The Death of Solace
Author: gery_anne

Here comes my insights about your story. 🐱🐱

Plot - Your plot was really interesting to read. It has a spice of reality. Especially the illegal businesses going on in your story. Though it is in school but the story really fits the interest of some adult readers and also our teenager readers. I can't say no more other than your ideas in this plot is totally amazing and I praise you for that.

Cover - Your cover is so calm, quiet and peaceful. Different from the content of your story but it fits the characteristics of Solace. No point in changing it.

Setting - There's a little bit problem in your settings. In chapter 3 where Quillon got home and he's in the office of his father then after that it goes back to the school and you didn't put some indication there that you change the setting. Other than that there's no other problem.

Blurb - I must say it's a bit long but it's really attracting readers. At first I thought that it will be a tragic ending story but because of the blurb it give me a chance that maybe it's a happy ending. Will I don't have any idea about the ending 'cause it is your story. All I have to do is to wait. Good job for making the blurb eye-catching.

Descriptive Words - You're both good at making descriptive words in Filipino and English. Especially in Filipino. As a critic for me descriptive word is so special. 'Cause it makes your sentences interesting and amazing. That's what I really love the most. As a reader I will be bored reading some common words used in a story. So it is better to add descriptive words.

Emotions of your Characters - Another good job in this part. You are really letting the readers feel the emotions of your characters in the story not all writers can do these things honestly. One of the hardest part in writing a story is to make the emotions of your characters real and true. That's what you do so again good job.

Tone of Quillon - Honestly he's tone is a bit girly sometimes and that's the reason it didn't fit his characteristics. And also I notice sometimes his tone doesn't connect to his emotions. If you're not busy of course you can fix this matter.

Connection to the Genre - It has a little bit connection to the Teenfiction but mostly your story really fits the general fiction.

I give you 97.8/100%

So this is the end of my insights about your story.

Suggestions - Change your genre into General Fiction and fix the tone of Quillon. That's all I can suggest for you to improve more. Your writing skills is okay for me. It's not perfect but it will do 'cause honestly we all know that there's no perfect in the world.

My advice - Same advice to the other writers. Continue writing and let your ideas flow within you. No one can stop you from writing except yourself. Writing is your passion if you have some errors or someone says hurtful words about your story don't feel down, it is just an obstacles for you to improve and also you can still correct your errors. You have a great ideas and you're a proud Filipino writer. God bless you always in writing.

I hope this critique of mine help you a lot. If you still want my insights about your story you can come back here anytime. ❤❤