sparkle123tt's Mlp oc



Name: Lilyglow

Type: unicorn

Colors: white fur, light pink mane, yellow eyes

Cutiemark+ looks: http://pic-collage.com/_9L6D9knN

Backstory: lily glow is a sweet kind pony. She has healing magic and cares for people. However she is very shy. She moved to ponyville after the defeat of starlight glimmer. She befriends fluttershy then discord, starlight, and very soon after the rest of the main six.


Thoughts: Well, I must say, I love the design of Lily glow!  Its really fun and cute. The colors are also pleasing to eye! I also love the name and cutie mark. There is something I want to say though, having direct relations with main characters is a trait of a mary sue. It is inevitable that she is friends with Pinkie, because she is friends with everybody. I would suggest either make her friends with a very minor character or make another character for her to be friends with. Also, I would also suggest you add more to her personality other than just being shy. Maybe she's shy but is trying top break out of her shell when she moves to ponyville. Other than that, though, you're oc is pretty good!

Rating 5 1/2 / 10

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