Book: Rise of rebellion 

Author: Yanzieyy

Genre: Fantasy, Adventure

COVER

I am a big fan of the cover, the creator of this cover is indeed talented and their work is mind blowing. Can you tell me who made the current cover? Or did you make it, if so you should start your own shop!

BLURB

The blurb was just right, quick and snappy, but at the same time had me diving right into the story. A bit of advise for you is to add a bit more information into it. 

LANGUAGE

On the whole, your language choices were superb. Very detailed, entertaining and enjoyable. Your writing was impeccable <33

FIRST CHAPTER

You first chapter was amazing, I loved it how you kept the person's name a big secret. Your writing brought the writing to life and allowed me to paint a picture in my mind.  The headless 'dude' as I like to call it, had me intrigued. I wanted to find out his motives so madly that it kept me reading. I also loved the ending sentence for that chapter. 

GRAMMAR 

Overall it was really good. However I did spot one, but I'm not sure if it's a mistake or it's meant to be like that.

Original: I can effortlessly access your mind than taking another step,"  he said. 

Edited: I can effortlessly access your mind," taking another step he said.

OVERALL

I loved the entire concept of this story, it was unique something I have never seen on Wattpad. Those tiny aesthetics and round circles (what is it called again?) got me exited since I had never seen them before. This was an good and successful piece and also a must read for anyone who likes Fantasy stories with plenty of turns and twists.