mlp oc

Name: Breakneck Vanner

Personality: Strong willed, Head strong, demands authority where ever she go's, caring, quick thinking, gentle.

Looks: (Based off a Jypsy 'Vanner' horse breed) Brown and white paint with white as the base with brown, blue eyes, layered mane and tail bottom layer black top layer brown. Also has white feathers, with a again brown and black straight tail.

Race: Earth Pony

Cutie Mark: Blue wind representing the wind behind her has she runs.

Talent: Fast Endurance Running

Back story: Got her love for running from her dad, they love going out for a run. Her mother got hurt by playing with her next to a cliff, and can no longer run dew to her leg. Breakneck Vanner, Or Vanner for short, almost gave up running because of it, but after her mother kept telling her to run and that it was her destiny she finally did. When she did she reached her top speed and earned her cutie mark.

But know she protects her land from the virus they call The Magic Eaters, (I don't think I need to explain what it doses, but it can take away wings) Since she's a earth pony she is immune. She also has special pony shoes that give her kick more power, made by her dad.

Weaknesses: (Because if any oc doesn't have any there probably op) If she keeps her top speed for more 15 seconds she'll need at lest an hour to recover, meaning pretty much laying on the ground gasping for air for an hour.

She also only wants to fight alone witch can be dangerous.

Can be very bossy

Doesn't respect the princesses.

And lastly name origin "Breakneck"

A shorting of breakneck speed tell the viewer she is very fast, and if you really look into it, it tells you she's very fast thinking and quick to assess a problem.

Vanner, again is the second word in Jypsy Vanner horse breed, telling you her build and looks.

So the first part tells you her talent and the second one tells you her look.

Thoughts: Nice! Creative! I like it! There is only one thing I might change about it. The whole magic eaters thing. I feel like it's a bit strange. If a character is going to protect their land from something, it should be a canon thing (Though not a villain). I feel if you are going to add this, which you may, you should add HOW she dos it and WHY she does it. Other than that, I can tell you put a lot of though into this oc! Good job!

Rating: 8 1/2/10