Dark Realm
Author: ashamelessintrovert

Here comes my insights about your story. 🐱🐱

Plot - This is the best so far. It's so rare believe me I've never read something like this in my entire life. You totally nailed it. Your plot is totally amazing and interesting. I can't stop myself from craving more chapters. Honestly I'm still stucked in your story in chapter 9 and still waiting for you to update. God your story had bewitched me.

Blurb - Blurb is not the same with the synopsis. So I hope you can make it clear cause you have the same blurb and synopsis.

Cover - It's not attractive to catch some readers into your story. Your story have some thrills in it but your cover looks so calm and dull. Honestly it's so low quality for me. I know some of the writers doesn't give important to the covers but honestly book cover is a big asset for your story to be eye-catching.

Mental Images - You're good at these. It's not hard for me to imagine what your story would look like. You have balanced the show and tell part and good job to that. Mostly some of the writers cannot balance the show and tell but in your case it is easy for you. I'm happy that you are potentially talented.

Emotions of your Characters - Another good job for you. You let me feel their emotions. That's why I love your story cause I feel like I really know them that they can share what they are feeling at the moment to me. I feel like I am part of the story.

Technicalities - You don't have much errors in these. So never mind the technicalities you can still edit them after you complete the story.

Descriptive Words - One of my favorite in your story. You have so many of these which make your story interesting to read. Keep this up 'til the end. I really love them.

I give you 99/100

So this is the end of my insights about your story.

Suggestion - Make the blurb and synopsis clear that's all I can suggest for you cause honestly there's no more problem in your story.

My Advice - All I want for you is to cotinue writing cause as of now I'm one of your fan. I don't know why but your story catch my attention. Keep up the good work. I wish you the best. 

I hope this critique of mine help you a lot. If you still want my insights about your story you can come back here anytime. ❤❤