this story in childhood!!

Very beautifully described the part
With good character exploration of siblings Swara and laksh!
Their earlier life was also amazing!
Sibling bond were shown beautifully
Excellent description of scenes!
Good job!

Second part

First of all good descriptions

Still confused how Swara and Laksh managed to live!
Waiting for further parts!

And swara's emotions were shown beautifull
Waiting for laksh's thought about this!
Nice!

Third part

Excellent!!!
Beautiful description of scenes
Humour was lacking till now and this part had some sort of it!
Good dialogue deliver
This part was amazing.. Good introduction of Sanskar
And it was rush confession but it's ok as the plot asks for it as you have to write about villain too
And waiting to know what our Hansel and Gretel aka laksh and swara tackle the villain
And how Raglak would fall in love!!
Great job

Fourth part

First of all it's amazing... Good dialogues
And excellent introduction of villain
But still what confusing us is aren't the villain going to approach swalak but here its swasan
The required plot!

Hmm should read further parts. To tackle the confusion!

Fifth part

Descriptions were good and amazing!
But the required plot doesn't match!
Dialogue's were also good!
Swara and Laksh's story turning to Swara and Sanskar
A strong villain in Hansel and Gretel life was required!
Here Hansel's life also isn't given much importance!

Sixth part

Here  expected Laksh's part..
Seriously.. Didn't felt It was an Hansel and Gretel
In this Hansel aka Laksh was more like a supporting character
Until part 3 it was good... There was no point of required points in your story
Didn't meet the expectation.
Proposing with cactus was different.. Haha

Anyways still story was good..

First 3 parts are good!
Later on you know the rest!

Moujuza-e-uns

First part
Little shaad was most adorable
And this twist in the story was Amazing
The lime light in the story was the dialogues... absolutely brilliant!
Kudos to the writer
And a great start!
Great job!

Second part

Amazing!!!
Used the arabian night story in the narration Ryah
It was great
Beautiful description.. Was lost in reading!
And dialogues were as usual excellent.. The feel of reading arabian nights is awake!

Third part

Now the real story starts!
Aha.. Amazing
Good dialogue delivery
With amazing description
And nice ending of the narration of Ryah
Great job author

Fourth

Everything were on point
Shahryar's feelings were described beautifully amazing
Zarthasha's betrayal scene were also amazing!
Description were excellent!
And dialogue delivery was also good

Fifth

Separation track were also introduced amazing
And shahzaman's entry was also very good
And descriptions were on point
Dialogue's were really good!

Sixth writer

Expected bit action but it was good Shahryar changed!
And again shaad.. He was so cute
Confused with new characters!
Here you didn't explored the new characters
And shaad and safa was really amazing
Shaad was the lime light of the story

We met the expectations but some description and exploration were need
You have used every required things in your story.. amazing!

Almost enjoyed every parts 2 to 5 the chapters were really excellent other chapters had little incompleteness!

Finished reading 4 stories.. The other 3 reviews would be given tomorrow after reading! 😉