Loving Her Husband
Author: eleb_heart

Here comes my insights about your story. 🐱🐱

Plot - I praise you for the amazing plot you made. Medyo mabilis nga lang 'yong flow ng story mo pero 'yong main content nandoon pa rin. Your story is not common but it has a big impact to the readers. Lalo na 'yong mga adult readers natin. Because your story has a connection in real life. Especially the mistress part that's a big impact and a sin. Hanga ako sa ideya mo sa pagbuo nitong kwentong ito. Good job.

Blurb - Kulang sa impact 'yong blurb mo. Dapat sa blurb pa lang nakaka-attract ka na ng mga readers. Your story's genre is romance so you must make your blurb attractive.

Cover - The background picture is okay but the font you use is not. Masyado siyang manipis at hindi nagkasya sa cover mo 'yong font. Naputol 'yong ibang mga letters sa title mo. I suggest you change the font and don't make it to big.

Technicalities - Too many to mention. Such as grammatical errors mostly plus technical errors. Sabi mo nga sa author's note mo na hindi mo pa ito na-e-edit. That's understandable but since you already completed the story I suggest you start editing it.

Setting - Since the flow of your story is fast I suggest you should put indications whenever you change the scene of your story. If possible bold the first word whenever you change the scene or you can use this... *** or ---- like that for indications. And also I like your scene for making it realistic. You are rich in mental images and that's good.

Characteristics of your Characters - Perfectly done. I love how you made their characteristics realistic. Bridgette is the wife of Philip and I like her for fighting her rights as Philip's wife but I also hate her for lying also Jake for loving Alliyah even though Alliyah doesn't love him back. I love Alliyah for being so tough. Palaban siya at isa iyon sa mga nagustuhan ko sa kanya. Philip's big assets for me was his possessiveness. Another good job for you.

I give you 95.8/100%

So this is the end of my insights about your story.

Suggestions - Proofread your story but if you don't want to it's better if you start editing it yourself. The blurb, also I suggest you put some descriptive words in it to make it more attractive. The cover, just change the font if possible. Other than that I don't have anymore concerns about your story.

My advice - All I said here came from my heart. These are all my opinion but I am honest with it. I'm not sugarcoating any story of my clients. And all I can say is that you are talented, we are all talented. Other writers have their own specialty and uniqueness you also have yours. So believe more in your inner voice cause that's what makes you the best. Writing is a struggle, it is easy to imagine but it's not easy to put it into words remember that. So kung may mali ka man magagawan mo iyan ng paraan para maiayos. Keep writing and enjoy every moment you have together with your pen. God bless you always.

I hope this critique of mine help you a lot. If you still want my insights about your story you can come back here anytime. ❤❤